They Took Away My Love

It's not just to see the protagonist become famous in the other world.

Chapter 73 finally cured the first heroine. It seems like a lot, but actually there are very few key chapters. Most of them are tedious interactions with supporting characters. Why did you give Howard so many scenes? Be gay. . . Especially when we fight the big boss at the end, we could have written more battle scenes instead of the heroine rushing in and winning, which is completely anticlimactic. The most important thing is that there are few scenes of giving out sweets. I'm not here to watch you fight with passers-by 😥

Change the priority, otherwise you should change the introduction. You came in to read the mecha, and you can have a lot of love. As a result, 95% of the 40 chapters are about the protagonist starting a business. In these entrepreneurial chapters, the mecha only appears for a few seconds and then disappears, and the heroine does not appear at all. The mecha and the heroine are more important than the other. The heroine only has one or two, and the mecha only appears a few times, not even in a single chapter.

The writing still needs to be improved, and it seems to be a bit off topic. The mecha's presence is not enough.

The reading of the new issue is super important. I sincerely ask everyone to take the time to help you read it to the end. This is related to the recommendation of the new issue. It seems that it is really easy to maintain books. The more you read, the greater the chance of getting a recommendation. The author will work harder to write, and the results will be better after being published. If you earn more from manuscript fees, you can become a ruthless code word girl at home full-time. Tens of thousands of days is not a problem. This is a win-win situation. Friends, please! Finally, I hope you can take one minute every day to read the latest chapter. If you have any opinions, feel free to put them forward. Of course, if you don't want to, don't force it. No matter how bad the score of this book is, it won't be a eunuch.

Why has the author been silent for two days? The writing is quite good, please update soon 🤔

The setting is okay, but my writing skills are not very good. I wrote a lot of things at the beginning that have nothing to do with the main plot.

Only half of the chapters are actually interesting, the rest can be said to be watery.

Brother, your focus is not on the harem asura field and mechas. Pay attention to the key points.

The priority of rescuing Pei is higher than getting the protagonist to board the pirate ship. The equipment is okay, but the skills are not there╰ (‵□′)╯!

Will I have to change my number after switching?

The subject matter is good. But the early chapters need to be optimized. The first three chapters throw out too many settings, and the later chapters are a little off topic. The settings are thrown out too quickly. Although there are three golden chapters, people are not allowed to write the settings, and the entry point selection is not very good. It is too anxious. First introduce the work that the protagonist is doing. For example, the first scene can be placed when the protagonist is modifying the mecha, and the end of the first chapter can be placed when the sheriff pushes in the door. The past will be postponed for a few chapters. Otherwise, the main plot, background, and past will all be thrown away right from the beginning, which would be too messy. The rest of the story is okay. It's best to focus on mechas, then love, and then all kinds of disputes and politics. The early stage senses are really important and must be optimized.