I, Lin Pingzhi, Span the Heavens

First of all, after reading Chapter 14, there are a few flaws. First, when hunting wild boars, the protagonist suddenly took out a hidden weapon, a silver-feathered arrow. I didn't see it mentioned before that the protagonist practiced this. Maybe you mentioned it casually, but I missed it, but I didn't see any introduction to the level of practice of the silver-feathered arrow. As a result, he suddenly became proficient and gave an entry with perfect accuracy. This is obviously an important point, but you didn't write it down. It is a flaw. Second point, on the issue of internal strength, you first said that the protagonist's father can obtain a collection of internal strength that is not inferior to that of the martial arts. Then you said that the protagonist does not practice internal strength, and you did not say what to ask. It is quite baffling. Later, you said that it is because after mastering martial arts, the internal strength is self-generated, which is actually quite funny. , In martial arts novels like Swordsman, even if you have perfected your sword skills, you still have no internal strength without practicing internal strength. It is impossible to generate internal strength on your own. Sword skills are moves, and internal strength is blue bars. If you just upgrade your skills to the full level without adding blue bars, you can't release your skills. This is a flaw. Some book friends commented that the escort agency cannot escort iron cannons. In fact, it is easy to understand. You can just write that it is the corruption of the prefect himself, reselling arms and using private channels. After all, the Fuwei Escort Bureau is also a local snake force that has been operating in the local area for two or three generations. It is normal to help local officials do some smuggling and make some money. It is not difficult to understand. The Japanese pirates are a bit of a drama here, but they can barely be said to be passable. Generally speaking, the writing is smooth and clear, and the layout is quite appropriate. It is not too big or too small, which is good. However, it is recommended to modify the previous ones. More people will read it and the results will be better. Martial arts is not a popular subject in the first place. You have to pay more attention to details when you want to come up with results. Come on, more updates.

Smiling proudly in the world. You only practice moves but not internal skills? What do the Huashan Zixia Magic Power, Songshan Ice Qi, and Shaolin Yi Jin Jing mean?

There's a ridiculous plot at the beginning, where you have internal skills but don't practice them.

Anyone who has traveled through time should know that internal strength is the basis, right?

This is a stallion novel without pornographic parts. Before even reading a few chapters, there are a lot of ambiguous supporting female characters. The appearance rate of these female supporting characters is higher than the highlight entries and martial arts in this book. This type of book was about the same seven years ago. Who wants to read ambiguous books now? Even if you have the courage to drive a lot and just read it, I don't want to complain about it.

It looks good, come on, I like Brigitte Lin's version of The Sunflower Book the most. The invisible and intangible martial arts are the most terrifying. You can hit someone with one palm and explode out of thin air.

Practicing martial arts without practicing kung fu will lead to nothing.

If there are more than 100 chapters in this world, I won't read it!

But the fighting scenes are like the ocean and you are all water, and they are not satisfying at all, they are unpleasant and make you anxious to watch them. The plot is good, but the author's writing is not good enough. . . .

The writing is okay. The only drawback is that there are too few updates. This is the amount of updates the author has made

I've already met Fan Sizhe once before. The chapter on Baoyue Tower was treated as if it was the first time, so I don't know how to ghostwrite it.