Game of Thrones: the Road to Kingship

Although I think you have won me over by being able to start writing, I still want to point out your problems from the perspective of a bystander. I summarized these problems when I first wanted to write the article, and I found that you also have them. 1: As a fanfic, and the title of the book has Game of Thrones written on it, it means that most readers who come to read your novel are at least familiar with Game of Thrones. So you don't need to use the text to do a lot of popular science. In the first chapter, you give a comprehensive introduction to the background of Davos, a supporting character. This makes it taboo for others to read this book, unless you are about to finish it. You must understand that after all, you are writing a long story. If he appears frequently in the future, you can explain his life experience in other directions. If he has few scenes, his life experience will not matter. 2: As an author, Don't always describe the text from the perspective of a bystander. This is a classic mistake that fan fiction often makes. You directly wrote the death of Jon Arryn and the subsequent direction from the perspective of a bystander. This will not attract readers who have never seen Ice and Fire, because it is very boring to write, nor will it attract readers who have seen Ice and Fire, because they have already seen it. This is still the first question. If you want to talk about this passage, instead of writing the process directly, you can write it in a conversational way. For example: The maester walked quickly to Stannis from outside, handed him a letter and said: "The Prime Minister has died of illness. The king is now preparing to go north to find Lord Eddard as Prime Minister." Stannis calmly opened the letter and read it carefully. The bachelor did not speak when he saw the Duke, and waited quietly for the Duke to finish reading the letter. In this way, using the communication between characters to promote the plot, isn't it better than directly posting the running accounts of the original work? At least it's not boring. The death of the old griffon has been mentioned in the past, which makes it easy for people to ignore the seriousness of this matter. This situation cannot be summarized by "this is the beginning of Game of Thrones". And this is still the second chapter. 3: Read it yourself when writing the dialogue, so that the dialogue in the novel should not be too written, and of course should not be too spoken. You are too written and emotionless. Look at the conversation you wrote between the protagonist and Davos in Chapter 4. I don't know how to describe it, it's just weird. (As a side note, did the Scarlet Witch come to Dragonstone during this time period?) And see for yourself, you spent the first three chapters writing the background and character settings. What about the story? If these problems are not solved, others will have no other opinion than to say that your novel is a running account. I've read some cute new authors before, but they like to pile up too much and too complicated. They look NB, but are actually nothing. It's okay for you, but it's too concise. Novels are about telling stories, and what you write is not a fairy tale. You need to write it from the beginning... A long time ago...

Not only does it have no introduction, it's also a running account.

The protagonists are all counts, and they haven't even given a surname yet. They have always used the illegitimate surname of Shi Dong.

I will be here to help with the new Game of Thrones book

This author wrote a book without checking the information. You are already a territorial noble, and you still have an illegitimate surname? Funny?

I couldn't stand it when I read Chapter 6. What a weird plot. The king's bastard son is still circulating under the nose of the witch of Dragonstone. She pretends to be a prophetic hero and reveals that she has a dragon. Disgusting 🤢! These trump cards of yours are all chips for you to seek death. The biggest variable is that no one will let you live because you are blocking other people's way.

It takes too many words to retell and explain the original text, which is a bit wasteful.

Other fans can have a family coat of arms and a surname even when they first become knights. The protagonist doesn't care about others knowing that he is an illegitimate child, but he should have changed his surname early to create his own claim.

1. Twenty thousand Lannister men failed to capture King's Landing, which was guarded by Stannis's three thousand men. 2. The Reach army had no ships! When both sides of the river are controlled by friendly forces! Failed to cross the river? 3. Because the Lannister has the terrain advantage of being easy to defend but difficult to attack, and the Western Territory, which is garrisoned by more than ten thousand people, is threatened, with King's Landing right in front of you, why not abandon all the royal allies and the capitals of the Seven Kingdoms and stop fighting? 4. After just saying that the River Bend army had no boats, they turned around and headed to Harrenhal on the north side of the river.

Come on, although you were as wet as the Pacific Ocean before, but recently these chapters have finally begun to write "your own story" Come on, write well 🤭

It is best to slowly turn your hair to silver because the hair of the Dragon family is silver. Because other Dragon Blood families also have silver hair.

I can't stand it, this writing style is really bad

You have turned into a group text

It's better to read your book than watch TV series. Copy the whole piece

The author's writing is very good and definitely worth reading and subscribing to. I recommend a book that is decisive in killing, clever and joyful. "An old man in time travels to pick up rags and makes a living by making bad movies", which is hilarious...

The author's writing is very good, definitely worth reading and subscribing! Borrowing my precious treasure, I recommend a book that is decisive in killing, nonsensical and clever, and full of joy. "The old man picked up rags in time and made a living by making bad movies", which is hilarious...

Found a cheating book, Black Blood and Kingship, not bad🤫

The whole chapter is explained and interpreted, and the plot is completely copied.