Am I Their White Moonlight?

After reading Chapter 20, I immediately decided to give up. Many people usually say that it is a mess and foggy Let me explain why it appears to be foggy. 1. I don't know whether to say it's a clickbait or selling people's heads as dog meat. But in this chapter 20, I don't know why there is such a misunderstanding. I don't know how to clear my name, it's baffling. I have seen 20 photos, all of which tell stories, but the problem is that your real selling point is: whitewashing, not stories. It is undeniable that stories are indeed important, but the problem is that everyone is attracted by your introduction. Why don't you prepare to explain your introduction? 2. In my opinion, the first three chapters and the following 17 chapters of the novel are disconnected and have no practical connection. So the background in which the story unfolds is inexplicable. I wonder what the relationship between the first three chapters and the next 17 chapters is? It seems like the three golden chapters are funny. 3. The main plot is unclear, the interpersonal relationships are unclear, and the settings are unclear. As of Chapter 20, I can't see any main plot. I guess the main plot is either to regain strength and resolve misunderstandings, but I can't tell in the next 20 seconds. The interpersonal relationship is unclear. Two characters who look like heroines appeared at the beginning, but they did not appear in person in the following 20 years. There is also a woman Jiang Qing who appears in the fourth chapter, and the protagonist accepts her somehow. The setting is mysterious and unclear. 4. The character of the protagonist is inconsistent. At the beginning, the protagonist said that he would kill tens of thousands of people in a row, but later he didn't even kill a single 🦊. Don't tell me what kind of interests there are. At that point in time, when the protagonist realized his interests, he actually didn't know what interests 🦊 had. Don't be offended. He won't kill you yet. Didn't he say at the beginning that he caused tens of thousands of deaths? 5. It's still the same problem, the sense of fragmentation is serious. The next 17 chapters are out of touch with the three golden chapters, and out of touch with the introduction. Analysis: The pace of this book is very slow and messy as I said before, but from the golden three chapters I can see that the author is even more anxious. A reader said before: It's a pity that the author changed his mind and stopped writing Conan. I think it's because the author's work is so big that he forgets what he wants to write. He wants to write an original world but doesn't know where to start. He explained the key points and main plot of this article in the introduction, but it was not shown in the last 17 chapters of the novel. I felt like I was cheated. It is of course difficult for fans to turn to original works. I still feel that the author seems to want to break through too much, resulting in not handling some details of the plot well. PS: Tags: Daily Wen and Relaxation, does your profile look like it!

Why doesn't the author want to show off his writing skills by writing a single female protagonist? The writing is messy, the main plot is incomprehensible, and the memories are disorganized. Moreover, each heroine recalls it once and intermittently. The short and unclear main plot can only be found from the long memories. The primary and secondary are irrelevant. What's the point of the protagonist's fake death? After being resurrected, instead of doing his own thing, he exposed his identity to the heroines to play with? Are you going to lick senior sister again? Pretentiousness should be cut off constantly, like a dog and a mouse, and it will tie itself up in a cocoon, accomplishing nothing.

In fact, the author is quite talented in literature. This can be seen from Junior Sister Wen's memories. So far in the whole book, Junior Sister Wen's memories of being in a small town are the most readable. It requires tension and tension, emotions and feelings, and the description of small thoughts is very good in all aspects. However, I personally feel that the author has some problems with the structure of this book. Why does it have to be written in flashbacks and interludes? The beauty of this book lies in the small thoughts of the three heroines and the protagonist, as well as the pull between each other. Such a structural arrangement will make the early stage too dull (mainly because it is not related enough to the introduction and title), and it will be difficult for some casual readers to not return the book smoothly until they see the introduction content reflected in the book. I would like to make a bold suggestion. Of course, it doesn't matter if you don't adopt it. After all, I am not a professional, and I cannot understand the various situations and arrangements of this book. I just say, why not try an overhaul and move the memories of Junior Sister Wen and Junior Sister Xu to the front. It is so well written that I can write more. The memories of Wen and Xu can each have a separate chapter. The first one is about Junior Sister Wen's memories, and the second one is about Junior Sister Xu's memories. Then return to the current time period, let the protagonist interact with Wen, Xu, and Shen and write another article, and then it will be easy to write. There is no need to modify the subsequent text, just write it like this. (Senior Sister Shen's memories can be reflected in Wen and Xu, so there is no need to write a separate article.) If written in this way, from my personal reader's point of view, the readability and excitement of the book will be greatly improved, and it will definitely be of great help in attracting new readers. Of course, I have absolutely no intention of teaching the author how to write a book. Please don't misunderstand me. I just put forward a few opinions as a loyal reader of this book. Please forgive me if I am offended.

Before chapter 40, it was considered the main plot, and after 40, he entered the memories. As of now, in 94 chapters, he has recalled 54 chapters without ending, and he can't see the end of this memory. The main plot is that the evil spirit was born, and the evil spirit was caused by the evil spirit. Only a powerful person with a high level of cultivation mentioned it, and then it disappeared.

What I want to see is a protagonist who carries the burden silently and is calm and decisive. The protagonist of this book behaves like a little bitch when facing his senior sister, always licking the dog. I really can't stand in for senior sister's little naughty little brother!

It's a classic theme of chasing your husband in the crematorium, but it's written in an inexplicable way. There is nothing wrong with the writing, but the plot is vague and very out of touch. In the last chapter, he was still seeing a doctor, and in the next chapter, he ran to his junior sister for no apparent reason. The backhand before death is like a decoration, and one can roughly identify the protagonist. There are a total of forty-four chapters, but it's not as exciting as it should be, and it's not complete even if it needs to complete the plot. It can be seen that the author has his own ideas, but it is useless to say in the comment area that the problem will be solved later in the plot. Not all readers will click on the comment area to read other people's comments. Do you think the author is a woman? It's written like a girl's video

It's a pity. I thought the author would continue to write Conan fanfics. To be honest, Xiaolan's fanfics with a single heroine are really rare. The only one you can read at the moment is that the others are either eunuchs or the plot settings and character descriptions are a mess. Alas.

I spent two or three hours reading Chapter 91 and couldn't stand it anymore. To be honest, I couldn't understand what I was doing. The Riddler, the inexplicable memories that I fell into, and even a bit of a literary youth.

Well, how should I put it? After reading the first 10 chapters, I don't know what it is about. The protagonist is introduced through some other supporting characters, but in this case, what I want to watch is the protagonist, not the other supporting characters. After reading the first few chapters, I have no interest in continuing to read. (Representing only personal views)

It was so uncomfortable to watch, the main character is my senior sister's licking dog

It's pretty cool. It's a waste of time.

The current plot is always about memories, and memories can appear in the text in the form of narration, but if you keep writing about memories, the impression will be very poor. It feels like the author cannot establish the characters and conflicts in a short space and can only fill them up with a lot of memories. The readers will have a very bad impression. Moreover, most of the readers who clicked in also read your title and introduction, and like to regret for life. I don't know how many people will read your writing like this.

Why are you so awesome? You know what's going on and you just do it by yourself without saying anything, right? No one can believe it? Let's flip it around at the end. The protagonist is so great. He has shouldered so much personally and then a woman comes to help save the world, right? Is there no one around the protagonist? Ah? Is it fun to hide something? Just with a personal party hero? Don't others deserve to know? At first I thought it was quite interesting, there was conflict and Fubi, but the protagonist didn't want to watch it, and it wasn't like there was no one around who could help, or only the protagonist could, and I didn't care anymore. I suggest you write pornographic articles about women. Believe me, you are definitely a master. Damn, the main character has no mouth under the two nostrils. You might as well write a mute and illiterate person. There will be absolutely no communication, no communication, no secrets will be revealed, right?

You are a human being and I eat it. I have written about 40 chapters of memories and haven't finished it yet. It depends on whether you mean to have a heroine and reminisce once. Most of the memories are boring daily life. You can just keep writing like this and keep silent every time you write. This is the first time I've read a novel like this. The plot is so unclear that you might as well start writing from before.

What he wrote was so messy. The logical thinking is wrong. I don't like reading this kind of book. I really don't like the messy main character who writes things that don't match up with the previous one.

What was the idea behind the writing? Memories are everywhere. Are you writing a memoir?

There are a lot of different situations. Memories can be opened individually. It's a bit uncomfortable and confusing to read them all together.

After ten chapters, I was ready to give up. The main character is written in a mess. Does the author not know how to be a eunuch?

It's really not possible. Wen Shu recalled writing forty chapters and hasn't finished yet. By the time you finish writing, you won't be able to remember what happened in Pingcheng.

It's too tedious to write. You can insert memories into the main story, but you can't keep writing memories. If you keep writing memories, you can delete the previous ones and start writing from the beginning of Pangu's creation of heaven and earth.

It was a pleasure to read and I finished it before I knew it. This book is very radio-friendly. I don't think I'll get a good review if it's not up to par, but that's what I like. Come on, author, keep updating and write according to your own ideas.