The Mechanical Rhythm of Magic

When you update, subtle flaws will be magnified, and the greenness of the writing will be criticized. When you update twice, a little patience is born, and the progress of the plot is paid more attention to. When you are on the third watch, the little praise begins to sound, and the number of dead harvests begins to decrease. When you finish the fifth update, readers' support will spontaneously form, and the voices of praise will become louder and louder. When you are ten o'clock, the great Confucian's debate on scriptures is deafening, and the tolerant attitude is implemented both internally and externally. When you are twenty, the memory of the bookworm has a place for you. Even in a long life, your name will leave dazzling traces. Updating may not solve all difficulties, but more than 90% of problems come from insufficient updates. So, don't stop. Update, update, update (copied and pasted, I don't have that much ink)

When I reached chapter 50, I couldn't stand it anymore. It was written too quickly and too messily It felt like a dish of random stew was served in a hurry, but it was not cooked through The protagonist seems to have his own ideas. He seems to have strong insights from time to time, but he is pushed away throughout the whole process. He is very similar to the mysterious clown of fate. He can't resist even if he wants to, but the author's writing is not in place, which makes people look very awkward and bored.

I've opened a new book. I thought I could read a Harry Potter book.

I heard that the author is going to write Harry Potter after finishing it, and I would like to say a few words specifically, hoping that the author can read it 😁 After reading novels for so many years, The Gray Wizard is the first novel that I have fully subscribed to. After reading it, other Harry fans can't stand it 😥. It should be difficult for the author to surpass himself (after all, he has spread my imagination too far, and it is difficult to grasp the balance between the original work and the second setting. In addition, I just I like the author's imagination, but don't compliment the author's plot 😃), and writing Harry Potter fan fiction is better than writing other novels or animations, so that the author's imagination can be used 😃 I am very convinced of the author in terms of perfecting the completion setting of the original work 👍 I also have two suggestions. I hope the author will also change his preference to write about the protagonist's previous life, and then come back to understand and upgrade. This is very interesting. As for killing, the protagonists of the author's novels don't like killing, or there is always a reason for the protagonist not to kill. It doesn't mean that the protagonist must kill decisively, but just wants it to be clean and neat. Not all characters must be retained. No matter how good, rare or unique the opponent's ability is, first of all, he is your enemy, the one who wants to kill you! Especially when you were still a weakling at the beginning of the story, you worked hard and finally defeated your opponent. Instead of finishing the last hit, you learned from the opponent (killing the old wizard is very enjoyable, but what about the original openings of the following books? I don't know whether the protagonist is stupid and bold or a man who is obsessed with gaining extraordinary power) Finally, I hope the author can summarize the experience of these books. Why does the Gray Wizard perform well? Why did the subsequent original works perform poorly? This is not something that can be summed up by just one factor: "fan fiction". There must be other problems. To sum up, I would like to break out of the original thinking mode. I really don't recommend writing Harry Potter fan fiction. I hope that the results of the next book will explode and hit the top ten in the next month's vote list ✊

I've been reading it since the first Gray Wizard. The author is very creative and the power system is also very novel. But the second original work began to have rhythm problems. The plot processing was not smooth enough. The protagonist has been dealing with enemies that are much stronger than him, and he cannot experience the feeling of fighting wits. He has been suppressed from all aspects, and there is no sense of satisfaction like online novels. The reviews were getting worse day by day, and I gave up reading it halfway. I haven't read it for a year, but it's already the fourth book. Has the author improved his ability to control rhythm now?

I would like to ask if the male protagonist likes Fiona. If he doesn't like Fiona, he will do everything to her. Moreover, he can't feel the respect of a spellcaster who is eager to gain spellcasting talent. Also, why did the protagonist kill a group of Dune Giant Worms and Kuku divided the protagonist's property. It seems very awkward for no reason.

The writing is very rough and there are too few prototypes. It is still recommended that the author uses games or other worlds as prototypes for processing. It is too difficult for one person to complete the world setting. The game world or other mature settings are all developed by the team.

Those who have been able to follow you till now are all your loyal readers. Apart from anything else, we can learn from any mistakes we make and correct them after learning. It's not like you have no bright spots, it's really not difficult to change now. Your plot is incoherent, not simply incoherent, but you have certain flaws. The place where you should always be happy is not cool enough, that's the problem. You can ask your editor, he is an expert

? Didn't he become a eunuch after defrauding a lot of money? What the hell

The setting is interesting, but not that exciting.