In Swallowed Star: Starting with Going to the Nine Cauldrons

Brother, most fans of Tomato fanfiction are veteran readers who are familiar with the original plot and settings. If you're an experienced writer, I'd definitely advise against starting with the Earth arc; the pacing would be too slow. Your writing style suggests a beginner, and starting on Earth means you need to establish a clear outline and detail major events like the Golden Horned Beast and…

The protagonist transmigrated to the world of Nine Cauldrons but didn't experience many battles. How did he manage to defeat a battle-hardened god-level expert who had fought countless battles on monster battlefields, despite being inferior in both strength and speed? The writing is very illogical, and it's always awkward and contradictory.

Brother, almost every chapter of yours is half Nine Cauldrons and half Devouring, making it hard for readers to get into the story.

The uncle's children are talented, while the protagonist has none. The protagonist is living under someone else's roof, yet the uncle's two children are jealous of the protagonist and plot against him? What's the logic behind this? What are they jealous of? Are they jealous that the protagonist, a good-for-nothing, can't become a martial artist?

My impressions after trying it out! Those who don't care about details can read it; it's not bad, but the references to the original work are all nonsense! There are many scenes like this where apprentices at the Limitless Martial Arts Academy have to take exams, which is described as "entering the Limitless Martial Arts Academy." Those who don't care about these kinds of details can read it!

Chapter 108 breaks through to the Planetary level, Chapter 203 breaks through to the True God level. The author was so overwhelmed by criticism that he just pulled out the outline.

The protagonist's level was suppressed too much.

The so-called martial arts talent you absorb is all illusory. With enough resources, it's not a big problem. What's important are the laws, comprehension, and willpower. Everything else is secondary. This so-called martial arts talent is only useful at the beginning on Earth.

Overall, it's not bad, I'd give it an 8 out of 10. There are two shortcomings. First, some parts are illogical. For example, the protagonist's uncle, burdened with a blood feud, could only be unable to face his nephew entrusted with his care by his elder brother, not possibly harbor murderous intent. Second, some parts deviate from the original work, pulling the reader out of the story.

One world is enough for you to exploit, yet you still write about other worlds, forcibly mixing different worlds together. This increases the difficulty of writing, and can you handle a worldview that's just randomly pieced together? Fanfiction with multiple worlds will eventually become a hodgepodge, nothing at all.