They Cried Bitterly for Me

I didn't feel the first Sylvie's script before. Now when I read it, I found that the protagonist really seems like a tool man without a soul. There is no distinctiveness at all. There is an inexplicable arrogance in his words and deeds.

Maybe it's because I'm old and I can't read the current text. What's the author's idea? Can destroying the guardian and killing at will make the saint cry tears of emotion?

After basically reading it, these are some of my opinions. The comments are posted based on the principle of hoping that the work will get better and better. They may be a bit harsh, but they are all sincere. Let me put the conclusion first. The first two volumes are quite good (high-quality products). The level of the third volume has declined to a greater extent, and the male protagonist has lost a lot of his personality charm. I hope to pay attention to it in the future. Let's talk about your opinions. There is a problem with this routine when it is written down. It is difficult to deal with the heroine when she has many relationships. If you are not sure, you can only quench your thirst by adding more copies (which can block the influence of other heroines). In the end, it is easy to be unfinished or eunuch. Furthermore, every time a dungeon is opened, the previously established relationship with the heroine will be interrupted. Two or three times is fine, but any more will make people bored. More importantly, the main line and branch lines will be confused. I read the first two journeys of the Wanhua Mirror (Sylvie and Tsukimi) as the main plot, but there is a reality. The third volume strengthens this point, but the third volume is not long enough and fails to emphasize the dominant position of reality. Volume 4 feels rushed. The bond established in the previous 100 chapters has not been continued, and the plot does not have enough tension, which greatly weakens the desire to read. I will want to throw this book into the corner to gather dust. Also, Volume 3 didn't feel very good to me. There are too many typos, the descriptions of many scenes are not in place, and the emotions of the characters are not in place. Some of them are inexplicable. I hope the author can think carefully about the writing. One of the train girls left a very bad impression on me (I can't even remember her name). On the one hand, she has no impact on the main plot, because her personality has nothing to do with Kisaragi Station (what's worse is that the impact of Kisaragi Station was not developed in the third volume, and it did not have enough impact on the emotional main line between the protagonists. I originally thought this would at least affect Sylvie's search for the protagonist. (Creating obstacles and increasing twists and turns), anyone can do the same thing; on the other hand, her portrayal of the male protagonist is negative, not being able to do whatever she wants (like the witch during the period), nor indifferent enough (like during the Sylvie period), maybe the author wants to portray the male protagonist as a scumbag? What would happen? This is far from the image of a "monster-like man." In addition, the male protagonist seems to have lost his wits in reality (but maybe the author wants to show that he only pursues short-term profits and ignores long-term interests? He lacks courage.), Maybe it can be supplemented by more psychological descriptions and the like? In general, the first two volumes are quite good. The level of the third volume has declined to a greater extent, and the male protagonist has lost a lot of his personality charm. I hope to pay attention to it in the future. I have read the beginning of Volume 4 and will not make any comments.

It's pretty good, but it's a pity that there are too few of them. Why are so few people reading the introduction?

I don't feel like the author is Chinese, because there are very few idioms throughout the article.

There are a lot of typos, and there are a lot of grammatical errors. Words like '' and 'is' are inexplicably added in a paragraph. It's really strange.

Sylvie

I always feel uncomfortable listening to books. Why not use this "mo"? Is it because he likes to use uncommon words to pretend to be b, or is it because the author's language habits in his hometown just can't be changed? If it is to increase the sense of immersion in the game, it would be fine if the original game text "Nin" is used, but does Inuyasha also have this virtue? I haven't read InuYasha in almost 10 years... I can't remember exactly, but it's really uncomfortable to listen to the book╯╰

Urgent, urgent, urgent, the second article is so touching, just like this, please update soon 😡😡😡

This book feels really weird when I read it. The protagonist tortures her purely for the sake of torture. He is so submissive when he comes out of the system. This is like a troll on the Internet, who dares to troll anything online and directly bans it offline. Three worlds have passed and a new one has been opened. If you are still like this, I am really curious about how the author will solve the relationship between the heroines in the end and how the ending will be.

How to say it? The author updates too slowly, otherwise it feels like there is still some development 😌

I haven't read much, but the author specified that he has played a certain game. Are there blue flowers and pink flowers?

The refined posts are all suggestion posts, which shows that the author has been listening to opinions and making progress and has not directly deleted the comments. I will also take a look at this point.

1. Pretending to use uncommon words is not friendly to listening users 2. The pace is too slow and clumsy, with a bunch of miscellaneous daily chapters that can only be watered down.

A eunuch, never touch him again, never see him again

Maybe the author's target market is not me? The author actually didn't introduce it! It was only in Chapter 5 that I learned about the background of the different world, the Middle Ages. And even if the general background of the era is known, the detailed background setting is still very vague. For example, whether there is extraordinary, the classification of extraordinary levels, the purchasing power of coins, and clothing decoration. Most of these do not conform to the descriptions of medieval times. It's not logical. When you arrive in a new world, shouldn't you understand the background of the era as soon as possible? However, you push forward the plot forcefully, and someone suddenly appears and gives you a maid? Don't you doubt it? Judging from the time you go out to buy and eat, there is no trace of poverty or famine. Later, a fanatical believer suddenly appeared on the road, and he foreshadowed the plot bluntly. But in fact, the plot progress is very slow However, overall, the writing style is quite delicate, but the diction habits are very strange, there is a sense of translation, and there are also piles of paragraphs and gorgeous rhetoric

What kind of weird modality is this? It's really a bit unbearable. 🙂🙂🙂

How should I put it, the protagonists of the reality line and the story line are the same two people, their personalities and behavior styles have changed greatly. The protagonist of the story line is arrogant (tsundere) and doesn't care about the people or things he cares about. They don't care about anything. But when it comes to reality, why does the protagonist become, um... An ordinary person? (I can't find the right words to describe it), as if the person experiencing the story line is not the protagonist. Although the protagonist doesn't know that the story world is the real world when he goes through the first and second story lines, but what he experiences in the story line is not an experience? Does killing someone count as murder?

Is this an adaptation of Wanhua Mirror 5? I haven't finished buying it yet, so I don't dare to look at it.

The plot design is okay, but some words and sentences are used to make it difficult to read smoothly, which affects the reading experience.

There are a lot of typos, the author needs to work harder

I will always look at you👁️👁️I will always look at you

I have a suggestion, why not set the next story around the story of The Daughter of the Sea in Hans Christian Andersen's fairy tale. I feel like The Little Mermaid is also very well-written. She gave up her voice in exchange for her legs and when she got ashore, she found that the prince had turned into a heartless man. I feel like it is easy to become a yandere. Do you have any opinions? The protagonist does not need to be a prince, and can enter the main line of the story from other angles, but the power system is a bit difficult to organize.

I'm looking forward to the author's new book. Although this is a eunuch, it's just as good as the author's writing style😔

Well written

Very well written, first time subscribing to a novel