Douluo: I Am Not Yu Xiaogang's Second Best

It's such a mess😥

General de Gaulle, how many divisions you have, I'm afraid you will be beaten to pieces by Marshal Rommel.

The author wants to write a good story, but the writing is not good. It is like telling a story, with a prelude, a process, a climax, an end, etc., But the author jumps in. It is possible that this is the end, and the next paragraph becomes the process again, and then when he tells the next thing, it becomes the prelude to the previous one.

Is this going to create a free star?

Your writing style can actually support the small popularity of this book, and your creativity is actually okay, but your flashback is really trying to persuade you to quit. Even a ten-year-old bookworm like me can't stand it.

What the hell is this? I can't understand it. It doesn't make sense at all.

I'm sorry that I deleted a book review by swiping before. Every piece of feedback you have is very important to me. I will read it carefully and try my best to improve it.

Gee, after reading five or six chapters, I feel so chaotic

How to say? The idea is very good, but the writing is very compact. I usually find other novels to be dull, but this one is too compact. I can't say outline when talking about the outline, because the writing is quite good. However, it is still worth watching, after all, he is not watery. Compared to other movies, it's so short, so exciting to watch, and the content is pretty good.

Use less related words later, and be sure to force yourself to limit the number of related words you use in a chapter! I use it in every paragraph. It doesn't read like a novel. The tone is very stiff. I didn't use more related words in my graduation thesis.

I read 6 chapters, all of which are descriptions. If you can't bring in the protagonist, can't you, the author, throw out the setting stage by stage? Write it out in one go and let me check the settings. As for the advancement of the plot, I hope the author will not omit everything. For example, the scene where Yu Xiaogang was beaten would be enough to fill a chapter. Author, you just skip it and we don't know anything.

After reading the first few chapters, the writing is not very good, but the ideas are still good.

Based on my understanding of the following parts, I proposed the method of soul core and the cultivation methods of the following parts. Entering the city of killing attracted several great god kings to rob it. I will briefly extract it for you after reading the opening. Otherwise, I will be reading the book of heaven. Chinese was taught by this author from a physical education teacher.

The author's writing style is about the same. He is excellent when writing a Douluo fan. His imagination is also good, and the plot and graphics are good. However, he uses flashback techniques to write the book. I read it one after another. The plot is not coherent. It is a fun article to read and requires us readers to assemble the plot. It lacks a sense of satisfaction.

It's too long-winded. It feels like you are introducing yourself. It's too long-winded. And it doesn't feel like much, and listening to books feels boring.

The main character's name doesn't work. Serious sense of disobedience

What it means is not very clear.

Is there a commander named Pétain?

This setting is good, but the incoherent chapter you wrote does not match up.

The idea creation is very good, but the way you start the novel is really not good. It is too easy to persuade people to quit. I started in Tiandou, then in the Killing City, and then followed Shrek. There is no time to position myself. I suggest you modify the start.

Do all the novels you open have multiple female protagonists?