Monster Story Card Maker: Start by Making Cards in a Weird Apartment

They are all killing innocent people randomly. Author, please be more simple and make the protagonist completely bad. As you say now, it is not good or bad, but it is completely bad (random killing of innocent people is very bad). Let's not talk about sealing books and reporting for the moment. The protagonist at least should not think about sitting on the fence. He must be either good or bad.

There's something wrong with this setting of killing innocent people indiscriminately

I still say that the protagonist can be not completely dark, but he must not be a good person. If so, what you write will be inconsistent and messy. Don't listen blindly to what others say. You have to write according to your own ideas. I see some people in the comment area say that it is both upright and upright. This is the most poisonous kind. I hope the author can think about it later. If you want to write about darkness, you cannot be upright and upright at the same time. Be kind. You can be less dark but definitely not kind. At least your own interests are the highest.

The upper limit of dark novels is there. Even popular ones such as Mysterious Resurrection have undergone major changes many times. They really use the national network cleanup campaign as a slogan. A certain real person was even banned from the entire network. I can only say that you really shouldn't think that you can write some unrighteous things. If you can't grasp this degree, just wait for it!

Since it is a dark novel, don't write character labels. The protagonist is neither a good guy nor a bad guy. He killed four classmates in a few chapters. Is he neither a good person nor a bad person? If you change the label, no one will complain because no one will come in to take a look.

It's quite outrageous. In an extraordinary world, the protagonist kills people at will and no one else can find out. What is the purpose of other people's extraordinary powers?

It's been over 30 chapters and the cult protagonist is still not dead.

Why would the protagonist kill someone with a white card and not be discovered? You set the settings and execute them according to your settings. Is the protagonist's spirit enough to support the settings of Hell Apartment? So what's the point of card grading? Don't tell me that imagination is a golden finger and a little logic is good.

This book has three incorrect views. After reading more than 30 chapters, I attacked school students in a relatively peaceful environment. The main tone has been set and cannot be changed in the future. There are many books with many female protagonists banned. Sooner or later, those who are anti-harmony will be banned.

What can I say, the subject matter is good and the setting is quite attractive. There are many common sense errors in the book. For example, if you call a reporting hotline openly, are you afraid that you won't be traced? For example, I don't know why I didn't tell the teacher and principal that I was cursed? For example, how can you make a top 20 school in the federal government helpless with a white card? I've only read Chapter 10, and there are so many common-sense logic problems that I can't explain.

This protagonist is completely unlike someone who traveled through the past. He is both real and independent.

Here, the author set it up that his cards are invincible, white cards can kill people, and cannot be found around, everyone around him has been reduced to intelligence, he is the only ghost type in the whole school, no one doubts him, to upgrade the card, you must kill people, this is still a white card, later on, what can drag the purple card into the city? If you want to upgrade, you can upgrade without killing billions of people.

Too bad, a newbie took down the big boss, and no one can find out yet. Logically speaking, this human race should have been destroyed long ago.

How to put it this way, the theme given in the title of the author's book is ghost stories and card making, but now the protagonist's main role is to deal with two identities. The ghost story has appeared as a ghost without even describing it in detail. The whole process of painting, background, material preparation and collection of card making is also covered in one stroke. It would be better to change the title of the book to something like "Being Joined a Cult Just After Traveling Through Time". Maybe the author has more to add later, I don't know, but as a reader, I was attracted by the two elements of ghost stories and card making.

So many people demand kindness from the protagonist in the weird world. I originally wanted to read the comments. The weird world requires the protagonist to be victorious and the protagonist to be kind, okay, okay, you are the biggest.

Random killings are disgusting. Baffling.

This must have been typed by a human being. Why? Because the articles generated by AI will not have obvious typos, missing words, or missing sentence fragments. The basic logic doesn't make sense at all. How many people can survive in one human place? In other words, how big is the area, how efficient is food production, how are water sources provided, and overall, how many people can it support? How many are the sick, disabled, and children who are unable to fight? What is the youth-to-strong ratio? In the power system you set, what is the rate of qualified recruits (the so-called people with card-making talents)? What is the loss rate in training and preliminary actual combat? Based on the set total population and survival material productivity, it is possible to roughly calculate the available troop strength and annual troop supplement data. How many soldiers can produce the next level of high-level combat effectiveness? What is the upgrade rate for each level? It is possible to obtain data on the various levels of human strength standing in an area. Based on each layer of data, design the plot so that the plot develops logically, so that the power system will not collapse after dozens of chapters, and then it will be impossible to write. Consider further, the productivity of a human settlement, how much is used for people's livelihood, and how much is used for military defense against monsters. In order to highlight the contradiction and sense of crisis, the productivity of human settlements cannot be designed to be too abundant. From this, we can roughly get the economic level, distribution system, people's consumption level, and even the general situation of power structure and social class in the settlement. Combining these frameworks can make the article much more vivid than simply listing data. They are all basic skills, but I haven't seen this book. There's a bunch of conflicting stuff in the first few chapters.

At first, I thought the protagonist would be controlled by a cult, but it turned out that the protagonist directly attacked the school... So was the protagonist a psychopath from the beginning?

What you are writing is not a dark novel. The indifference of the protagonist is not well expressed. It only shows a selfish scum. It is not impossible to write about scum, but at least it should be written after there is a reasonable transition in the middle and later stages. The alternative approaches of many small authors are actually nondescript and evil ways that run counter to the mainstream aesthetics of darkness. If you never thought of writing this article for the public from the beginning, then you can appreciate it yourself slowly, so that you don't have to cater to the mainstream aesthetics. Your book will definitely follow your previous habits in the long run, eunuch. It's impossible to become a big hit. If it does, it will be taken off the shelves immediately, so don't think too much. After the objective status quo is stated, let's talk about the next steps. I have two or three suggestions. First, just write it for yourself, that way you won't be upset, and you don't have to cater to a picky audience. The audience won't be able to swallow everything. Audiences who like to read dark texts are even more picky. Those who are not picky are either gods or noobs. The second is to just finish writing in a hurry. At that time, you can also reflect the situation of the article based on the results, and systematically self-examine it to eliminate many shortcomings. The third is to take advantage of the fact that the number of words is still small and it is not difficult to reset. Just overthrow everything originally, and then reshape it based on the original, so that it will look better.

Let's rewrite it at the beginning. Isn't it more reasonable to set the protagonist's sophomore year to land directly in a city that was destroyed by a cult? Make cards while surviving, and then switch to a normal city after the early development. The cult can be used as a line of resistance.

I feel that the author is very realistic. From a cult, to awakening and learning in the academy, to the trial in the secret realm, and immediately to the beast tide in the city, it only has 12 chapters, and other novels alone can easily be put on the shelves. There is no sense of weirdness. For example, the one in the weird apartment is not weird at all. The official directly dismantled it violently. Sure enough, all the horror is caused by insufficient firepower. Those who are timid can watch it with confidence (≧∇≦). The protagonist's label says it's dark, but it feels like a good character, and it also reminds the official that someone is going to cause a disaster. I feel like I should learn from Kaitou Kidd and send out a warning letter or something, that might be more fun. Finally, you can consider letting the protagonist develop towards chaos and goodness. After all, the introduction says that he can't help it, and there is no external pressure from his predecessor to turn him into a black man. The person who traveled through time is not a bad person. It is quite difficult to write about good and bad.

The subject matter of this book is quite attractive, but the content of the story is difficult to describe in one sentence. In fact, the author of this book can learn from Master Gu's system to improve his worldview. For example: card maker = Gu refining master, natal talent = natal Gu, ghost card master = strength Gu master, card field = Gu array, and self-cultivation, etc. This series of reference will not be too tiring, and the results will be better. I hope these suggestions can help the author. I also like reading dark texts 👍

The author just needs to keep the current dark style, and it will be as bad as it is. Don't ask why it is bad. It is natural. It is normal for newcomers to have shortcomings. Don't be afraid of shortcomings, just afraid of not having characteristics. The whole four chapters are not going to satisfy most readers. It is better to directly screen the readers and cultivate a group first, so as not to be like what you wrote in a single chapter, and in the end there was not even 300 subscriptions. That is the real thing. It's so bad that it doesn't even serve as a writing practice. After you finish writing it, you must read it yourself. It's not reading, but reading. You know what I mean. A lot of times I have to rely on my own brain to read your articles. In some places, the preface and the follow-up are obviously inconsistent. Check it again, and it will play the role of practicing writing. Otherwise, you won't write in vain. Don't be afraid of jumping. It's normal. Just come back to the next one.

It was too sudden. The author suddenly entered the palace.

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There are relatively few horror themes, please support 🙂

I've ordered it for the first time, and I think it's okay, but the writing is lacking.

Are the four subspace vendors considered ghosts?

What's going on with Tang Qing? I feel like the author wants to write her as the heroine but doesn't dare. I also feel like she's too scared to continue subscribing. Can anyone tell me what's going on?