Douluo: Martial Soul Overlord Spear, Titled Gun God

Does the royal family have an orphanage? You think this is a modern society. There were only beggars in feudal society. Where are the orphanages? If you say that you go to various cities to collect orphans who have awakened martial arts and have good soul power and train them individually, I believe it, but adopting orphans before awakening is really a daydream.

Can you please stop it? I said earlier that I didn't want to get involved in the God War, but later I wanted to help Qian Renxue. Unfortunately, I also said that I finally had an independent line, but in the end I was still a stallion?

Can you please stop doing it? I have never heard of Cold Crystal Blood Dragon Ginseng. Crystal Blood Dragongin is pretty much the same.

I know the protagonist is a child, but your writing style is too childish.

There is nothing but porn every day. I wrote several whale glue pictures... Disgusting

I'm speechless. The genius with full soul power. After getting the first soul ring, he was besieged by others. He was rescued back and forth like a marshal's slave... It's enough to send a high-level soul saint to catch it back. The protagonist also needs to go out on his own... Various wild places. It's not too late to teach him slowly after his experience reaches level 3.4... This is written without thinking.

The writing is really messy 😰😰😰

What you wrote is not at all like Douluo Continent where personal strength is supreme. On the contrary, it is about traditional dynasties where imperial power is supreme. You don't see that personal strength is supreme. What happened when I was young and I promised Dugu Yan to go home together? How dare the Tiandou Empire offend Dugu Bo? You have to act like a fool again! What you write is a fantasy novel, not an ordinary dynasty novel, where people will be destroyed if they don't do it for themselves! ! !

Are these recent photos a bit too licky? The Blue Electric Tyrannosaurus Rex family. Before the engagement, I was given several pieces of the soul bones of a stupid cow, and then I agreed to a lot more as a betrothal gift (the betrothal gift also included ten thousand-year soul bones). The Blue Electric Tyrannosaurus Rex family is still making things difficult for the protagonist, but they haven't exploded yet. Is it too licky?

Damn it, it's a lot of nonsense, it will make you feel sick after reading this.

It's so rubbish. What did you write? The writing is so childish.

Overall, it feels good. From my personal point of view, some of the plot descriptions are too strong, and the expression of emotions is exaggerated, and the feeling is a bit embarrassing The protagonist also behaves a bit childishly. Douluo people are generally quite precocious, both physically and mentally.

It should be named Douluo: Everyone Becomes Intelligent

After reading a little bit, I can only say that the characters, including the protagonist, are written in line with the average IQ of Douluo Continent, and they are also a little bit shocking from time to time. For example, a "White Tiger" Soul Douluo from the Star Luo Empire went to the Tiandou Empire to assassinate a Xiantian Man. The child with soul power, tsk tsk tsk tsk, has the same "astonishing wisdom" as the innate level 20 angel who went undercover to steal the kingdom for the prince. It can only be said that the author has studied Douluo Dalu thoroughly, otherwise he would not be able to write an original plot.

What are you pretending to be? Yasi is tired

There is a bit too much inner drama, and it can be reduced appropriately. I know you want to show the psyche of an adult, but for others to have inner drama in one sentence, and in another sentence, it is a bit too much.

Before traveling through Douluo, everyone scolded Tang San, but after traveling through time, he transformed into a stallion.

On October 2nd, the 5th most read book on QQ's new book list, no one reads it here, well... It's hard to read!

Chapter 20 will be available soon. . . .

How should I put it, it just has a weird feeling, and it always has an indescribable taste compared to other fans.

I know the protagonist is young and has an old soul and needs to pretend to be young, but isn't it too much? He is also six years old. The students of Notting College in the original book are all very competitive. Why does the protagonist know how to eat? He must have at least a competitive spirit. As a result, the six-year-old child feels that he only has the IQ of a three-year-old, and he is pretending to be young.

It's so laborious to fight, it's funny

Not so good, I got 3 Douluo titles for the Blue Electric Tyrannosaurus, but in the end I was not satisfied that the Douluo titles were only 100, but I could find a wife with full soul power for each one, but in the end I agreed.