Son of Batman, but God of Mutants

There's a problem in Chapter 1: People can't call Superman in Metropolis? If you were in Gotham, I would have nothing to say.

First of all, the experience gained can be used to upgrade skills or open card slots and equip more abilities. At present, there are only "Survival of the Fittest", "Mystique Ability" and "Single Card Slot". Shouldn't you upgrade Survival of the Fittest first? Why should it be used to open card slots? In a world like DC, shouldn't we first improve our survivability? Compared with Survival of the Fittest, Mystique has the advantage of being able to transform, but there is no comparison with Survival of the Fittest in other aspects. Just like the plot of the fight with the Superman clone that I just watched, can Mystique survive the power of the Superman clone? You have to open a card slot to install Mystique's ability. Will Mystique be killed if you don't use this ability? You want to say that if you don't have enough experience to upgrade to "survival of the fittest", forget it, but the article does not point out whether the experience gained can upgrade to "survival of the fittest". Why not give priority to upgrading to "survival of the fittest"? It's like playing a game. You have a knife and a Mimic Veil, but there is only one equipment slot. Monsters may pop up around you at any time and attack you. If you don't upgrade the knife first to improve your combat capabilities, you first open a slot to install the veil, and you can't resurrect infinitely. What's the point of such a waste?

Darwin is really hard to use. Every day people argue with me that Darwin is very powerful, but his ability cannot be controlled. His main goal is survival. Sometimes his combat power is reduced after evolution. The acquired abilities are not permanent, and there is an upper limit.

Mutants have major flaws in their abilities. As long as the mutant genes are restored to normal, their abilities will disappear. The U. S. Government has used genetic drugs in food and water to exterminate the Marvel universe, let alone the DC universe. The flaws in your ability setting are too great.

The biggest reward after reading this book is that I got a new joke in the comment area. Using physics knowledge to analyze the Iceman's ability to not talk about the laws of physics is comparable to Wing Chun's Day of Destruction.

No matter how many times you delete my comment, I will always tell you that you are so overpowering, shit.

No, are you really copying the plot completely? 😰 Then why do I want this protagonist? I might as well just watch the anime. When writing fan fiction, the most important thing is that you have to interact. If not, take a few days off and think about the plot and the whole life. Some characters in the anime are for you, they are not the protagonists. And I don't know if the protagonist knows the plot now. I feel that he is not an indigenous person, and he also knows some things about American comics, but I feel that he is participating in the whole process just like an indigenous person. If you don't understand the plot at all, it is recommended not to write exactly the same as the original plot. If you know a little bit about the plot, I hope that the protagonist will not participate in the whole process, but participate selectively. Similar to Nightwing in the later period, although he was separated from the team, he would sometimes participate in key plot moments. There is also the golden finger of the protagonist, who must participate in major events to gain experience. How should I put it? I understand that this is for the needs of the plot. But I think it can be easily changed. There is no need to suppress the protagonist's abilities, you can even enhance them a lot. Because the heroes or villains of DC Comics are more powerful than the other, but sometimes their winning or losing is not entirely based on ability. Many times we are careless, or the plot requires it. The hero loses or wins, and it has nothing to do with superpowers. It does not mean that whoever has stronger abilities or superpowers will definitely win, so don't be afraid to give the protagonist too much power. It's not necessary. If the plot requires the protagonist to suffer defeat or lose, just think of a step-by-step plot. For example, it's dangerous to catch the male protagonist's girl, or something with the male protagonist. To sum up briefly, the biggest problem right now is to participate in the plot throughout the whole process without any change. It feels like you are telling the plot of Shaozheng again, but with the addition of personal names.

Okay, just pretend that you are weak and let's discuss the plot. First of all, the highlight of Shaozheng is the process of teenagers with different personalities understanding each other and learning to become better. From what you wrote, I didn't feel everyone's personality at all. In the original book, the team had several conflicts because of each person's too distinct personality. , But with the battle after battle, everyone has learned team spirit and is willing to dedicate themselves to the team of Shaozheng. This is why in the original book, Superboy, Artemis and Megan can confess the side of themselves that they least want to be known in front of their teammates. But what I feel when I come to you is that the team only serves the protagonist. Every time the protagonist turns the tide in the original work, everyone's shining point is given to the protagonist, and the others are the followers surrounding the protagonist. This is not what a team should be like. If you always want the protagonist to pretend to be a bum, why didn't you write it as a lone ranger at the beginning and have to join the team to make it so awkward? Secondly, there is a plot bug in the original book, where Captain Kalder disappears even when he is beaten, so you just ignore him because you don't know how to express his charisma. I tolerate it, but in the latest plot, Megan killed someone, and as a result, these young heroes who were influenced by the Zhenglian acted like they were dead, but they didn't even react. It's not that you can't kill villains, but you have to write down everyone's reaction after killing this person. Even if the teammates deliberately didn't say anything to take care of Megan's mood, what about Zheng Lian? Let's not talk about Batman. Martian Manhunter Black Canary will definitely talk to Megan alone to enlighten her. In the end, everyone will act as if it never happened. You would not write it like this if you at least pay attention to the character.

Emmm, although the protagonist is a time traveler, I feel that the protagonists are all competing for the role of Diver Boy. From all aspects, Diver Boy is the most suitable to be the leader. Robin is used to being alone or cooperating with Batman tactfully. Superboy is completely an irritable child. Kid Flash has no leadership qualities. Artemis has a complicated family. Martian Girl is also a completely innocent child in many aspects. The protagonist is a time traveler. Even if he travels as an adult, he has zero practical experience in the work of a superhero. He should not be compared with the diver boy in terms of battlefield command. However, when I read the novel, it seemed that the protagonist was always giving orders, which felt very unreasonable.

The abilities acquired through survival of the fittest are not permanent. It would be better to choose Iceman. As an Omega mutant, his abilities are essentially to control water and create low temperatures. He can elementalize and use water to reorganize his body.

It's boring. The protagonist plays house with a group of children. It's really boring.

I don't understand why it was specifically set as Batman's son. Looking at the plot so far, there is no difference at all whether he is his son or not.

Darwin is super strong in the comics, okay? . . The reason why he died in the first place was not because he was too buggy. . .

I feel like I am watching a young and passionate boy. The main character just has no brains. It doesn't feel like a time traveler at all.

6. Cut off after two chapters. This is the first time I have encountered this.

It is recommended to have some stable combat ability, Darwin is not very useful.

The setting of time travel is a bit redundant. The protagonist's style of painting obviously blends well with children's animation, and both the dialogue and behavior seem very good. . . Childlike

Is the plot a bit... Every member of the Justice League is always an afterthought. The latest chapter is even more outrageous. Doctor Fate disappeared, but he actually gave a key and asked several children to find him. ……

The protagonist is Damian from the main universe

Put everything in the introduction without leaving any suspense. This kind of introduction that boasts a lot of awesomeness is usually not finished.

What a pity. It's rare to see a book written about Young Justice.

Author, how many chapters do you plan to write in this book? Which season of the original series will it probably be written about? Are you only going to write about the first season that was aired on the children's channel? Or include season 2? Or do you want to finish all seasons 1-4? Young Justice is the first DC animation that I have watched completely on TV. He also led me to understand the world view of the DC universe in detail. It can be said to be my DC enlightenment work. But no matter which season of this game ends, although the protagonists and the others successfully prevent the villain's conspiracy, the Illuminati always gains advantages and progress. I feel very annoyed. So if you can, I hope you can write a happy ending for the protagonist group, and let all the villains of the Illuminati get their due retribution.

Is the protagonist assimilated? It feels like it has really become a mindless teenage character unique to American comics.

The protagonist is always following the plot. Batman has no interaction with the protagonist at all. It is recommended to add some daily plot.

The writing style is too immature, and the writing style is like a junior high school student writing a composition, trying to explain everything clearly, but the result is too God's perspective, which makes it boring to watch. The plot itself should be that the enemy is in the dark and the protagonist is in the light. In the end, who the villain is is written directly, resulting in no suspense. People just want to see when the protagonist will find the villain, because the villain's plan is all written out, and there is no depth at all.

"An old man who traveled back in time picked up rags and made a living by making bad movies" [Nod to see directly] A director graduate from his previous life, accidentally traveled back in time and became an old man who picked up rags. He worked hard in variety shows, worked professionally, begged live, made horror videos to scare people, ate takeaways from Overlord's meals, and made bad movies to earn disgust points to continue his life. Kill decisively in order to survive Later, he traveled through infinite planes and experienced adventures, collected them into movie materials, and returned to reality on the big screen. The audience was scared crazy.

Your experience mechanism is the mechanism that changes the most. It's better to let the ability come out slowly. Anyway, you won't be able to use it if you borrow it. If you use it later, you won't be able to get it. What you did was quite humorous.

This author is really a pity... The writing style is not bad... But it is a pity that he has almost no ability to weave a plot... The previous book had no daily villains one after another, and collapsed without much writing on combat power. The plot of this book is almost copied...

Is it still popular to have a protagonist who is a son?

So was the main character's mental illness able to talk to the paintings on the wall before, was it cured later, or did I miss it?