In Swallowed Star: Starting with Going to the Nine Cauldrons

Brother, most people who like Tomato fan fiction are old bookworms and have a good understanding of the plot and setting of the original novel. If you are a veteran, then I definitely recommend not starting from the Earth chapter, as that would be too slow. Your writing seems to be new, and it's the beginning of the earth, so you need to determine the outline and write down the big nodes in detail, such as the golden-horned giant beast, the battle of geniuses, and the plot of the quasi-warrior and the Palace of the God of War. Old readers will skip it after reading the title, because these plots do not affect the development of the main line. In addition, if you set the time flow rate ratio, the protagonist of Jiuding Ji becomes the strongest to pass the level, and the Devouring side has not yet encountered the golden-horned behemoth. If you let the two worlds go hand in hand, it is really a failure, unless you only want the Earth chapter. For Swallow, the main conflicts are racial conflicts, the conflict between humans and monsters in the Earth chapter, the conflict between Earth and cosmic people in the Universe chapter, the conflict between the human Hongmeng and the Zerg monster clan, the conflict between the primitive cosmic race and the world beasts, and other conflicts between individuals are all interludes and not mainstream, just like the main missions and side missions. To say that your pace is slow means that you spend a lot of space writing branch plots without advancing the main plot. The setting of the main world + the dungeon world is suitable for using the dungeon world as a side task for quick promotion and giving support to the main world (skills, equipment, human growth). The setting of traveling through multiple worlds at the same time, and jumping to write about major events in each world. If you don't rely on these two things, it's really difficult to attract readers. Your current rhythm is like the original world rhythm ten years ago, not the current fan rhythm. I hope that what I have said can help you. It is really not easy to be a Tomato fan, so don't write it to death. . .

The protagonist traveled to the Jiuding Ji world and didn't experience many battles. How did he rely on to defeat a God of War who had experienced hundreds of battles on the monster battlefield when his fist strength and speed were inferior to others? ? The writing is very unreasonable, always awkward and contradictory.

Brother, almost every chapter of yours is half Jiuding and half Devouring, making it difficult for readers to get involved.

The uncle's children have good talents, but the protagonist has no talents. The protagonist relies on others, but the uncle's children are jealous of the protagonist and cheat him? What's the reason? What's the point of being jealous? I'm jealous that the protagonist is a loser and can't become a warrior.

Try the poison feeling! You can read it if you don't care about the details, and the writing is okay, even if you write about the original work, it's all nonsense! The apprentice still has an exam in the extreme martial arts gym, and it is also described as enrolling in the extreme martial arts gym. There are many such plots. Those who don't care about such details can watch it!

In Chapter 108, Breakthrough to the Planet Level, and in Chapter 203, Breakthrough to the True God, the author was directly manipulated by the Spray Level. Did you take out the outline?

The pressure on the protagonist's level is too much.

Devouring the so-called talents of warriors are all empty, and it doesn't matter if they have resources. What matters is the law, understanding, and will. Everything else is secondary. This so-called warrior talent can only be used on Earth at the beginning.

Generally speaking, it's not bad, I can give it an 8 points. There are two disadvantages. First, the logic does not flow in some places. For example, the protagonist's uncle has a blood feud. He may not be able to face the eldest brother Tuogu's nephew, but he cannot have murderous intentions. Second, some places are not in line with the original work, which makes people laugh. A strong person in the virtual realm can sense the nearby virtual realm, and the sense is very obvious. The recent chapter is too abrupt to appear suddenly and pretend to slap in the face.

One world is enough for you, and you write about other worlds. Different worlds are forcibly blended together. Can you grasp this worldview that makes writing more difficult and haphazardly pieced together? Multi-world fan fiction will end up being nothing but different things.