People in Douluo Can Become Stronger by Working Hard

It's too long-winded, the paragraphs are too crowded, and there's so much intrigue in Notting College. It feels like I'm watching a palace drama, and my head hurts from watching it.

What the author is writing is really too watery! And it's not just ordinary water. The Awakening of the Martial Spirit could be finished in one piece, but it had to be delayed until three pieces were finished. I wrote seven chapters in total for "Hunting Souls", and they were gone after just a few pages! May I suggest the author shorten a whole paragraph into two or three short paragraphs?

I came to see Douluo. He was playing a palace battle and had various inner dramas. It was obviously a world where the strong was respected, so he directly wrote it as Qian Renxue. He obviously has level 20 innate soul power, but with just a little effort, he can become a god and conquer the entire world. I just went to play palace fighting. The same goes for the protagonist. With his qualifications and training, he left this small town within a few years, but he just likes to join various small forces. I'm afraid that being too slow will slow down his early growth. So funny

In the fantasy world, the strong are respected. Don't always describe this kind of infighting between forces. Just say it once. Something that has nothing to do with me. Now I am just living an ignoble existence. There is no point in saying too much. The evolution of a martial soul is made known to everyone. Either take refuge in Wuhun Palace. Or run away, change your face and grow. Wait until there is someone with the strength of the Soul Sect. You can take the fairy grass and the Blue Silver Emperor soul bone and wait for the opportunity to go to a coastal area far away from the mainland like Hanhai City to experience life. It's not difficult to do with Mirror World. Joining a faction is risky. After all, there is a soul skill called hypnosis and memory reading

The writing is okay. There is just too much inner drama. It seems a bit off-putting. There are so many inner activities that the plot is too watery. Even the description of obtaining a soul ring and the effects of a soul skill can actually fill up to ten chapters. It's clearly a plot in three or four chapters. More than doubled

After reading the first few chapters, I copied the original work and then changed a few sentences. The most obvious one was about the guard. It was so perfunctory that I didn't need to write it.

Why are you speechless with Yu Xiaogang😒😒😒😒😒😒😒

It's not bad, but it's too good at watering down. The Awakening of the Martial Spirit watered three cards, a small dormitory relationship watered seven cards, and a small first soul ring watered another seven cards. The introduction of soul skills is pretty good. The relationships between various characters are extremely complex. Speechless. Obviously as long as you improve quickly enough, you can ignore those rubbish relationships, but you are super capable. This is the first time I read a Douluo novel and saw such a capable person. It is estimated that Douluo was just banned when he got a thousand copies.

In this section... There are so many intrigues and intrigues, are you serious? It's just a junior college, what the hell is this this

He wrote a lot about irrelevant things, and wrote about the world of Douluo as he felt when he was an emperor in ancient times. There were a lot of treacherous officials and rogue factions, and intrigues all the time. He directly wrote about other six-year-old children as if it is difficult to live without a 20-year-old soul.

I only read the first two chapters and felt that the plug-in was ridiculous. It seemed like hard work and reward, but in fact, I just imagined a meditation method out of thin air. Why don't you just imagine that you are a god, that you can predict the future, have photographic memory, etc.? It's really very discouraging to hang up too much.

Are good novels always bad? Are you a studio or AI? Can one chapter contain more than ten chapters? ? A good novel, what do you think?

That's too long-winded. You are writing it as a fan, not original. You don't need so much introduction. The soul hunting of the first soul ring is close to 10 chapters. Do you really need to write it like this?

Water, too watery. There is no end to the sea of ​​suffering, but when you turn around, you will reach the shore.

The plug-in works well, but the description doesn't quite convey its functionality. The focus is not on plug-in development. The writing style should be said to be AI or composition style. For a novel, many descriptions are too cumbersome and often feel like forced lyricism. There is also a problem with paragraphing. I guess it's because I'm not used to paragraphing when typing on a computer. I often end up with a long paragraph. I didn't realize that reading on a mobile phone is a bit difficult. The protagonist's character has some problems. He thinks it is unfair that the academy would rather waste the ten-year soul ring kept in captivity than give it to the students. He did not realize that the academy would rather hide the soul ring than sell it, which in itself means that it is a secret that cannot be widely disclosed. It gives people the feeling of a holy mother bitch who is generous to others. Go back to Notting City specifically to take revenge on Yu Xiaoan, knock him out when Yu Xiaoan ambushed Tang San at the school gate, and then ignore what happens next? It would be better not to make a fuss than to make a fuss at all. After bragging about the concealment of the space for a long time, in the end, he didn't even dare to make a serious move on Yu Xiaoan. For this reason, he also exposed that someone wanted to target him, but it had no impact on Yu Xiaoan, and he was still allowed to receive the apprenticeship normally.

Chapter 7 of a soul ringing water, and I don't even bother to segment it.

There is too much nonsense. After reading twenty-one chapters, only seven or eight of them are useful, and the rest are all nonsense. After looking at the table of contents, I feel that the nonsense is still going on! This book gives the impression that it is a writing practice for a novice. I want to write it well, but it turns out that it is too detailed. I want to record every bit of life. In addition, it is not divided into paragraphs. The number seems to be published with a pressure of 2,000.