Hogwarts: I Lay the Magic Web and Ignite the Divine Flame

Why would an experienced archmage casually reveal his life-saving skills to a stranger he has just met? The previous chapters clearly showed that the protagonist was very vigilant. Even if Hermione didn't tell anyone, wouldn't the protagonist consider the possibility that Hermione could be mind-read and soul-searching? This isn't how you write a romance storyline.

Either give the protagonist a backstory of being Chinese in his first life but not having read Harry Potter, or avoid using Eastern-themed references and quotes. Otherwise, it will feel very jarring for a native-born British person from another world to do this all the time.

I've read up to chapter eight, and this chapter introduces Chinese elements, like the lightning-struck wood staff. It's not that it can't be added, but the author's skill is lacking; adding it makes the art style feel out of place. The beginning boasts about the protagonist's previous magical empire, how high its magic level was, followed by a long analysis of the Harry Potter magic system…

It's incredibly toxic, starting off to be unconventional. It claims this world has no magical elements. All wizards are idealists, so how do those magical beasts and plants grow? By eating grass? Also by idealism.

It's not that the headmaster sees how strict the rules are in Slytherin, but instead of properly regulating things, he thinks that two little brats fighting means that the kids will definitely become murderers in the future. You know, the house is a place of real torture and humiliation. He ignores the slave owners around him and only focuses on the protagonist. Isn't that just creating conflict for the sake of it?

Early childhood literature, an early model of online literature.

When I saw in the synopsis that it said there were no elements (of content), I thought, "Does writing a book really not require a brain?"

You either need to create an original world or a non-original one. Don't use native characters. The idea of ​​native characters crossing over into a well-known anime or movie world is a bad thing. I've never seen many of them become popular.

It's obvious the author lacked an outline, writing whatever came to mind, with no planned characters or plot. It's even more fantastical than Harry Potter, which has a structured curriculum.

In my personal opinion, I hate fanfiction that simply copies the plot. The protagonist relies on the prophet to do a bunch of things, but in the end, they return to the original plot line. What's the point of doing all that? The protagonist of this book is from another magical world. Without knowing the plot, he arrests Peter Pettigrew on a train in his first year, which is amazing.