Start with a Famous Name

The writing is very good, I have been following it since the last book. The setting and plot of this book are very attractive, but why is it less popular? I think it was because the first three chapters were not written well, and then there were some bad guys setting the pace at the beginning, which affected the popularity of the entire book. Here I would like to make a small suggestion, which is to put some exciting points from Chapter 20 onwards at the beginning to attract readers.

After nearly ten chapters, it's still okay. I have been reading for several years and it is my first time to be the helmsman.

The logic of the book is okay, but the physical data makes me want to read it. The protagonist has trained his marrow, running 60km per hour for long distances. Marrow training is already the last of the five realms of body tempering. This performance is too poor. Running with teammates, 25km per hour is even more difficult. A group of 2-3 realm warriors, with some things, can only reach 7-8m per second. Is this fantasy or martial arts? In this case, the protagonist's previous expressiveness is very inconsistent. For example, the protagonist will use strength and master-level swordsmanship to break the sword in his hand into pieces. Of course, if the author says that this sword is inferior, then I have nothing to say. Overall, it's okay if I don't look at these physical data. I quite like the logic of this book and the character of the protagonist. But this physical data is too abrupt and does not match the description of each realm in the previous article. To put it simply, it is downgraded.

I've caught up to the latest, I think it's pretty good, the protagonist's values ​​are quite upright, and I don't care about his previous poisonous remarks. I want to help those people who have grown the land and really can't make a living, and by the way, I can use my cheat points, and I can also work with gangs that I don't understand. There is no danger, so why not do it? Those people are hypocritical

That is to say, the writing feels very safe for an old guy like me who doesn't love women and doesn't engage in male competition. Everyone knows that sense of security is a very broad word for the author in the online writing circle. Invincible, poor, green, reasonable plot, etc. Can be regarded as different people's safe strike zones. My good points are when the characters fit well with the plot and the plot is logical. When writing about the Virgin, you should always be the Virgin and don't be a hypocrite. When writing about the demons, you should kill them all equally and be extremely selfish. It doesn't matter even if they massacre the city and train the emperor's banner. Don't write about other demons, just kill them and pick the peaches. When writing about the harem, don't pretend that everyone is my wing. Just being able to do this has already eliminated half of the authors, especially historical urban writers. However, many online articles now want to write sophisticated self-interested protagonists with a bottom line, which are relatively easier to develop and more acceptable to readers. However, it is difficult to maintain non-double standards. I think the well-written imitation of immortality was abandoned after reading hundreds of chapters. The protagonist who had always lived a clear life suddenly pretended to be an important supporting character named He. The other book, Gou Daoliu Zhi Pi Krypton Life Cultivating Immortal, which was also pretty good, also claimed to be a devil, but he suddenly became obsessed with 🐔 and stray cats. The logic seems easy to understand, but it requires a lot of writing skills from the author. Fantasy novels about cultivating immortals, especially Gou Dao Jia Dian novels in recent years, often have a problem, which is that even if you are already stubborn, you still want to survive in death, but it cannot stand up to scrutiny. The IQ and planning of the villain boss completely serve the plot in which the protagonist participates.

Do some expectation management for newcomers, not the Yakuza style of Deep Blue with added points. The current force value is not as strong as that of fantasy. The protagonist is currently only at the level of Zhang Sanfeng, which means that no one in the world can beat him (there are currently but not within the scope of influence) but he does not have the ability to break the world with one punch. Since the function of the golden finger is not to add points from Deep Blue, but to download martial arts from the Alaya Consciousness, the ability to add points is limited to the level of human martial arts development. To sum up, the protagonist will engage in a hegemonic route for a long time (I don't know the future, but this plot should be within two million words), helping himself to collect points, and at the same time completing the process of unifying the world. Only after the unification of the world is completed, there is a high probability that it will be improved with the help of the power of all living beings (all the people will engage in cultivation, and then the protagonist will directly gain experience for free), and then continue to break the limit.

No, buddy, write about your worldview and realm. I still don't know what the name of the city where the market is located is? Are there any officials above? Is it a cultivator? I don't want to see it. Even if it's not the invincible style, it still makes people fearful.

It has become extremely boring since Yueluyuan, and the text is extremely bloated. The fight against Wu Yi has been delayed and delayed again and again. The pleasure of leveling up is gone, the pleasure of murder trial is gone, the protagonist has become a tailor, the mother-in-law has to die, and the war is full of details. There are a lot of scraps of various scraps, and the number of words is just half a chapter. It has been going on for so long, and the final battle that has been delayed for so long is like child's play. How about three punches to blow up a giant bear? I'm really speechless 😅, I still want to have a climax, but what the heck, this kind of killing and escalating hegemony is a common trial, killing indiscriminately, showing saints, farming, four interesting points, but none of them have grasped the key point. After starting to beat Wu Yi, the feeling of indiscriminate killing and escalation became less. The protagonist kills and becomes a lunatic in the eyes of others. He pretends to be a god and makes a fool of himself. Altar, what is the reversal of history? Ability, Xiangxin, and all other military and magical skills are already there, but what is missing is this, direct brainwashing, linking with luck, adding some points to the confidants to quickly arm themselves, and establishing a strong ZQ that can carry out the protagonist's will. The military D can read minds and see luck. Those who are dissatisfied, those who cause chaos, plow the entire Yuanzhou, farm for a period of time, and then sweep across the world, through After going through the map, kill anyone who wants to invade directly, kill them until they collapse, and your subordinates will take over the territory. In the shortest time, with the greatest efficiency, you can unify the world, write the same text, use the same track with the chariots, use weights and measures, open up the people's wisdom, develop science and technology, martial arts, study flint beads, study luck, study the magical nature of people's desires, establish a destiny dynasty, a heaven on earth, and eternal prosperity. Of course what I said may be a bit cliché, but it is inevitable that this book will become very boring. In the early stage, there are skin training, blood training, meat training, bone training, and marrow training. The level is gradually increased. There are enemies one by one, as clear targets to upgrade the protagonist a few levels. 🈶The pleasure of killing monsters and upgrading. Now, kill a Wu Yi Ke drags it on, a lot of water is unnecessary, it doesn't feel satisfying, it makes you upset after reading too much, you just skip it, there is no more pleasure of mowing the grass, pretending to compete, and moving like thunder, and it makes the protagonist look like a lunatic inside and outside, pretending to be a ghost to win people's hearts, making it secretive, killing a famous celebrity makes a mess, and the most important pleasure of a web novel is gone. How many pieces of armor, how many horses, how many horses, how many horses, how many horses, how many horses, how many horses, how many horses, how many horses, how many horses, how many horses, how many horses, how many horses, how many horses, how many horses, how many horses, how many horses, how many horses, how many soldiers, why don't you tell me how much the protagonist has improved today, what he has learned, how many villains he has used these things to slay, how many pretense, how many people's lives have been improved, how fast the forces under his command have grown, the protagonist thunders out to suppress all dissatisfaction, internal dissatisfaction, and external enemies. Able to read minds, observe luck, control soldiers, and add points to his subordinates. I really don't understand why the protagonist wants to have so many voices within the prisoner. He can endure the main task of supplementing the violent soldiers, has a stick, a carrot, and the sacredness brought by the + top, and is not afraid of betrayal. What the hell are you doing? Mother-in-law, mother-in-law, there are so many people in the world waiting to be rescued, so many people are waiting to be rescued, even if Wu Yi is beaten, he will not be able to achieve harmony and unity internally, and if he wants to save an individual, he must conform to the people's will and dare not save him, disgusting🤢, this world is broken, the great power belongs to himself, he smashes everything with one punch, and unifies the world with the fastest efficiency, Then use absolute force to suppress it, and combine it with understanding and observing luck to eliminate the pests. In less than two generations, the world will be pure. After the civilization is reshaped, if it is still Zhongwu, find a way to weaken the protagonist's divinity and guide it through education and public opinion. In less than two generations, the protagonist will either become a god like Haotian, or become a rare great man in ancient and modern times. If it is possible to develop methods of cultivating immortals, conferring gods, and transporting dynasties, then other kingdoms on earth can be built and dynasties can ascend.

The improvement of force is very unpleasant. It is a kind of improvement in the direction of omnipotence, but it is useless. It just satisfies a desire to collect. It cannot be finalized and it is difficult to achieve great things.

Wearing a vest again? The biggest problem with this book is that the author wants to write about everything, endless nonsense, and can't keep up with the main plot. He only touches on cultivation, hegemony, and farming. As soon as the reader enters this part, the author immediately writes another part. Now he throws away all the previous ones and starts a new story line. What are you thinking about? And the author has been calculating and calculating a lot of data. If he wants it to be reasonable, let me ask, you said that Yuanzhou is indisputable is the consensus, what is the protagonist doing now? Are other forces fools? You have gathered hundreds of thousands of people to build a super project without interfering, so what did the forces that were interfered with in the past do?

I can only say good things, but if I write a few unreasonable comments and then delete the post, what kind of author is this?

That's awesome. I can't say he's cool.

Don't put the cart before the horse, the use of golden fingers, the deduction of magical skills, the improvement of the protagonist's cultivation, and exciting battles are the main points of enjoyment. The development of power should assist this. It is best to click on the topic every two chapters. After all, most readers are attracted by this at the beginning. The most taboo in writing novels is to change the style in the middle. Once the style changes and the golden finger is hidden, the early readers will be lost. After all, inertial subscriptions cannot last long.

Did you use AI to write it and then modify it yourself? Che Zhulun's back and forth was ridiculous.

The data in this book is so bad that even pirated websites won't look at it, otherwise I'd want to be a prostitute for nothing.

The protagonist looks like everything, but he doesn't look like a human being. I don't know what drives the protagonist.

Keep it up, the content is too watery, just look at the title

There is actually a big problem with the setting of this book. After traveling through time, the protagonist gets a Suizhu, which allows him to see whether there is red energy on a person's head. Those with red energy have killed people with their own hands. In this world, except for children, there are red energy. It is strange why humans have not become extinct. The protagonist kills people based on the red energy concentration of others to obtain red luck to help him practice. The protagonist also judges people based on their red energy concentration to determine whether they are good or bad and whether they should be killed. The protagonist wants to change the world and is on the road of striving for hegemony. However, the front is fine, but the protagonist is a bit petty in the back. If the protagonist succeeds, then according to the protagonist's standards, it is estimated that the generals and soldiers who assisted him in conquering the world will all die. After the unification, the executioners used for executions and the police officers used for public security will probably have to die as a profession, including the border troops who protect their homes and the country. It is estimated that they will not survive. At the end of the fight, the protagonist becomes the one with the highest concentration of red aura on his head. I wonder if he will be sucked up by the Sui Pearl and wiped clean at the end of the drama?

The protagonist wants to do too many things. And the time is compressed too short. As a result, the head is ignored and the buttocks are neglected. So lately it's all about arranging construction and planning gangs. But the author writes too carefully. Resulting in looking boring and watery. And the plot arrangement is really unreasonable. Even in modern times, it is impossible to complete such a large project in a few months. How dare you think about it!

I've read 200 chapters, and the story is good, but I still can't bear to complain. Slow pacing and too much nonsense are two different things. Slow pacing is a style, but too much nonsense is a scam. I've read countless chapters and skipped to the end, only to find that there are still some details that don't affect the plot and I don't need to understand.

Say the same thing in reverse, how to write AI

As a book owner, I came over to take a look, and it turned out to be a really cute eunuch. Is this right? Is this really cute?

It's over, I'm glad it's over. The author won't write about hegemony next time. He'll just be a lone wolf who improves his personal strength. It's like he is cultivating immortality. After reading the last three chapters, I didn't know whether the protagonist wanted to become emperor or not. I thought I could just pick someone to be the emperor. He doesn't fit the character of the protagonist. All I can say is the protagonist. Too kind Think about why gangs were developed in the first place, for good luck, Why they dug water channels and couldn't ignore them when they were put on airs, plus they are kind-hearted, looking for a job Why did they go to Xuanyou Erzhou to cause trouble, others came to attack his subordinates, Why did others want to dominate the world? Let's fight him, It seems that the protagonist has been making progress step by step until he takes over the world. In fact, he didn't want to dominate the world at all from the beginning. He always acted like a vest when he went out, so he just ran away if he wanted to. However, the ceiling in this world is too low and the hangings are too big. It only takes a little effort. In the end, the ending is as the protagonist has always been. If the idea is to become emperor, it should be to set up a similar administrative structure, become the emperor of the self-reliance, suck the good luck, run away, go back to the original place to amuse the little girl, and finally become the emperor. I can only say that the protagonist is too kind, it really tires the protagonist out, he doesn't want to care at all, and has no idea of ​​being an emperor

It's very well written. I love reading it. The author remembers to open a new book.

When will a new book be released? I'll kick my ass. I'll go back to the starting point from Tomatoes and recharge hundreds of dollars to see what books are worth reading.

Not adding some essence? The author has the potential to be a masterpiece, and his narrative style, text description, and story rhythm are all excellent!

Come on, write well, don't waste my vote, it can be exchanged for several dollars.

Not as well written as the previous one

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