The American Revolution: Fully Unlocked

Not bad, but I think the author still needs to sort out the plot rhythm. Now the main conflict of the plot is reflected on Gloria. In the early stage, the guards around the protagonist are basically useless, and there are still people who want to target the protagonist. The author describes Gloria like this. She repeatedly wants to control the protagonist and hold the handle of the protagonist. Without the author's wishes, there is no doubt that this is likely to come true, because there is at least a housekeeper around Gloria. There is really no reliable character with a head and face around the protagonist. The protagonist's interactions with Gloria often seem very funny, one is stupid and stubborn, and the other is incompetent. Every time I speak, it seems like I am pretending to be a sophisticated flirt. Every question and conversation did not solve any problem. These issues reached a climax after the Indian negotiations. The protagonist comes back after experiencing a life-and-death crisis and learns that Gloria thought she was dead and fell into a coma and was bled by a doctor invited by the housekeeper. This plot is very syncretistic and seems to forcefully pave the way for the protagonist to reveal his identity. Realistically speaking, why do we encounter this situation? Because as the main shareholder of the company, there is really no one who can be used. As long as there is someone who is not very smart, but at least has a heart of admiration for the protagonist and is willing to believe in the protagonist, and comes to comfort him with a few words, there will be no such situation. Most of the time, the protagonist is a talented but not smart Oriental in Gloria's eyes. I think the protagonist is kind to her, but Gloria often behaves like a white-eyed wolf, completely distrusting the protagonist's willingness to communicate directly. Later, she suddenly attacks herself, and suddenly feels, ah, we are family. This doesn't make Gloria cute, it makes her look like a dork. Under such a background, the protagonist's emotional outburst and self-exposure appear particularly ridiculous. Self-exposure of identity has never been a poisonous point, it's just that you made it a poisonous point. To sum up, Gloria is an unattractive female character, and what makes her annoying is not even that the protagonist likes Gloria, but that you clearly feel that the author likes Gloria. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder, forgive Gloria without limit. The title says Self-Strategy, but it actually means Self-Forgiveness. Does the author think that everyone has never seen any attractive female characters? Does he think that as long as Titus mentions a few words about how beautiful Gloria's thighs are, he can fool the problem and make everyone understand Gloria and turn her into an attractive character? Even if you put the plot of revealing your identity at the beginning, it won't make people feel so disgusted, because after all, Gloria is the designated heroine at a glance, and everyone behind her will be one of her own, and no one will care so much. The author's description of Gloria was completely counterproductive. People can't help but wonder: Are you a virgin? Why do the two living saints have to be aggressive towards the protagonist when they appear? Is this your xp? Most of the male channel's works are career-oriented, but in this work, you will often feel that the emotional line is the main line. Although I have said so much, it is not that I hate this work. On the contrary, I think the author has many advantages. The absurdity of the different historical backgrounds of this work is very well grasped, which makes people feel unexpected and reasonable. The Indians' distrust of the protagonist takes a turn with the introduction of supernatural forces. The protagonist's uneasiness is not that the negotiations failed, but that other departments carried out attacks. The plot processing here is very good, and some foreshadowing is appropriately introduced. It can be seen that the author has done a lot of rational thinking, but it can also be seen that the author has gone into fallacies in this rational thinking. He lacks personal description of the protagonist. In the process of rationalizing the character, he forgot to portray the charm of the character itself. This is not a lackluster work. On the contrary, the efforts made by the author and the advantages of the work itself can completely form its own characteristics and win a fan base for itself. It's just that there was a problem with the arrangement of the plot, which caused flaws in the work that should not have appeared, and there was a major lack of emotional coherence for the readers. Let a place that should not be a shortcoming become a shortcoming, and it happens to step on the red spot of readers' discomfort. This is also a characteristic of many readers of Qidian. If a shortcoming appears in another place, there may not even be anyone in the comment area to talk about it. After all, online texts are meant to entertain the public. As long as you don't feel it, no one cares.

Chinese is not actually a difficult language to learn. It is purely a stereotype and prejudice that Chinese is difficult to learn, or it is simply because there are too few people learning it. The subjectification of Chinese learning issues is partly due to the inferiority complex caused by history. From the perspective of entry-level learning, there are no declensions. There are basically no clauses within clauses like an old lady's footcloth. There are no special formats for questions and inversions. The vocabulary is clean and neat. For past tenses, just add past and future tenses. The only difficulty may be the tone, but don't be too tolerant of the tone for daily use. If you want to be proficient, you still need to talk about it. If you are just getting started with daily use, learning Chinese is easier than learning English, let alone Arabic. It can only be said that for Europeans and Americans, the differences between English, French and Spanish are a bit like the differences between our domestic dialects. Naturally, it is relatively difficult for people to learn Chinese, but this does not mean that Chinese itself is difficult to learn.

After reading the part where the protagonist is training soldiers, I would like to give the author an opinion. Of course, the author may not adopt it. There is no need to create the so-called people's soldiers. There is no need, or in other words, not everyone needs to be a high-quality soldier. In this era, whoever can draw the most soldiers and whoever can draw the most lines in the war has the greatest advantage. I have more people than you, so I can destroy your skirmishers on the flanks first and then deal damage to your line. Some people will say, I point out the Minnie🥚, I point out the breech-loading rifle, I point out the penicillin... It's useless. Having more people than you is the biggest advantage in this era. For example, the emperor's favorite strategy was to annihilate local advantages and then engage in decisive battles. Frederick also wanted to use oblique attack tactics and internal maneuvers. The same was true for Suvolodin, Grand Duke Charles of Wellington. Unless you point out weapons from more than one and a half eras, you can only play like this. It's better to click to recruit soldiers. Plunder? Military discipline? Eating from the enemy is a strategy. If you don't eat, others will eat. It's better for me to eat. At least I'm better than you. A small number of elite soldiers plus a large amount of line-filling cannon fodder is always the optimal solution. The cost-effectiveness of playing elite soldiers with all members is not high in the age of firearms. What's more, soldiers in this era are no longer a valuable species like knights, but are things that can be consumed reasonably.

There is a reason for the poor performance. You are about to be overwhelmed by the army and you still have time to engage in drama. Since the conflict was written before, the male protagonist's sense of urgency and lack of planning were not written. How about you not write the conflict and slowly cultivate the land.

Let me tell you, the inner thoughts of many NPCs in the play are too ridiculous. The one named Hans is an ordinary citizen with a peasant background. In an era when the Prussian line soldiers did not even have live-fire training, and the British lobster soldiers only had thirty or forty rounds of live-fire training every year. After just a few days of training, he started to think about why they were not allowed to practice target practice. Why didn't he want to shoot a sniper rifle? Or is he actually a modern college student who traveled through time?

The protagonist has no personal power and can only kiss and hug the female protagonist, not even a room. When will this be resolved?

To what extent should land annexation be achieved? Can the people at the bottom live well? 😥

Mathematics is a bit open to cheating. It can be said that differential calculus theory has been accelerated by at least 120 years. If you want to attribute it to Newton, Newton's contribution to calculus was only to open the door. The analytical theory was all made by the French.

Coke is indispensable on the North American continent, just like Jerusalem is indispensable in the West, so when will our Coke appear? 🤔

Overall, it's okay, but the details are always missing, and the writing is very awkward in many places. For example, when writing about a scalpel cutting iron like clay, how can such a small film cut iron like clay? Is it because I was writing in such a hurry that I got over it in a daze?