Elf: Look, This Is the Trainer!

The first thing I felt was okay, but when I went to collect the baby dragon, I had an uncomfortable feeling. One of the reasons why the dragons are incompatible is that they fight each other for territory. The round land shark and the baby dragon are too similar and contradictory. All I can say is that no matter how good the preparation is in the front, it will be bad in the back. At the beginning, he established the character of a tough guy who would do anything if he refused, and then he started to learn super powers. Zhang Fei used an embroidery needle, right? It would be strange if it didn't collapse later. Go away and say goodbye!

What I wrote doesn't feel like it's for others to read, it feels like I wrote it for my own intracranial carnival. The protagonist's writing is so eloquent. He has to explain everything. I write one sentence to explain one sentence. It's so tiring to watch😫

First of all, I want to demonstrate why the water cannon is not even as good as the water wave First, the hit rate of the water cannon is impressive, only 80. And it is said to be 80, but in fact it is pitifully low. Even in PVE, just missing it can cure hypotension. Water quality fluctuation has at least 100 hits, and even 20 may cause chaos Secondly, even if the power of water cannon is 110, it is still not as good as water quality fluctuations, hot water, surfing and other skills. They have higher tactical value, such as 100 hits, 30% burn, and all-attack. Secondly, the water cannon of Shui Yueyu must be learned at level 42. Although the new generation can be learned at level 39, it is not a few levels behind. Byd, can you lose to a gym with level 42? The previous owner was Arceus who challenged him? Forget it, we already have the Orb rings, it makes sense.

After reading the introduction, I didn't have the desire to watch it. Transform into Mewtwo Takruto? Transform into Rayquaza and fight the God of Creation?

At first glance, I feel that it is a YY novel. Let's not talk about Mewtwo Tagroudon, but about Rayquaza fighting alpacas. I can only say that he fainted, right? Alpaca can beat Rayquaza into a roadside ✌️🐶

With a subject like yours, wouldn't it be good to write about Digimon? What kind of Pokémon are you doing? The trainers are already on the field themselves, and how can they be called trainers?

Subscribe to the first chapter, blah blah blah, talk about human relationships over there, and keep turning over and over, there is a high probability that a lot of people will stop reading. The second chapter starts with the plot, it would be better if you put it in the first chapter of the subscription. Look at these, it's better to buy chicken soup from a regular publishing house. After all, a lot of people who can write this kind of soup-filled articles are just a bunch of bastards. Why do such bastards use the philosophy of life to be another punk?

It's all fancy, just a fantasy before being beaten to death by a super newbie in a wild fight. After watching it for a long time, I felt that my body was not as strong as Xiao Zhi's.

A purely narrative and explanatory article, a very long student composition with too much nonsense, suitable for people with zero basic knowledge of Pokémon.

In other aspects, the author's writing style is indeed good, and the settings are also outstanding. He is definitely an experienced author. But there are still mistakes, such as the direction of the portrayal of Pokémon's characters, and the one who used lost objects to make his own money-this is probably criticized by moral defenders, and will be attacked by peers, . It's just that... The pace is a bit fast. This may be the first time the author has written about Pokémon. With the current number of chapters, if the book is 800,000 words, it will be no problem. If you really want to write it down, it may be difficult later. It is only thirty chapters, 60,000 words, and most of the team has already arrived. The adventure has not yet started, and few main characters (humans) have not appeared yet-it is a bit too fast to collect Pokémon. . Most Pokémon stories, even in the mid-term, have millions of words before one Pokémon is added. At that stage, the team is not full, and it is also written for them. The writing is not fresh. Multiple Pokémon can be written more space, or to reverse the loss of control of the plot.

You can't even kill a hunter, just keep it until you are interested.

If possible, change the character's title. Nazi's father is not named Na, and Ma Zhishi is not named Ma, just like Xiaogang's father is not named Xiao Neng but Wu Neng, and the names of Xiao Xia's three sisters do not start with "". Most people appear with only their first names, and a few talents have their given names.

Why conquer so many elves? Basically, I will conquer one after a few chapters 😅

When you update, subtle flaws will be magnified, and the greenness of the writing will be criticized. When you update twice, a little patience is born, and the progress of the plot is paid more attention to. When you watch the third watch, the slightest praise begins to sound, and the number of dead harvests begins to decrease. When you watch the fifth update, readers' support spontaneously forms, and the voices of praise become louder and louder. When you are at the tenth watch, the Confucian debates are deafening, and the tolerant attitude is implemented both internally and externally. When you are twenty, you will have a place in the bookworm's memories. Even in a long life, your name will leave a dazzling trace. Updating may not solve all difficulties, but more than 90% of the problems come from insufficient updates.

I can only say that the theme of the power being attributed to oneself is completely incompatible with Pokémon. Most people click on Pokémon and want to see daily bonds and Pokémon battles, rather than cheating and fighting in this kind of world.

You can tame some elves to accompany you, but this will slow down the protagonist's ability to become stronger and ruin the plot, which will be disgusting.

After looking at the introduction, I have no desire to click on it.

The introduction made me laugh. Writing this in elf text is like if you go to a restaurant to eat, most people must read it. How are the ingredients? Is it new or not, how is the price/performance ratio, how does it taste, etc. How about coming to your place😄 "My dishes are indestructible"