The Mechanical Rhythm of Magic

When you update once, even the smallest flaws will be magnified, and the writing style will be affected. Their inexperience will be criticized. When you're up two hours past the hour, a little patience is born, and the plot... The progress of [the project] is receiving more attention. When you're up at midnight, even the smallest praises begin to emerge, and the dead stock...

I couldn't continue reading after chapter 50; the writing was too rushed and disorganized. It felt like a hastily served stew that wasn't even properly cooked. The protagonist seems to have his own ideas, and appears to have moments of profound insight, but he's constantly being pushed along, much like the enigmatic Clown of Fate. He wants to resist but can't, yet the author's writing is lacking, making the story feel awkward and frustrating.

A new book has been released! I thought I'd get to read another Harry Potter book.

I heard the author is planning to write Harry Potter after finishing this one, so I wanted to say a few words in the hopes that the author will see this. 😁 Having read so many novels over the years, The Grey Wizard was the first novel I subscribed to in its entirety. After finishing it, I couldn't stand other Harry Potter fanfics anymore 😥.

I've been following this series since the very first book, Grey Wizard. The author is incredibly creative, and the power system is quite novel. However, the second original novel started to suffer from pacing issues. The plot wasn't handled smoothly enough, and the protagonist was constantly facing enemies much stronger than himself.

I want to ask if the male protagonist likes Fiona. If he doesn't, why does he indulge her in everything? And why does he completely lack the respect that a spellcaster, someone desperately seeking to gain power, would show to a spellcaster? Also, why did the group of people who killed the dune worms just give Kuku a share of the protagonist's wealth? It's so unfair and feels very awkward.

The writing is very rough, and there are too few prototypes. I still suggest that the author use games or other worlds as prototypes for development, as it is too difficult for one person to complete the world setting. Game worlds or other mature settings are all perfected by teams.

Those who have followed you this far are your loyal readers. Putting everything else aside, we can learn from your mistakes and correct them. You're not without merits; fixing them now isn't difficult. Your plot isn't simply disjointed; there are certain flaws. You consistently fail to deliver the expected excitement—that's a problem. You could ask your editor; he's a veteran.

So, they just scammed a bunch of people and then quit? What the heck?

The premise is interesting, but there's no satisfying moment.