Travel to Tokyo and Become a Fringe Passerby

Although I know you want to describe the protagonist as a character who becomes stronger step by step. But he is a soul traveler, and he also knows that the specific plot has a powerful background. No matter how you look at it, it has reached its peak... Step by step, I still recommend the indigenous template or weakening the pig's foot background 😰

The protagonist is very similar to those in Northeastern movies or short videos. Others are acting, but the protagonist is real 😥

The author has a good attitude. It is a good thing that he recognizes his mistakes and actively corrects them. But, the plot and characters you designed are very abstract and have many outrageous points. I can easily cite many examples after reading dozens of chapters. First of all, the villain is introduced as the male protagonist of the original work, and then the villain's image is very thin and hypocritical. He flirts with girls for a while and feels good about himself. He has no successful experience. The heroine is inexplicably disgusted. Then the abrupt and clichéd plot promotes the development. Inexplicably, he falls in love with a guy who has no sense of presence in the class and is... The villainous male protagonist who bullies and fights has the aura of a pure protagonist when written. I haven't read the rest of the story to comment, but isn't the image of the male protagonist in the first few dozen chapters an image that can't be improved except by his background? It fits your introduction at the beginning, where the male protagonist is an otaku who suddenly traveled through time and became a gangster master. Then something outrageous happened. The two female protagonists directly reposted. The emotional changes were too sudden. I suggest you read the emotional changes of characters like the Lost Dog Heroine or Haruwu (I don't know much about the delicate emotions of domestic youth novels). More than ten years ago, you wrote about experiencing a haunted house plot to promote a relatively large emotional change. This opportunity is still acceptable, but if you look at it now, I'm sorry that I can't accept it. Then there is the second female monitor who has an inexplicable liking for the male protagonist. Pi Bian Ping Pian accepted the male protagonist's request. After the male protagonist finished speaking, the monitor was particularly sensitive and self-revelation (yy). If you read it carefully, you will think. It was the male protagonist who said it. "I really love you so much, Goddess Nai." The tone of these words was misleading, or was it the environment and atmosphere at the time that made people misunderstand? As a result, I went back and read word for word, and the description of the environment was very fluent, and I made myself laugh. Is this a direct step to the end? I'm so angry, here's another one, at the bonfire party, the male protagonist and the underworld heroine were dancing together and stepped on the female protagonist's foot, causing her injury. Then the male protagonist went to buy medicine. The Minotaur plot was caught off guard, and the underworld heroine was injured due to the male protagonist's problems. , And then while still waiting for the medicine he bought, the squad leader came to invite the male protagonist to dance, and hehe he agreed. After really dancing, he went back and had an affair with the underworld heroine again. The heroine didn't find anything wrong. Was this plot written by a normal person? Then the image of the male protagonist's father making up for his wife's debt to the male protagonist, the image of the underworld female protagonist's father and his daughter's slave, the image of the two villains being brainless and confident, the image of the female protagonist being both love-minded, and the image of the male protagonist having low emotional intelligence and relying on his background, all can be summarized in just half a sentence. Of course, unimportant characters can be portrayed by highlighting only one or two images, but if you also write the male and female protagonists and villains in this way, it has to be said that it is outrageous. The image will be complicated. You are not required to write every aspect, but at least be a little more attentive. There is also this plot design refreshment. Don't copy things from more than ten years ago. You can't use the old plot to produce new effects. Alas, practice the lost literature. The audience for this book is not quite right. What is your target market? From the dozens of chapters you have given me, the target audience is teenagers and people with low educational levels. Let's find out which user groups have potential

All I can say is that the author likes to be beaten. You won't really believe it. Hard work will be rewarded. Isn't it okay to write about this little thing? Just teach him a lesson and then train again? Get beaten first and then fight back, you are a fucking urban writer

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I recommend the author to watch an anime, which may be helpful to the work. "I gained super powers in a different world, but I am still invincible in the real world" 😍😍😍 The plots of your two are somewhat similar. The author could learn more from the plot of this anime. 😁😁When I read this novel, I was as excited as I was when I saw this anime. My face almost turned red with excitement. I haven't experienced this hearty feeling for a long time. 😳😳

Summary of recent questions raised by readers 1. What kind of character is the male protagonist? : "I wanted to write a protagonist who has brains, strength and a little sense of moral integrity. Because this book is in the style of a romantic comedy." The first few chapters were poorly written, so many readers raised many questions. 2. Why did the male protagonist go directly to meet the gangster and why did he give money directly? : "In fact, although the act of giving money seems timid, it is also the most important consideration for your own life. There is no need to put your life in a relatively risky matter just because of some money." 3. Why is there no security guard? Design, this is indeed a bug written by me. Sorry, reader. 4. Many readers are asking why the original owner was bullied. Wasn't he a gangster prince? This is caused by the superposition of many factors. I will explain in the following chapters. The original owner always believed that his father, the parent of the Jiying group, indirectly killed his mother, so he has always been alienated from his father and became disgusted with gangsters. The original owner's personality also changed in childhood, becoming quiet and withdrawn. This also indirectly leads to bullying, which is actually very common in countries like South Korea and Japan. (Many children from wealthy families in Japan are also bullied.) Of course, it may be that my explanation was not clear enough or that I was too abrupt. But thank you all for your criticism (insult 😭), and thank you all readers.

Recently, some readers have asked such questions. I will answer them one by one. It may be a bit long, but I hope you can read it. "Why is the protagonist's father a gangster, but he has to face these gangsters alone." "Why is the protagonist so useless and useless?" "Why is the protagonist so mentally retarded?" My answer: First of all, I explained in Chapters 1 and 2 that the protagonist has only seen this plot (the plot is still incomplete). And because he is a passerby, he doesn't know what his background is. I had to face the gangsters alone in the second episode. Then, why fight with Itochu, the original villain. 1. When the protagonist first arrives, he doesn't know what his relationship is with his family. 2. I want to write an image that has setbacks but will become stronger. 3. The protagonist was not beaten carelessly. He also determined his determination to become stronger during the beating. How could anyone want to become stronger for no reason? (It may be that my brain circuit is too weird, but I'd like to apologize to everyone anyway.) Maybe I didn't perfect the setting of the protagonist, or it didn't meet everyone's expectations. I would like to apologize to everyone here. And, for this novel, because not many people read it, I tried to write it unlike those mindless and cool novels, which are mindless and cool from the beginning. But there is some foreshadowing and some plot in it. Finally, this article is the kind of daily comedy. I don't know if you will like it. I also hope that readers who read this can give me some suggestions. Thank you all.                                                                                    More than shameful teacher Ran

Regardless of love, cool writing or anything else, the bottom core is logic and reasonableness. And you have absolutely nothing to do with it😅😅😅

The county magistrate is not as good as taking charge now, you really don't understand! You majored in art and offended an accomplished person in the computer industry. You don't think he could do anything to you, but do you dare to offend a master in the art field? Just one word from someone can make it impossible for you to survive.

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The author should revise the previous chapters when he has time. It will give me the feeling of writing whatever comes to mind.

Jumping to more than a hundred chapters, I felt pretty good. At first I read the first dozen chapters and they were really rubbish. But when I saw that the author had written more than 600,000 words, I wanted to see if the author had made any progress. The conclusion is that there is a lot of progress. Come on.