Family Cultivation: Rising from the Bottom

The system was released in Chapter 13 😰

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Characterization is generally expressed through image and behavior. There are a lot of descriptions in this book, including various micro-expressions, appearances and some small details of behavior, including Li Xuegou, Qin Guangfu and the protagonists (these three are the ones that have a deep impression on me so far), but here comes the point. After spending so many pages and words describing them, I still don't know what the personalities of these three people are. Inexplicably, the protagonist, who has been a doormat for three years, suddenly becomes fierce, then tolerates it, is crazy, and suddenly kills someone in the street out of nowhere. From the description of Li Xuegou when he first appeared, I thought he was a pervert who was in love with his sister. Then he suddenly turned into a good brother with love and righteousness, and then turned into a murderous demon without blinking an eye. The character described by Qin Guangfu is a man on the fence, but he is very moral, but suddenly he only recognizes the Pensions Department. These are really messy. Of course, these points can be made sense if you explain them carefully, but if you try to make them make sense in the normal length of the novel, it is all kinds of messy descriptions of micro-expressions and small details, which make people confused about what this character is like. I used to read books at a glance, but now I like to listen to books word for word, so the listening experience of this book is really bad. It contains a bunch of messy detailed descriptions, which makes people feel really nonsensical. The listening experience is so bad Analyzing the reason, it may be because there is no outline and the characters come out one after another, so the characters are messy. Including the farmer who squeezed the protagonist when he first appeared, the protagonist endured it. I thought the protagonist would go back to take revenge when he succeeded in cultivating immortality, but suddenly he was killed in the street. There were also questions about whether Li Xuegou could accompany the protagonist to the end of his life or die suddenly in the middle. I suddenly felt that I had the strength to go with him, and suddenly I felt that he could die suddenly at any time. It's tiring to watch. I often read "Zhaotian Ji" when I am a book reader, and I really read this book often. I found that a famous minor character who appeared in the later stage actually had two or three foreshadowings in the early stage. And the image of each character is very full. Through the detailed description and small details of behavior, you can know what this character is like. What he wants to do is reasonable and smooth. For example, the protagonist's good brother is a rich and willful young man. He is still the rich and willful young man at the end. Moreover, when the protagonist and the young man first met, the author directly pointed out that the two of them will fight side by side until the end. Summary, there is no outline, the characters are not clearly described, just think about it.

It's the panel hanging again 🙂

If you want to become an immortal, you should become an immortal. What kind of system should you build? How will you do it when your realm becomes higher in the future?

The road is long and long, I will search up and down, and encourage each other😁