Zongman: It's so Tight, Right?

The idea is good, I need to practice more writing, the plot will not sink in at all

There are too many things to sew, and the writing is mediocre. I bet I will die suddenly if I don't get 500,000 words.

To be honest, the plot is a bit speechless. It has always been claimed that the protagonist is the mastermind behind the scenes, but after receiving the "favour" of the Umbrella Company, the development is completely based on the Umbrella Company. Even in the Umbrella Company, it is not the same. The protagonist is still hampered by his fiancée when he returns to the country. emmm, the kindness of the Umbrella Company is more due to profit, and the subsequent ruins are also solved by the protagonist alone, so why is the protagonist labeled as the Umbrella Company, instead of the Umbrella Company being regarded as the protagonist's minion? Furthermore, the development of the Seraph and the Holy Bishop by the protagonist completely stopped after the protagonist became the actual helmsman or senior worker of the Umbrella Company (such an inexplicable sense of frustration). Well, isn't the protagonist's advantage over others the horror memes and original information? You can't get more information from the original, not to mention the extraordinary systems of the original. Why can you go higher if you are the protagonist? Not to mention the Road-ending Sacrifice and Transcendence in the Zhetian Trilogy, there are other systems that are far superior to the mortal protagonists, right, such as the Lord God and the Lord of Mysteries. Is it not far faster and easier to access other systems than the protagonist? Is the BOSS really just waiting for the protagonist to upgrade? Written like this, no matter how creative you are, it's all in vain, it's just a cliched protagonist's halo. The most important thing is that most of those fantasy novels with strong combat power have the setting of "Those who learn from me will live, and those who resemble me will die." Using other people's things to beat others is not a trick! It is somewhat unwise to give up your own advantages and compete with others. Also, the horror meme of the protagonist is obviously an upgraded version of the soul-eating style of Day of Wrath or the human-eating style of God Machine, because the protagonist can also integrate the talents and abilities of the person being eaten. There is no need to only eat the strong to become strong, but to eat the weak to become strong. You can become strong just by eating. Even if the protagonist is determined, he should focus on cultivation and use horror memes to strengthen his foundation. The word "foundation" is so valuable in cultivating the worldview that no need to explain it. But the protagonist is very abstract. After creating the Seraph to use it to overcome the disadvantages of soul fusion, he stopped using horror memes and went to practice...

This book is so well written, and the plot surpasses Squid's new book - "Night Without Borders". Even better than Wangyu's Lord of Mysteries, Luo Guanzhong's Journey to the West would have been pushed out of the spotlight four hundred years ago. The romance part of this book can be compared with Cao Xueqin's Water Margin. Especially the sentence in the book where Fang Yuan calls Chen Pingan "brother" makes people feel extremely sweet. Fang Yuan gives birth to a son and a daughter for Chen Pingan, which also brings a perfect ending. There is nothing bitter or bitter about this book. The emotional drama alone is better than Yu Hua's ordinary world, and Mo Yan's life is even worse than this book. After all, both of their books end in tragedy. Generally speaking, compared with the advantages of other books, this book beats Luo Tuo Xiangzi in terms of fantasy, beats Journey to the West in terms of realism, beats Love in the Rain in terms of emotions, beats Douluo Continent in terms of combat power, and beats Water Margin in terms of brotherhood. The other various aspects of this book are 90% ahead of other books. It is a book that can be regarded as a classic handed down from generation to generation, and it will be ranked as China's fifth masterpiece in a few years. I guarantee you won't regret it after reading it. I'll make a full reservation first.

By the way, this thing is so complicated to sew. Can you write it down, author?

To be honest, it's too messy, all kinds of things are intertwined, and many plots cannot be continued. Not to mention that in the Marvel world view, the earth belongs to Odin, but the Ancient One is in charge. Who are those dragon kings? What is District 13? How to survive in the current situation of SHIELD and the military? Many settings conflict

Let's get rid of the protagonist's identity as a practitioner. He doesn't believe in Taoism, but rather believes in himself. I don't see the protagonist having any self. He can't even understand the influence of martial arts. With this kind of mind, you use your head to seize the will of the planet.

Warhammer 40k, Back Room, Anomaly Authority, Foundation, Red Alert, Stellaris, Cthulhu, Tao Weird Fairy, Parasite Fairy, Marvel Zombie Universe comic version, Marvel Comics version of the period when Oda's door was opened under all things, DC Comics version of Five Latitude Superman is expected to wake up from his sleep in the sun in 100 years. (Superman slept in the sun for about 10,000 to 100,000 years. He evolved into a high-latitude life form in the fifth latitude.), Pseudoman, Urban Weird Tales, Weird Tales of Rules, Strange Puzzles, I Have a Date with Zombies, Lord God Space, No. 8 Pawn Shop, Samsara Paradise, Demon God Paradise, Infinite Space, Four Evil Gods of Subspace, Godzilla Monster Universe Universe + Ultraman Monster Universe (including Ye Fu, Ghidorah, Godzilla, etc. But without Ultraman.), Tao Weird Immortal Version Xinsu + Reality Distorter Sanqing Trinity God (the image is three heads and six arms, three images, from the old man on the left, the middle age, and the young man on the right. Sitting cross-legged on a huge 108-piece chaotic-colored lotus.)

God TM is a comprehensive comic, all astronomical texts are all astronomical texts, there are so many fantasy worlds, and there are still comprehensive comics, and you are NN.

With so many seams, the earth has had it in this lifetime

Is your prehistoric calendar legal?

None of the forces have any contact, as if they were just sewn together. The martial arts seem to be only known by the people in the original work. Umbrella's first targets are not dragons. There are no hybrids in the upper echelons. I have seen this theme several times and it is the same as the original work. The forces have no integration. So you are feeling lonely.

The seams in your book are too messy, and you can tell at a glance that it will attract a group of polemicists.

Author, do you know that Zhetian and Shengxu are the same world, but they are just in different times. You don't think these two are different worlds, right?

The Returners fight against the Latitude Demon God, the Tribunal of Life, and the Celestial God Group? Are you sure? There are many people from the Latitude Demon God multiverse level up, not to mention the Tribunal of Life. The Celestial Team has a record of creating the transcendent realm of the Almighty Universe. The strength of the strongest is described as close to OAA, the Zero One takes the lead, and the Stars Mod is still barely qualified.

After reading Chapter 20 and then glancing at the table of contents, I have no interest in reading further. As long as you sew up the starry sky and cover the sky, the earth will not be able to deal with it. I think there are angels, source castles and other things coming after you, and you can still fight with the main god. . There is also the attitude of your angels and demons. Things like the Three-Body Problem are completely seeking death in the context of these two worlds. The empire of the human universe will not tolerate you. It covers the sky and the earth and looks at you silently. The original ancestor of the mountain guest does not speak.

Can a place as big as the earth accommodate so many great gods? Played without paying attention. It feels like it would be better to travel through time one by one, or sew some with low combat power.

It's too messy, it's really too messy. I cut off the point of interest before reading a few lines.

I read the introduction, and as a bookworm with ten years of experience, it was so rich that I still didn't read it.

It's too obscure, and the writing style is too bland. There are too many works stitched together, and the conflicts in the painting styles and settings of different works make it difficult to read. It's better to follow the infinite flow. Come on, don't make this mistake in the next book.

It's a mess, and I don't understand it. If the protagonist has money and ability, why should he expose himself when he is still a weakling and go against the local organization? Is he mentally retarded? After provoking a bunch of people, they thought they would at least gain something, but in the end, they simply let this bunch of organizations know about the protagonist, the enemy protagonist, and what the hell kind of magical insertion is this? You asked the protagonist to deliberately release the sheep charm, and got nothing and still got into trouble. Isn't it bad to be low-key, stable, and develop? How dare you write the behind-the-scenes label for your book?

The patchwork plot is really speechless

I suggest you sign the contract as soon as possible, find an author you know well to help attract traffic, and publish updates as soon as possible. Do you have an outline?

It gave me a headache, and it was full of logical loopholes. I just brushed over a lot of things without explaining them clearly. I was talking to myself, and it was all made up by my brain.

It's such a complicated thing, why is it so involved?

Is this genuine? Is this genuine? Why does it feel like something is missing, some of it is too hard and ridiculous, and there is also the setting of the main character cheating in the first chapter. Let me go over the settings first? How can it be written like this? Also, there is a paragraph in Chapter 10 and Chapter 11 that is exactly the same. Brother, can you copy it and play it yourself?

Even if the protagonist is finally detached, Meng Qi and Ba Song will also be detached. And then add Ye Fan, you do so many things, there is no problem in order to detach, after all, everything is fighting, but if you provoke the future boss, the beard detachment will be on the same level as the big boss, and he will not be beaten in the end? Although there is no problem for fans to suppress the original protagonist, you have to add a level beyond the protagonist, otherwise you will have to pay the price for the early troubles.

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