A Guide to the Heavens Starting from Dragon Ball

Poor writing, poor story. A green tea can run through more than 50 chapters and I was impressed. The mute brother and sister also made me a little nervous. Why did you write that his sister went to Hokage for his brother? In fact, it was just a brushstroke, highlighting a poisonous point. (His sister went to the Naruto world for his brother, but his brother is in the Dragon Ball world, and his brother has to hide it from his sister. Oh my god.) There are so many poisonous points, it is so difficult to find a theme that I like, which is so disappointing.

The timeline is chaotic and the combat power is chaotic. The key is also very watery. Various poisonous points. I once thought I was watching a female video

It feels like the protagonist no longer needs to show off in reality. With a combat power of 15,000, plus the ability to survive in space, it is already the basic level of a starry sky monster, and the planet level can basically be wiped out easily.

The third generation is the strongest Hokage and does not accept refutation. The record can be checked: first kill the Senju, then kill the Uchiha, only I, Sarutobi, becomes the king of Konoha.

I don't understand this introduction. It's already about childhood sweethearts, so what else is there about being a dog licker? Don't you feel conflicted? Generally speaking, people will have some affection from childhood to adulthood. Don't tell me, people will have dogs when they are one year old. . . .

Let's briefly talk about the two poisonous points at the beginning. When the protagonist entered Dragon Ball, he had no idea of ​​​​cultivating, but chose to wait for Beerus Weiss to come and eat and wait to die. Also, on Planet Vegeta, he had 5 points of combat power and used gravity to practice. He said that he could not bear twice as much. As we all know, the gravity of Planet Vegeta is 10 times that of the Earth. In other words, if it is the Earth's gravity and cannot withstand twice the gravity, then the protagonist will not live. Ten times the gravity will cause death at birth, and if it is twice the gravity of Planet Vegeta, he will still die immediately with 5 points of combat power. That is to say, the author was not clear about the gravity setting at the beginning. He said he would not practice cultivation at first, but later engaged in gravity cultivation without knowing the gravity setting. In short, there are many poison points and the settings are not rigorous. I don't know how to add the recommended ones.

The main world is rubbish, inexplicably unable to communicate with his family, and inexplicably hiding his identity. Students can now conquer other worlds. The last class didn't teach anything, but what about basic fighting, survival, and first aid skills?

I want to write about being invincible and I want to overwhelm my combat power. Humor.

The protagonist used to be a dog licker, one day he was a dog licker, and the protagonist was a dog licker all his life. The most annoying thing is the dog-licking opening. Is it difficult to write a normal person's opening?

Let me talk about the problems I feel at the moment The author's thinking is still stuck in the past, forcing the protagonist to be with his peers, whether it is to pretend to be B or for the sake of literature, I don't care But now looking at the actual plot, it is a mess, and the introduction at the beginning said: Dragon Ball went to other worlds to pretend b But you told me that after the first world was over, it was just an experience card, okay, bear with it. After the second world was over, you told me that 1.5W changed to 200, and that you had to recover slowly, bear with it, and then you told me that 1.5W is only the fifth or sixth level? ? ? Seriously? Is the Hokage already at the fourth level? Is there something wrong with this classification? Is it interesting to force the protagonist to pretend to be a brat at the same time? Also write a plot where the protagonist is disgusted? There are too many flaws Even if you learn from other fantasy novels, change the supporting characters when they need to, and if you can't keep up, change other supporting characters. Which of the protagonists who level up quickly has not changed a lot of supporting characters? Not to mention that you rose much faster than them.

The author's writing style is very poor, and the setting is lazy. The success of this book is all due to the Dragon Ball written in the front to attract some people, because no one is writing Dragon Ball fan fiction at Qidian. Later, when I got poor grades, I gave up writing about Dragon Ball and started writing about the real world and other worlds. As a result, no one saw it

My sister doesn't have the talents of others, nor does she spend time in the gravity room like Vegeta. . Just cheat directly.

Attracted by the Dragon Balls. After reading the free chapters, I felt that it was okay to read without thinking. Book it all in one go. I regretted it later. RNM refunds money!

I have seen many Naruto fans regard Orochimaru as a good person. Although Orochimaru tried to clear his name later, he is really not a good person. He killed three little Yahikos when they first met. He experimented with 60 children in the wood escape experiment. There are also various experiments to train Sasuke's subordinates who were killed by Sasuke. How serious is the protagonist in attracting his sister to Orochimaru? I hope things will get better in the future. Don't be too embarrassed by being shocked all the time.

I don't know if the author has ever seen the Dawn Era of Don't Play with Others. After Chen Shouyi's strength in it reached the top in the world, the author's treatment became more natural. Even if the protagonist himself had no desire for the world, his attitude towards the protagonist was to make him feel comfortable in all aspects. If you want to show off, you have to have a bigger picture. Which university will you sign for special admissions? He also deliberately downplays other people's perception of the protagonist's strength. What's the use except for more low-level "feeling"? With the protagonist's current strength, what he comes into contact with and what he enjoys shouldn't be at this level!

To be honest, the author, if you look at the book reviews with more likes, you will know that what you have written is indeed overwhelming, at least for most people. It doesn't make sense that I couldn't reach the state of Super Saiyan God after ten years of foresight. I even think it's okay to rely on Super Shenron to directly make a wish to achieve the state of Yi Gong Perfection, or even directly become an angel. After all, Super Shenron can't even be completely killed. The universe wiped by King can be restored. If you really want to slowly upgrade, the protagonist should not be set to be able to become a Saiyan from the beginning. After all, Dragon Ball is the childhood youth of many people. I still remember that I started chasing it in elementary school. The way you write it now is not a problem 3 or 4 years ago, but There are already too many such routines for current readers. If you don't do something fancy, basically after this novel is put on the shelves, the subscriptions will definitely plummet after about 50 chapters. Moreover, the title of your book is about speed running. How can you speed pass without cheating or taking evil ways? As long as you take evil ways, for example First make a wish to become the strongest in the universe, and then find other dragons to eliminate the side effect of this wish, which only has a lifespan of one year, or directly transform yourself into a cyborg with only one year left to live, or directly make a wish to obtain the energy of five righteous Super Saiyans, and then find a way to absorb this realm. , There are too many ways to improve one's strength. A time traveler who travels as a Saiyan cannot reach the level of a God of Destruction in ten years. I think he is either a person who only wants to rely on his own efforts and does not want to rely on any external objects, or his IQ level must be far lower than that of ordinary people, and he wants enemies. , Considering that Dragon Ball has so many time travels, and there are so many bosses in the game, 20 chapters each are enough for you to write four to five hundred chapters. Not to mention that the real world can also integrate other worlds, and you can meet someone who is no worse than Dragon Ball. There is no shortage of villains at all, and there are so many places to write about. Although it is a fan, you have to design your own plot. Apart from the addition of an additional three protagonists, most of the chapters after the release are still following the original work. Think about the first movie of Dragon Ball, there are so many theatrical versions, and there are so many weird adventures, such as Monkey King. Entering the demon world, pulling out the sword of death, and the various countries in it, Sun Wukong and Qiqi got married, went to the Supreme Lord for a banana fan, and Dragon Ball and Arale. In some games, there are many linkages with pirates, Naruto, and prisoners of delicious food. There are so many that you can dig deeper and write.

The writing is really good, but the reality is not very good. I hope there can be less idiosyncratic descriptions, such as the pretty face is slightly red, and the beautiful eyes are looking at the protagonist. I always feel uncomfortable. Either write the female characters more normal, or let the female characters appear less. If you can't do it, write less reality and more dungeon worlds. Anyway, everyone is here to see Infinite.

It's too boring, it doesn't look like speedrunning, it's just a sea. Invincible but unable to become invincible, the combat power is estimated to be three to four hundred. Once Dragon Ball is over, it will be over.

1. A group with chaotic combat power, the early second-level Jonin of the Sand Ninja, the second-level peak of Orochimaru's channeling Orochi, the protagonist's sister has a powerful soul and dimensional skills, she can directly defeat Orochimaru at the age of two, and the second-level peak of the city lord of a city 2. At the beginning, it was said that the death rate of exploring the dimensional world is as high as 70%, so many people gave up. In the end, they only explore the world and can change the world after death. So after hundreds of years of this kind of dark turmoil, in a world where strong men destroy the world, will anyone be willing to be ordinary people? As long as you keep entering, you will always have a chance to gain strength 3. Some of the author's secondary designs look uncomfortable, such as Saiyans reaching adulthood at 50 years old, Raditz's upper-level warriors have more than a thousand combat power, so the lower-level warriors only have a few hundred combat power, Orochimaru is born with a weak soul, etc.

The combination of templates and themes is a failure. According to the theme, it is equivalent to reincarnation in a different world around the world. There is no penalty for failure. We mean that the whole world has at least one chance to become stronger. I especially don't understand how detailed and complete the strategy can be for a product of this mechanism that has been around for hundreds of years. Even if everything is unknown, how much accumulation should be needed to grasp the opportunity to become stronger. The grading is also unclear. It stands to reason that in the early stage, you need to study and wait until you are 16 years old to wait for the first chance to conquer. It is outrageous to give novices a level 1 world to explore and allocate places to a level 4 world. Think about it for yourself. The more advanced the world is, the more dangerous it is and the harder it is to survive. If you fail and do not take risks, you can also conquer multiple worlds. If you do not strengthen it step by step from the starting point, this infrastructure that has been built for hundreds of years is outrageous. As long as you pave a path, you need funds to obtain basic reinforcement from the known world due to various reasons such as financial power and power. The poor have no conditions and can only choose the unknown world, which can be rounded. The author can look back and see if the foundation of his outline has collapsed. As long as these are blurred and do not deliberately continue to show the reader's IQ in the main world, it can be regarded as a stand-alone game. Directly treat each world as a string and it can be used as an infinite flow. It is fun to watch the flow of the heavens. I could barely read it before it was released. The chapters after they were released had to have people come over to spray them. There was no need to try again in advance, and Shen Nong was already dead.

I thought the author was just 18. The real world is so simple. A person who can make me not eat beef is playing house every day. The protagonist upgrades very quickly, and others are only willing to give some money to invest. At this upgrade speed of the protagonist, each base city should be crazy to grab people, send a lot of information, and practice resources. In the end, they will give a little money. Demon Piccolo, when Vegeta came to the earth, was there a time when there was a shortage of money? The world belongs to others, what do they want money for?

Eunuch, the label actually says it's finished and not serialized. Is this trying to trick people?

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The eunuch didn't say anything, but he wrote the number 18 directly on the cover. I felt very cheated.

I'm speechless. It's obvious that you ordered the whole thing after entering the palace. I just jumped in and ordered it all. 6

After becoming a eunuch, this author will be blocked

Just watch the anime about Dragon Ball, the fan fiction is nothing interesting

The eunuch is a bad character, I originally wanted to keep him for a while before watching 😤😤😤

Fortunately, I skipped reading it after the death of the novel on the 18th, otherwise I would have been deceived by the author.

Talking about the plot with my sister on the phone without fear of being eavesdropped