The Outcast: The River Map and Luo Writing

With Hetu and Luoshu, it's enough to follow the Bagua. Why bother with the Golden Light Curse and Thunder Method?

Chapter 3: You really won't change it? They say there are three golden chapters. It's no wonder that your poisonous points can attract readers. The person in charge of the Luzhong Middle School said something pornographically, and after finishing the conversation, he almost forgot that it was a whisper in the alien world and would be heard... Isn't this taking off his pants and farting? What a waste! Just like the recognized poisonous point in martial arts novels and fairy tale novels, the transcendent world whispers in a low voice, for fear that others will not hear it... Then it is not explained whether it is a body or a soul that has traveled through time, and how long it has been traveled has not been explained. Finally, there is a person who has watched the anime or comics of Under One Person. After traveling to the world of Under One Person, it is impossible for him to forget that this is a world of aliens. He will always remember in his heart that this is the road from mortals to the extraordinary. How could he forget? It's as ridiculous as forgetting the exercises while practicing.

Brother, please pay attention to how old Ren Fei is. . . . How old is Xu Lao, how old is Xu San and Xu Si, and how old is Ren Fei, who is the same generation as Xu San and Xu Si. . . . You, a young man in his 20s, don't have any respect for a forty-year-old (young and promising) female responsible person of the district. Instead, you think of Huahua. . . You, a person who seems to have sex all the time, or indulges in all the sex, is really almost meaningless, more like a fantasy novel wrapped in a human skin. . .

I don't understand. Hu Jie killed your master and brother, but he didn't use all his strength to let people run away, and he didn't pursue him after he ran away? ? ? Really convinced

In terms of the physical body, there are eight gates of armor, and in magic, there are nine gates of magic. What is missing is the guarantee of the soul. Look forward to it 😁

Chapter 15 made me feel embarrassed and sick after reading it. If my brother doesn't know how to write love scenes and female scenes, we don't have to write them. Just in this chapter, I feel that the male protagonist has no self-awareness. When the bastard becomes angry, the women will come and manage the district. She is not a little girl who has never seen the world. The writing in Chapter 15 is really a bit below the level of your novel If you really don't write these dramas, your novel can be considered good.

Practice practice and become a stallion

Just after the master died, he dared to lust after the all-round female boss whom he met for the first time, but later on he became innocent and became a vegetarian?

The master had just died, but when he saw Ren Fei, he became distraught. This kind of protagonist can't go far under one person. Of course, the author can tease him, but it just looks awkward.

No? Do you basically have to enter the company to get a taste of writing? Brother🙂