Hogwarts: I Want to Improve so Much

I really like this book, so I wanted to share my feelings after reading it. I think it would be better to write a comprehensive YPM political comedy plot, with the magical world as the background. I like the plots of Golden Toad Company, The Internet, etc. That use the protagonist as a person to promote the modernization and integration of the magical world and the common sense world. The secret room game is also very interesting. The emotional scenes between the protagonist and the supporting characters are generally written (acceptable ), and the character arcs of the people around him can be added, and the emotional interactions with the protagonists can be well written. Frank, the vacation director, Weasley, the financial colleagues, the IT Muggles, the British Prime Minister, the runaway hitman, and the Ministry of Magic One Heart Club (expectations) all stand out and look forward to more. The heroine can see that the author has tried hard, but it is as light as boiled water. If the writing is not good, write less. The African Wizard is a complete mess and is recommended to be taken offline. Regarding the plot against Malfoy and the pure-blood wizards (Death Eaters), I suggest you not to write about bitterness and hatred. Is this a revenge story written by a dark and windy man? Could it be that the Death Eaters are the protagonist's enemies who killed their fathers and mothers, and they want to punish each family to death? Then your entire storyline is completely distorted, and I don't want to read it. I suggest you just delete the whole episode. If Malfoy has his house confiscated and is imprisoned, then go offline. (The reaction of other pure-blood families is actually quite hypocritical, but the author writes it easily and we can all accept it) In short, I really like this book. The author must have referred to "The Civil Servant" before opening the book. The protagonist is a pure social instrument, serving the magical society, improving the relationship between wizards and Muggles, and interacting with beautiful women by the way (Hermione friendship line?). The opponents are only political rivals of the protagonist (suppression, wooing, cooperation, etc.), Not personal vendettas against the protagonist (deep hatred and bitterness are not good-looking). They can be marginalized, retired, offline and other operations consistent with British political experience. You can also write some urban writing routines in the background of the magical world, participate in the establishment of the Internet, changes in lifestyles, and changes in the international situation. By controlling the coolness, you can transfer the poorly written urban writing and write it well. Anyway, cheers to the author.

This book left a very good impression on me. It is rare to see a fan novel that combines HP and YP/YMP. It adds an atmosphere of political comedy within the Harry Potter world structure, making this book a perfect fusion and worth reading.

As an extraordinary world, it is foolish not to understand that great power belongs to oneself and to rely on political means to achieve goals. A family that has been inherited for a long time in the extraordinary world relies on strength. Why is Dumbledore so awesome? Because he has force. If everyone has Dumbledore's force, then you can use political means to solve problems at the negotiation table, otherwise you will not be able to get to the table.

What should I say... I personally feel that the combination of this book's workplace and Harry Potter is uncomfortable. Since the element of "Yes, Minister" has been added and the protagonist is also a capable person, why not make the story more relaxed and enjoyable? At least it's more comfortable than letting the protagonist be a cow and a horse

Well written! It has the feel of a political comedy. It can bring out the protagonist's experience at Hogwarts, and it can also write about Voldemort's influence. I'm looking forward to it.

If you don't say a word, you'll automatically assume that there was an accident. It's best to survive it. If you can't survive it, it'll be incense.

The previous article was very good, but I abandoned it when I saw Harry lying and committing perjury during the trial of his adoptive parents. There is something wrong with the arrangement of this plot, so I can't read it any further.

This book is too malicious in tormenting Malfoy. Is there not enough villains? Lock up old Malfoy, confiscate all his property, and now let a second-year student be possessed by Voldemort... Rowling didn't treat the Death Eaters like this in the original novel. It feels like a crime movie deliberately made to torture the victim. To be honest, it is quite disgusting and is seriously inconsistent with the atmosphere of this movie and political comedy.

A very outrageous post was upvoted, and many book friends participated in the discussion, so I will talk about it separately. I think the transfiguration spell in Chapter 3 and the frequent silent spellcasting and wandless spellcasting that follow can already illustrate Jim's level. Coupled with the presence of ancient magic, although no serious combat chapters have been written yet, book friends who have played Hogwarts Legacy should be able to foresee how outrageous this thing is. In the HP world, Tom Riddle is the only one in modern history who has implemented "power comes to oneself". I personally think that Grindelwald is far better than the noseless monster in terms of expressiveness (powerful style) and personal charm. He is very strong and can confuse people. It doesn't mean that the protagonist must be a villain, he just feels that he lost blood after taking the public class exam before time travel, and he wants to continue to make progress in the HP world.

The recent progress of the plot is still consistent with my previous evaluation - I couldn't figure out what I was going to write, so I suddenly stopped writing another branch line, and I stopped training at the beginning. After the Muggle world dealt with matters and reported them to the International Federation of Wizards, it was suddenly interrupted for a few chapters. In the middle, there was a new entertainment method. A few chapters were suddenly interrupted. Now, there is no transition and it directly switches to the "resurrection" plot of the old demon. This result is the result of a series of very "coincidental" results such as the protagonist dragging the problem without solving it. By the way, the dialogue and the hasty introduction without details are written to make the protagonist not care about the life of Decorah, who is still a child. In a sense, the character has collapsed. The problem now is - the career line of the Ministry of Magic always starts suddenly and is always interrupted; the trial interactions in the Muggle world change cognitively after turning to YM and some comedy; the wizard's daily plot is a quick time jump with no character connections and no event transitions; the HP original plot and even the Hogwarts plot, Harry The interaction between the perspective and the main plot is almost gone now, and there is no trace of possible plot connections and developments. For example, after the fire dragon poaching, there was no Ministry of Magic investigation, no International Federation of Wizards accountability, no Hagrid's luck with the little dragon, no Voldemort's follow-up reaction, and no Dumbledore's actions - it skipped directly in time, as if nothing had happened. Now it's even more unclear why Voldemort's resurrection line was added out of thin air without any foreshadowing. Are you going to throw this line away again in the next chapter or at most the day after tomorrow? Someone has already commented on the character's collapse. This chapter of yours is even more extreme. It's so extreme that Deng can't let go of the protagonist. I can't see the main line in any aspect of the story. The narrative is fragmented and the reading experience is terrible. In terms of plot logic - if you really regard HP as a living world, then the actions of the protagonist, the Ministry of Magic, the Muggle upper class, Dumbledore, the International Federation of Wizards, Voldemort, Harry and other characters will definitely be affected by a series of subsequent effects of what the protagonist does, instead of continuing the unspecified original plot of HP after time is accelerated over and over again as if nothing has happened. I have criticized your problem before, but now it seems that there is no sign of improvement at all. Instead, the narrative problem is becoming more and more prominent. As a fully subscribed reader, I can only say - another disappointment!

I have no problem with the original work, Lao Deng. He is a good person with character flaws, but it seems that the author has a lot of problems with Lao Deng. Whenever there is a scene with Lao Deng, he focuses on writing about his flaws and deliberately leads him into unnecessary conflicts with the protagonist. It is really annoying I even feel that the author is making dumplings out of jealousy and designed such a plot to make Lao Deng stand on the opposite side, rather than to advance the plot and make Lao Deng stand on the opposite side.

One point of view is that although the British civil service group is abstract, it can at least cover the bottom line and ensure its lower limit. Thatcher cut off industry and the civil service together, causing it to look like a clown now.

Support the author. Writing HP from the perspective of a Ministry of Magic bureaucrat is a very unique perspective. It is more interesting to combine ym and ypm, and I think the integration is very good. The writing is very smooth for me and I like it very much. I can see the updates at once. The world setting of Harry Potter is, after all, a fairy tale. A closer look at Aunt Luo Lin's world setting reveals that it is full of loopholes. However, Aunt Luo Lin is a British person who studied literature, and the author's underlying logic is the same as Dai Ying's, but with the addition of fantasy elements. There are many shadows of the British education system in Hogwarts. The content mentioned in the book itself involving the political methods of the Ministry of Magic and Fudge is naturally British, and it can be said that it is suitable to incorporate some YPM. As for engaging in politics in the extraordinary world, even if there is no extraordinary world, you have just seen the clowns who engage in emergency smoking cessation without mastering the barrel of a gun two days ago. However, as long as the "power" of the extraordinary world is not great enough, so that humans cannot ascend to the spiritual world and still need to be bound by gravity to form a society, then there must be a superstructure to provide space for engaging in politics. In the same Warhammer game created by the British, even the emperor has to form an imperial government. As the returned Primarch, the Thirteenth Master has the strongest personal combat power and the Astartes he controls. After overturning the table and killing the rebellious high lords, he also needs a group of loyal Terran officials to keep the government running. For the HP world only, since the original setting clearly mentioned that modern wizarding society is based on the "International Statute of Secrecy" and established the Ministry of Magic and the International Federation of Wizards of various countries, which is equivalent to the European Constitution, national governments and the European Union, then there are a large number of extraordinary bureaucratic organizations, and the idea of ​​integrating into YPM is very suitable. As powerful as Grindelwald and his organization still have not overturned this system, then order is also a ladder.

No, buddy, I like this book very much. Why did you cut it after not reading it for a few days? ? ? ?

I have been looking for Harry Potter fans for the past few days, and I accidentally found this book. It is really good to read. It is a rare adventure outside the academy. It depicts the story of the magical world from a unique perspective. The writing is smooth and the plot is just right. It is really painful to follow. I hope the author will work hard to update more. Come on

Why did you suddenly enter the palace? Is it because of bad grades?

You don't even need to see specific chapters, just reading the introduction can make potential readers who have a certain interest in political situation comedies but are not described as slow to realize that this novel and a novel have left them with. Please allow me to make this assumption. Impressive film and television works have at least a relationship between inspiring and being inspired, and such an understanding will naturally guide these potential readers to become real readers. But before becoming a real reader, it cannot be denied that some people may have such doubts, that is, in the magical world of Harry Potter, or in other words, does the impression of the social background in which the story takes place when reading "Harry Potter" match the social background of the film and television work that left a deep impression on this group? Obviously "both take place in the UK" does not naturally give a positive answer to the above question, and even a more precise statement such as "both take place in the UK" is not enough to constitute a convincing reason. If we further clarify the understanding of the social background of "Harry Potter" and use the understanding of real society to supplement the parts that are not directly presented in the work, then I am afraid that the answer to that question will be. It slips in the direction of negation, which in turn causes some potential readers to encounter some obstacles in the process of becoming readers. Of course, it can be argued that the author has his own re-creation of the vague or even clear settings in the social background of "Harry Potter" so that it can be closer to the real social environment. However, in this way, potential readers who have deeper emotions for "Harry Potter" may express disturbing doubts. But anyway, I'll take a look first.

Very well written. But it's not suitable for Long Aotian to see. Because the protagonist in the book does not have a single step to suppress the whole world.

Why did Qidian still send mobile push notifications after I stopped reading for a month?

Isn't it? Is it so easy to enter the palace?

So what is the main character's name? One moment it's Jim, the next it's Xia Fei, and the next it's Jim Xia Fei and James Xia Fei. So what's the main character's name?