Mystery: the Little Witch Doesn't Accept to Be Messed Up

After reading it in one go, the quality of this fanfic is indeed very good. But let me use one word to describe it - regret. Let's look at the advantages first. First of all, the plot of this book is very smooth in the early stage. Everyone has their own position and purpose. It is completely non-dramatic when reading. Coupled with various details, it feels like a mysterious original work. In addition, the author allows each named secondary character to have his own story, rather than being a tool to promote the plot. The characters are connected with each other to form a complete world, which is full of realism. Let's talk about the two protagonists who have been criticized by some people. Although the author emphasizes that "they are not two protagonists", judging from the length of the two novels, the writing and ink of "The Godfather" and "The Witch" are similar. Some people are about to abandon the book after seeing the two protagonists, but why not see what the author writes? From my point of view, this is not a demerit, but a highlight of the work: The "Godfather" plays the role of a guide and has lived in a mysterious world for ten years. He has golden fingers but not many. The author only uses a few strokes interspersed in the text to highlight his background, and uses stories to reflect the characters more. For example: when "The Godfather" plays the faceless man and performs a mission, the author cleverly combines the fan plot with the original work (Ian played by "The Godfather" perfectly reproduces the plot of the original work), and the image of "a professional spy from the Eighth Bureau" emerges vividly on the page; another example is the "Godfather"'s care and training for the orphans. It can also be seen that the "Godfather" is full of humanity and has truly established a connection with the world. He is not like some time-travelers who are aloof and game life, making the image more three-dimensional. As a true indigenous protagonist, "Witch" has a very lovable character: the male-to-female "Witch" is full of slots, has a clear early goal (to become a noble) and has a normal moral bottom line. She is professional and has no weak points. These points alone make her an ordinary mystery fan. The two protagonists have two perspectives, which vividly opens the whole story. The two are related to each other and do not appear to be separate. In short, this "dual protagonist" is definitely worth reading. If I only read Chapter 100, my review would stop there: there is no doubt about the fairy grass. But the various plots after that fell seriously, which also made me put a "sorry" entry. I am a semi-occultist myself, and I have basically read all the occultists from Qidian. But my requirements are relatively high, and I can't stand some books at all, so I was very excited when I saw this book. The plot is serious yet humorous, the plot is told honestly, and the characters are vivid and three-dimensional... Among the books I have read, only "Aurora Society" and "To the New World" are comparable to this book. These three books are considered to be the fairy grass level of mystery fans. Further down are other fans with flaws. "Path of Paradox" makes up for regrets and has great imagination, but the "secret flavor" is not strong; "Starting from the Sealed Object" is fun, but unfinished; "Mr. Witch Hunter Miss" is excellent in the early stage, but I don't know what it means in the middle stage... These are all fodder. Back to the topic, it's time to talk about the poisonous point of this book (a little spoiler + a lot of personal opinions) The serious decline in the plot started when Klein came to Backlund. The most serious problem is: in order to hook up with Xiao Ke, the author ignored the coherence and logic of the plot, and even appeared seriously OOC. Let's look at them one by one. 1. Chloe joins the Tarot Club: First of all, I admit that the foreshadowing of the witch hat is effective, but the author's follow-up treatment is extremely bad. I will briefly summarize the plot: Chloe followed the steam team to defeat the members of the Witch Church, but was out of control by the original pollution, and was rescued by The Fool. This section is really enlightening: even though it is known that the members of the Witch Church are very polluted (contaminated the entire village) and the protagonist is a Sequence 7 "Witch", the protagonist is still required to participate in the action and is only given a talisman to prevent it (actually with little effect). How? Doesn't the protagonist, as the elite of the steam team, deserve more complete protection? Or is it that the Church of Steam, which has been trying its best to describe itself as fully equipped, suddenly runs out of money? Or are the members of the Heart of Steam all 25 and don't want the protagonist to live? No matter what, it doesn't make sense. But the author just wrote it like this, just so that Chloe could get to know the Fool and forcefully owe the Fool a favor. Some people may say: "Oh, there must be risks in taking actions in the extraordinary world. How can we completely prevent them?" But you, the author, should at least write about the contribution of the Steam Church - just two sentences before and after: "The talisman of the Lord will protect you" and "the talisman is broken into slag." It is you, the Steam Church, who made the protagonist come, and it is also your Steam Church who did not provide adequate protection. If you just write a few more words about the concern of colleagues at Steam Heart and the role of church talismans in resisting madness, I would consider you to have tried hard, but no. Of course, some people will also say: "Isn't this possible?" Indeed, there is. But relying solely on "possibility" to promote the story and ignoring the subjective initiative of the characters, did it remind you of a certain person? 2. "The Godfather" and Xiao Ke recognized each other: Originally, the "Godfather" used the ability of the "faceless man" to travel among the major forces. This plot can be regarded as a small climax. But the plots related to Klein are all unbearable: "The Godfather" confirmed through analysis that Xiao Ke is the Fool, and recognized him by helping him make dumplings. Seeing this, I immediately thought "black question mark. Jpg". The author has used the image of the "Godfather" that you have repeatedly created in the previous hundred chapters: decisive in killing (can kill others for the mission and involve irrelevant people in trouble), deeply emotional about the world (actively investigating demon dogs to protect orphans), relatively loyal to the 8th Bureau (developing the offline seriously, obtaining blueprints of the difference machine, and asking Chloe to go to the upper class to inquire for information). In just a few chapters, it has completely collapsed First. You, "Godfather", are such a cautious person, and you know that "The Fool" = Klein, "The Fool" = the great existence of ancient times (what Azik said), that is, Klein = the ancient existence, you actually took the initiative to reveal your identity without any temptation. Author, do you think this is reasonable? Second. "The Godfather" has been deeply integrated into the mysterious world, right? Why do you care so much about the so-called "fellow countrymen"? The plot of "making dumplings" at the end was even more gripping. Anyway, I couldn't feel the slightest bit moved, only a strong sense of unnaturalness. I'm not saying that the protagonist can't be homesick or "cry with tears in his eyes when he meets his fellow countrymen", but you can at least provide some foreshadowing - as much as the previous "Godfather" integrated into the mysterious world, there will be more separation here. 3. Chloe completed the task of assassinating the ambassador: During the Tarot meeting, Audrey and the Fool "forced" Chloe to take over the task of assassinating the ambassador. As a result, Xiao Ke knew that she was from the eighth round and felt proud of the task ("Penalize her ( Chloe) is not allowed to participate in the Tarot Club until the end of the mission"); Chloe sought advice from the "Godfather" (who had not confirmed that Xiao Ke was the Fool at this time), and the "Godfather" said backhand, "Just don't harm me"; in the end, Chloe easily assassinated the ambassador. Seeing this, I can't help but wonder if the author has seen Mystery (just doubt) First. Part of the Tarot Session: Even if "Justice" saw Chloe's uneasiness, how could she point it out directly? Is this in line with the role of the "audience"? The most outrageous thing is that after she discovered the relationship between the ambassador and Chloe, she actually asked Chloe as if she wanted to take credit. This is very different from the kind-hearted and reserved Audrey in the original work. What is this if not OOC? Xiaoke's words and deeds are even more outrageous. Although our readers jokingly call The Fool the "God of 25 Boys", in the original work, how could The Fool ever ask members to directly harm the interests of his organization? In this article, Xiao Ke not only forced Chloe but also felt arrogant about it. This not only made Xiao Ke OOC, but also destroyed the harmonious atmosphere of the entire Tarot Club. Second. The part where Chloe asked for advice: Not to mention the sharp contrast between the "godfather"'s one thousand percent caution at this time and his carelessness later. His reply alone made people's minds explode: "As long as you don't directly harm me." This sentence made me laugh out loud - where is your sense of responsibility towards your godson? Where is your loyalty to Indis? Don't you have any feelings for your boss? Third. The part about assassinating the ambassador: Fortunately, I believed in you, the author. The sentence in this chapter, "You would never imagine the ambassador's role in the story," kept me interested for 50 chapters. Is this the result? The ambassador was easily assassinated? You really fed me a lot 4 Some other poisonous points: "The Godfather" was inexplicably thrown into the underworld by Azik; "The Godfather" inexplicably explored the ruins of the red evil spirit with Xiaoke, Azik was inexplicably unable to crush it, the inexplicable battle, and the inexplicable distribution of spoils. In short, I can't help but wonder if the author was overtaken by a third-rate writer. The gap between the previous and later texts can be so huge! Finally, to summarize, although I have a lot of resentment towards the author, it is only because you could have been better, but ended up being worse. This does not mean that the book is bad, on the contrary, I highly recommend reading this book. In the mysterious fandom area of ​​Qidian that is full of fun people, cloud readers, plots to subdue intelligence, small heads controlling big heads, etc., "Little Witch" still has its flaws.

When you update, subtle flaws will be magnified, and the greenness of the writing will be criticized. When you update twice, a little patience is born, and the progress of the plot is paid more attention to. When you are on the third watch, the slightest praise begins to sound, and the number of dead harvests begins to decrease. When you read the fifth update, readers' support spontaneously formed, and the voices of praise became louder and louder. When you are at the tenth watch, the Confucian debates are deafening, and the tolerant attitude is implemented both inside and outside. When you are twenty, you will have a place in the bookworm's memories. Even in your long life, your name will leave dazzling traces. Updating may not solve all problems, but more than 90% of the problems come from insufficient updates. So, don't stop, update update update update

Why is it that the Bianwen I see is the kind that is forced to do business, with a bitter and resentful look, and a coy look on its face? Are there those who just want to change and then take the initiative to take the corresponding path, or who quickly accept the change, experience the change with a positive attitude, and still find it interesting?

After reading so many mysterious fan books, this one turned out to be the most fluent in writing.

In fact, I don't quite understand changing orders. I've become a girl, so what's the point if I don't fall in love (it doesn't matter if you're married, no matter you're a man or a woman) 😃. It's no problem to have a career, and it's no problem to transform. The setting is to turn into a girl to have a career. I understand that I can't 😵 I wonder if being a girl doesn't affect the career, or the heroine can directly pursue a career. What is the picture of changing orders🤔

Since this work is a niche subject among niche subjects, and the narrative method is relatively non-mainstream, it can easily cause controversy and misunderstanding (I have deleted very few unfriendly comments before). Here, I will give unified answers to the doubts I collected some time ago and the questions that will arise in the future: Q: Is this a remarriage? (Is this a change of hundreds?) A: This is a change of singles, no ambiguity, no emotional line (at least the protagonist does not). Q: Will he turn into a hunter and become a man in the later stage? A: No. The author is considered an old literature lover and will not make such meaningless mistakes. Q: Two protagonists? A: There are not two protagonists, only the witch can be the protagonist. Q: Will the protagonist join the Tarot Club? A: The story begins at the end of July, and the stage is set in Backlund. With Klein coming to Backlund in mid-September (Chapter 118), our protagonist and him will inevitably have an intersection. The protagonist will also draw a tarot card of his own later. Of course, the main theme of this book will not be licking, nor will it follow the path of the original work - this is not a time-travelling book, no one knows who Klein is, and what kind of existence the Fool is (Thierry, the time-traveler, will uncover Klein's vest. As for the specific plot, please allow me to retain suspense here). Q: What is the position of traveler Thierry? Is he the protagonist's golden finger? A: The time traveler Thierry is the guide for the indigenous protagonist Chloe. Without this guide, Chloe, as a native, would not be able to escape the shackles of the times, nor would she be able to access the deeper mysteries of the mysterious world. The relationship between Thierry and Chloe is like The Fool to the Tarot Society and Russell to the Industrial Revolution. Lazy Thierry doesn't understand his own golden finger, so how can he become Chloe's golden finger? It's entirely possible to think of Chloe as a protagonist without a golden finger. ………… In addition, readers (readers from where Xiaopu Street comes from 😭) are welcome to ask questions, and I will actively answer them without spoiling the story. (continuously updated)

Have you ever been a witch? Some things are written randomly, taking it for granted

I've finished reading the first volume, and the rhythm is very poor. The writing is relatively fluent, but you spent so much space in the first volume writing about the human world, how to gain status in Backlund, how to catch the devil, and the final ending was that you got nothing and felt disgusted, and then the entire gain in the first volume was lost because of a lower-body animal? I can understand that there is no problem with the logic of your novel. A witch and wild supernatural being without a backer wants to climb to the top of the kingdom's power. Faced with the hunting of those big shots, but this is what you talked about in the entire first volume? The protagonist's strength increases by one sequence, and then everything introduced in the introduction is overthrown and he runs away on the sea. Do you think your writing in this volume was more enjoyable? You have always been disgusted by those powerful people and were finally forced out of Backlund. So what do you want to express in this volume? Expressing the change in the protagonist's mentality that he no longer pursues status but strength? You spend a hundred chapters as a fan, but there is no climax. All the hard work of a hundred chapters is ruined by a noble, and then you write a mentality change that goes against the introduction. Do you think your results are too good? Just because the logic of what you wrote is fine doesn't mean that people will like you if you write this way. I have nothing to say, so I'm done with my book.

It's quite outrageous. The result of The Witch is that you cut your hair short and pretend to be a man, so why don't I just read the story about the male protagonist. Or the two protagonists have an additional male time traveler.

The most uncomfortable thing about the Lord of Mysteries and the Ring of Fate is undoubtedly these nobles. In this aristocratic system, it can be said that all the chaos, sin and misery are inseparable from the nobles. But the original work has never dealt with it. Even if you have the power to destroy the world, you still have to negotiate with the nobles. It seems that the nobles have really become the foundation of the world. This is one of the reasons why many people say that Cuizu has unhealthy ideas. I hope that the protagonist can see clearly the hypocrisy of the aristocrats, abolish the aristocratic system, create the end of the aristocratic feudal system, and create a new life for the masses. It corresponds to the last part of the witch's path, the end and rebirth of an era.

Since the protagonist is a little witch, why is it always in the background? There are also two parallels, one person's main character is changed just halfway through the plot, which is really uncomfortable to watch.

I didn't agree with Shen Nong in the comment circle at first, but then I saw the plot of the first tarot session, and I was really poisoned 🙂 The author should find time to change it. It's really uncomfortable. Delete those psychological activities that are difficult to grasp.

It feels like the protagonist is no longer the protagonist from the late second chapter, but more like a supporting role to promote the development of the plot.

The protagonist is far from being the protagonist. He is always controlled by someone else. There is no highlight plot, the combat power is rubbish, and there are only a few scenes. It is uncomfortable to watch. I can only say that what you wrote is worthy of your current achievements.

The protagonist is a male aboriginal who transformed into a male, and the supporting characters are from time travel. I don't know the rest. After all, I haven't watched the rest 😴

Can you please stop writing about nobles? It's really boring to watch 😴 Why does the protagonist have to become a noble 🤔 Not to mention demigods, isn't Sequence 5 much stronger than most nobles? 😅

Really, author, believe me, this is an absolute poisonous point in my first Tarot session. The guy below is very rough and rational. According to what he said, the perception will be much better 🙂 I have read so many fans, I can't be wrong.

Forget about the dual protagonists, there are also a bunch of original characters. Forget the original characters and create a bunch of original plots. Forget the original plot, is your dual protagonist role too watery? The plot of dozens of chapters is as bland as water, and the whole process of going out to do tasks is as bland as water. I originally said that I was going to fight pirates, but I ended up running away. It's so boring

Dear white-haired person: Seeing the words is like meeting each other, showing your trust and comfort.                                                                                                                                                                                                                             The most arbitrary and unreasonable thing in the world is probably the most arbitrary and unreasonable thing. It is not about weighing the pros and cons, not being motivated by sex, but suddenly there is one of your articles that makes me worried and unable to let go. You are the extraneous branch in my stable years, and the sun, moon and stars in my ordinary life. Whether it's the sunrise in the morning, a nap at noon, or a night filled with stars, I want to spend it with you. Don't doubt why I like you, just like fish fall in love with the sea, birds fall in love with the sky, I don't quite understand what this means, I think it's like breathing, no need to practice, just because it's you. By the way, if you have any more articles, remember to post them.

Finished with scattered flowers

Urgent, urgent, urgent

I started reading it when the plot of Lady of the Sea was updated, then I gave up intermittently and picked it up again. The biggest feeling this book gives me is the wonderful and wonderful ideas that always make people shine. Due to the low traffic of this book, the comments are often the output of emotions, and critical voices account for almost all of them. This is obviously unfair, especially for the second half, where there is almost no discussion to be found. Whether it is the design of the two protagonists, the growth experience of a cute child, or the later twisting of paths to create a temporary fourth pillar, the author's ingenuity is demonstrated. Of course, there are also shortcomings often mentioned in the comment area. After the completion, the problem of slow updates has ended. Then, the best way to solve the remaining reading experience is to close all comments and read quickly and immersively. As mentioned before, the comment area is basically focused on criticism and emotional output. There is no need to read it. It not only interrupts your thinking, but also affects your perception. I believe that reading happily in one breath can bring a completely different experience 😊

I watched it intensively for two days and the result told me that it's not finished yet. I glanced at the update and it's not very stable. It's too painful. Don't mess with me.

The writing is better than what was said in the comment area. I didn't follow the last few chapters, so I made up for it on May Day. I was very imaginative in the early stage and it was very comfortable to read. However, I felt a little weak in the later stage. I hope the author can write better works. Finally, I wish the author a happy May Day!

Why does the protagonist choose the power card in the Tarot meeting? Mystery has a title: beacon of destiny. It seems like you can't choose randomly, right? Strength represents the Twilight Giant Warrior path, right?

I ran away and the two protagonists didn't even talk about it. They still became aborigines. I wasted 5 minutes. It's disgusting.

By the way, if I write Lily at the starting point, will I be banned? A little curious

Even if you don't become a god, it's still very beautiful, but the pace is a bit too fast later on.