Lord: No More Pretending, I'm Building a Kingdom

The protagonist never gets the magic potion, it's too bland

There may be changes in the future

Xihuan, please refine it for me! 2Grandpa! Doctor! Such a noun! What do you think?

The arrangement of your cottage is a bit abrupt. There are so many people eating horses and chewing, where will the food and grass come from? Also, you are a peace seeker who is more of a capitulator than a capitulator. Your political appeal is wrong. The author should write according to his own ideas first, and sort out the pitfalls after writing.

Although you used time travel, in fact, the protagonist you wrote is no different from a native. The whole novel is too ordinary, too ordinary, and has no characteristics at all. Although the author wants to weaken the golden finger and lay the foundation and write it slowly, the writing is too ordinary and there are no surprises. Not even a place that attracts readers can be seen. Don't talk about the future. No readers have even read the early stage.

Tian Wen like you is too plain. It would be okay if you didn't have extraordinary power. Now that you have the setting of extraordinary power, this is your failure.

The protagonists are all the second son of an earl, and their extraordinary abilities are still limited. So are there only a few hundred extraordinary people? ? ?

The author should remove the system flow tag. The introduction confirms that there is no system store and the golden finger is a portable map. However, the system flow tag of the work will dissuade some people.

Pay attention to nouns and sentence structures. Eastern-oriented nouns and sentence structures appear in Western Fantasy, which is very uncomfortable and out of place. Then the author's outline plan must be in harmony with the development of the novel world at this stage. Otherwise, if it is just for the sake of the outline, it will feel that the plot development does not conform to the logic of the current world view of the novel.

Western fantasy themes are all about knights and magic. Construction and military are the mainstream. Improving one's own strength is a sense of satisfaction. I refer to the books with good results. This is basically the formula. If the writing is good, you can explain everything clearly and you can become popular.