Li Bai's Poems and Strange World

The starting point is super rare: the protagonist's parents are still alive

(Let me preface this by saying: I am just an ordinary book friend. If something is wrong, accept it with an open mind. Also, the author can learn from my words, but you must also stick to your own rhythm and writing style. After all, I am not a professional, and I only write my own feelings.) So far, I feel that the book is still readable. The advantage is that the subject matter is very novel and eye-catching, the imagination is rich enough, and the plot of the heroine is not so bloody and mentally retarded, at least it can be read. The writing is okay, it's not that novice, and aside from some slightly embarrassing plot points, it's still watchable. But there are still some shortcomings, 1. The narrative is a bit fragmented, and the events feel a bit lacking in connection. Also, the span is a bit large, from Suzhou to the Imperial City, and then to Sichuan, and the next step feels like going to Lushan (Also, is there any significance in arranging this marriage plot? 🤔 It feels unnecessary. There is a feeling that the author wants to create some trouble for the protagonist, but I don't know what to make, so I randomly arranged one. Of course, if it's useful later, just think I'm farting, but it seems useless. ) 2. As for the characters, it feels like the author is constantly throwing out new characters, and many new characters barely appear for a long time. Regarding their strength, identity, and relationship with other forces, they are all riddles. It feels like the author especially likes to solve riddles. There is also a lot of contrast between the character's image and his status, and his behavior is also irrational. As far as the faceless king is concerned, I have been writing about asking the king to clean his fingerprints. The described king feels very mysterious and tall. But when I arrived in Kawauchi, I felt that the entire faceless organization had lost the sense of mystery it had brought before. It felt like it was led by someone who was crowned king. Organization (of course, the description is not accurate. After all, based on the content, the Wu Mian internal should be a kind of king + the leadership of the older generation) but in this case, it feels that it has completely lost its force. Wang's description has also completely changed its price (two slaps in the face, once for the younger sister, and once for Mr. Zhong, in other words, it's just the younger sister) Was it a bit too much to slap him in the face that time? Did he take off the mask in public? Also, did Mr. Zhong's words seem a little too childish? I don't believe that there is no one in Sichuan who can inherit the mask. He is a person with high status and seniority and responsibility. Can anyone tell me? Regardless of the porcelain bowl obtained later, what will he do if no one can inherit the mask? It feels a bit stupid, this statement) Simply put, it feels like No Face has lost its mystery, Wang has lost his character, and the character's behavior is a bit out of touch with himself. 3. To be honest, I feel that the author is a little anxious. For now, the three forces in the weird world, Weird, Faceless, and Li (there is also one related to Sha, which is currently unknown) are all taking action, but the protagonist is useless. In terms of weirdness, the weird high-level officials were all in the tower in that village and sent a weirdo to Sichuan, while Wang Lun's ten-mile peach blossom was still spreading. As for Wu Mian, he first got a broken porcelain bowl engraved with mythical beasts, and said in words that he had created an army and was ready to go, whether it was to go out to fight against the Li family or to fight against tricks. The Li family built the Phoenix Tower, planned for the people of the city, and prepared to send out strange troops. (Judging from the strength of his attack, he was probably one of the later bosses) In the real world, there are constant strange invasions, and the actions of various countries are communicated through poems. The contradictions in the whole story are constantly concentrated at one point in time. I feel that the author wants to keep pushing forward, but there are too many forces intertwined. Now I write about weirdness, now about faceless, and now about Li. It feels like my head is getting big. If I can take into account the plot of the protagonist when writing these, it is not impossible, but for now, the main line is not very It was clear (although I knew I was going to fight something strange, but it was very vague. The protagonist didn't have this intention and was like an outsider). The dungeons came one after another, but the strength of the protagonist made me feel that there was no improvement. From the beginning to the present (I survived, but not feeling happy), after more than 50 chapters, the protagonist was completely led by the nose. It was a bit slow, but it also made people feel very anxious. 4 (I don't think it is a shortcoming, it should be that it has not been developed yet) There is too little description of the real world, and it feels like it has not been written. Basically, it is covered in one sentence, but through the spread of the media, it can be seen that the author should not be limited to one world, and there should be more to write later. In short, the author's writing skills need to be improved, the connections and connections in the plot can feel more natural, and the character design also needs to be strengthened. (One more thing, I hope to write more, after all, who doesn't like a good girlfriend? 😄) Welcome all book friends to actively discuss below 🙂

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It's best to write down the reasons. If you have any ideas, you can tell me. If appropriate, I will write them into the book 😍

The collection keeps growing, but the reading is dropping. The author has cracks in his heart and is in urgent need of your reading 😭

Great book, I didn't even think of this idea

I finally saw what cool videos are, please read them😆 (Reviving the glory of suspense🙂)

Hahaha, fortunately, I check the author's homepage before reading the book, and I realize it's an old eunuch😋😋

The subject matter alone is quite interesting, but the taste is a bit lacking. For example, when I first entered the plot of Jing Yesi, I felt that the writing was very shallow, or that the rendering was a bit poor. The whole first go back and forth made people feel a bit confused... In general, keep going, of course the necessary polishing is still necessary.

Welcome to taste it and leave your comments and suggestions 🙂

Thank you to the author for labeling it as having multiple female protagonists. I don't mean anything else by this, but the author actually said what the label was, which was quite touching (ಥ_ಥ). After all, I like to watch movies with a single female protagonist or no female protagonist, and I can be regarded as a pure love god of war. Well, what kind of book do I look forward to the author's next book? I just hope it's these two. It actually has multiple female protagonists, and I really don't like watching it (›´ω`‹). Sorry. As for posting this article? Am I saying this to give the author an impression? Then when the author has his next book, he can answer me when he sees my avatar and nickname.

The description of the environment is too messy, and the spatial changes are completely disconnected. Please pay more attention.

If not, can you send another outline? Give the book a complete story

The author is so imaginative that he can add Li He's poem at the end.

School is about to start, and I'm about to start raising books 🙂

Well, I just cleared the level feeling confused, just like that? I feel so speechless

Why do you feel that "Jing" and "Jin" were not the same sound at that time in Li Bai? (Complain about it) 🙂

Please update, author, please, don't be a eunuch.