Naruto: I'm Really Not a Pokémon

He is almost invincible under the Six Paths, but you give him a dungeon to brush up his skills. What he lacks now is the amount of chakra, and he has no shortage of skills and so on. Originally, the protagonist is the top strength in the ninja world, so why are you running into parallel worlds and making dragons? Pulse, Uchiha light, Sharingan, I don't know what Uchiha light is, Dragon Vein is even more troublesome, if you want Sharingan, Konoha can have as much as you want, even if you snatch the twin Kamui of Kakashi and Obito. After all, the protagonist is Mizukage. Author, do you still remember how many skills the protagonist has now? A bunch of messy nonsense.

First of all, it is worthy of recognition that the author's early stage is quite interesting. Until the death of the third Mizukage, it was interesting to watch, but after the protagonist became the fourth Mizukage, the situation took a turn for the worse. From the plot point of view, no one Kage took responsibility. In fact, the style of the entire early stage was still biased towards the drama. Although there were some complaints and comedy, it really didn't reach this point. This kind of frivolous writing style, with a strong sense of tearing, made the readers frown. One of the deep impressions was that the protagonist said, "I am only 12 years old." I frowned when I read it. According to the meaning of the article at that time, it was not to gain sympathy in exchange for freedom of action, but to express it out of emotion. But if you feel this, I will hit you with a hammer. You are used to being a child. Do you really think you are a child? If you want to achieve something, either explain it on the spot, or explain it all at once later. Failure to explain is equivalent to nothing, and it will only make readers frown. The follow-up "Dragon Vein" is even more incomprehensible. At this point, I didn't read much of the rest. As I scrolled and scrolled, I found that the plot was getting lower and lower. As others said, the protagonist has long been the first echelon of strength. His position is higher than Hashirama, but he is not unified. He is waiting for the villain to attack. It is really a bit baffling. Then there is the system. The early system allows the protagonist to rise quickly. A little bit of fun can still be read. The author also deliberately controlled the system. It took time to save gold coins, which can be regarded as suppressing the combat power and making the article smoother. But by the end of Turning Point Three, the system's combat power could no longer be suppressed. It had powerful instant death skills, a rich skill library, and mobile damage to save lives. The only thing that affected the protagonist's strength was the amount of chakra. In other words, the protagonist could just pick up a tailed beast at that time. With Chatona, he could directly overrun the ninja world. Then the author started selling drugs, and refused on the grounds that he didn't want to be monitored. This poisonous point is actually very big. None of the skills the protagonist used at that time could improve the body, and he may not have relevant skills in the future. The protagonist does not have any natural blood, which means that the chakra will not be much higher than the average shadow in the end. So the vast and boundless chakra of the tailed beast is what the protagonist needs most. He even needs to use conspiracy and trickery to plunder it, but you don't want the tailed beast that comes to your door. You said you didn't want others to discover your secret, so why did you bring this Uchiha light back to the main world in the Dragon Vein plot a few chapters later and send it to others in your own space? Ah? In fact, I really want to communicate with the author. What did he think when he wrote this plot? Did he want to add a female protagonist? Can Terumi Mei, who has laid the groundwork in the early stage, do it? Is it okay to have Tsunade Hagura with whom I have been socializing? To be honest, if you want to choose, you have to do this thing 😥 Uchiha Hikari's appearance is very baffling. You are an outsider who has no control over the affairs of the Uchiha family. If you don't have weapons, what position do you have to interfere with others, and you have to be a hero to save the beauty? You said you pity her, are there few pitiful people in the ninja world? You said she is very capable and you want to recruit her. There are so many geniuses in the ninja world. Why don't you quickly take her back to Kirigakure Village? To put it bluntly, it was motivated by sex, but the author didn't grasp the heat, which made the writing a bit disgusting. Then there is the system. To be honest, the protagonist has too many skills, many of which are not used. Each attribute is unlocked, and more and more attributes are unlocked. In order to get money, junk skills are released in piles. In the end, they can only be reduced to a sentence to make the protagonist understand better. This rubbish skill is not really rubbish, but rubbish that cannot be used. For example, even in a Jonin or even Kage duel, there will be a ninjutsu like Go Fireball that appears in the early stage. However, for the protagonist, there is no early trial of the ninjutsu duel, so he directly turns to the later Otsutsuki Ascension, and directly uses the ice shield. White Shield, what kind of skills are of the Absolute Zero lineage? It's written that the combat power has soared. The author feels happy writing it, and the readers feel happy watching the battle. But a battle cannot be endless. As soon as the battle is over, the backlash comes, and the article collapses directly. If you want to make the protagonist's combat power smoother without changing the main body, then you need to change the extracted skills. The skills of the mythical beast are still too high to match his character. Either increase the difficulty of golden skills, or simply change the golden skills to big-character explosions, change the mythical beast skills to the bottom color, and then increase the expressiveness of the skills. . . . . The 40 damage skills and the 120 damage skills are both in purple, is this right? It's not necessary that all skills are purple. Why do you keep the other colors? If low-level skills are paired with low-level colors, then the problem of junk skills can be greatly improved. If arranged well, the enjoyment will not be reduced by half, it will even be more climax, and the article can be written dozens or millions of words more. ———————————————————— Well, what I said is very complicated. Generally speaking, it is an analysis of why I quit the Dragon Vein plot, which is what I currently think of to complain about. There are still some questions next, and I will express my opinions. First of all, the character of the protagonist must stand up, and then he can grow, but he must grow, that is, he cannot go back as he lives. The protagonist pretends to be young and gets along with his peers at the beginning, but later on he is in a high position, and he is still so "friendly". This is actually not scientific, because this difference in status is the same as the mountain, and it exists objectively. The scenery at the foot of the mountain and the top of the mountain are different, so the protagonist is always inexplicably friendly in the Mizukage office. That is wrong. If you want to write about the protagonist not forgetting his original intention, then Then you can add some daily plots. In the Mizukage office, it is more solemn and official. You can be humble to your elders and stern but not harsh to your subordinates. Then you get off work, right? After a day's work, you can get together with your friends in the village in private. At this time, the supporting character behaves very restrained, and then the protagonist laughs and says that they are still good friends in private. What's going on, right? Isn't it much better like this? The plot is smooth, the content is rich, and it is not obtrusive. There is more writing, which satisfies the author's wish to limit the number of words. There are many, many similar writing techniques. Using these techniques can not only make readers read better, but it is also good for the author himself. The more he writes, the more he earns. Looking at the comment area, some people said that the author felt that the number of words written in the article was too few, but it was not that few. You omitted too much. You skipped a few months, and the protagonist seemed to be invincible in the blink of an eye. This is why the outline was not done well. Other invincible articles can write millions of words and still make readers feel that it is not enough. When you should write You must write when you are done, and the plot will not develop as you take it for granted as soon as it passes through your mind. I think there is much room for writing about the protagonist's strength improvement, talking about how to experiment, how to practice, and talking about combat skills, from being beaten to a bruised and swollen face to defeating a powerful enemy, rather than just mentioning everything in one stroke, and then making a few moves in the battle. That's just a technique, you can use it once or twice, but you can't use the same writing method throughout the entire article. At the beginning, what kind of passerby were you fighting against? What is the purpose of directly writing a good battle for the protagonist? To omit the training process? No! It is to avoid the poisonous point that the protagonist, an ordinary person, knows nothing about entering and exiting the ninja world! Let the protagonist have the level of a ninja school student from the beginning! Next, you have to hone your fighting skills step by step! There are only a few training grounds, a few team battles, and a few missions, and the combat level is comparable to that of a movie. Not to mention that there are several omitted months to make up for everything, which at most makes you not a logical defect, but for the saturation of the characters, the characterization, and the promotion and development of the plot will cause a devastating blow. The word count will also be hundreds of thousands less for no reason. Talking about writing issues that I usually don't like to talk about, I would say that the author's writing has a lot of room for improvement. In fact, I can feel it. To put it bluntly, I can't even understand the sentences in some places, so I won't give examples here. OK, and the scenes are also very jumpy, but I can still understand it, but you lack so many things for no reason. What are you trying to do? Here is an example of what happened to the protagonist in the Dragon Pulse storyline that I watched last time. The protagonist asks Senju Tobirama how Senju Hashirama died. You can start with "..." To introduce the content, or you can say "Then Senju Hashirama started talking about what happened back then..." When the protagonist hears the key point (description of actions and demeanor) and says "Senju Hashirama committed suicide?!" The emotions are mobilized in place and the reading is smooth. How did the author write that part? I was going on and on about what happened back then, but I haven't quite figured it out yet. There is no introduction at all, just the protagonist's long speech "It's suicide" is left here to talk to himself, and then Tobirama follows it with "Yes" I have no place to complain, and after reading it, I frown. I frowned and read it several times before I understood what the author meant. 😅 There are too many similar writing problems. The content of this chapter has nothing to do with the content of the previous chapter. Well, not much. I have written half a chapter. How many months have passed since I wrote this sentence. The key is that if you use it too much, your aesthetic will become tired. Will the author be writing right now? "Three months later, training ground No. A few months. Sometimes, after reading the previous chapter, the next chapter is completely irrelevant. A few months have passed before explaining that the new task has been completed. You can use this writing method once or twice, but you can't do it in reverse for the whole article. Forget it, the writing problem cannot be corrected. I still have to think about it. Let's discuss the plot and the characters. If you increase your power linearly, I won't say anything until you reach the fourth battle. To be honest, I can't say that the feeling of suppressing it is half-step to the sixth level. But the protagonist has directly increased exponentially. From a small broken chuunin before the start of the third battle, to the end of the third battle, he has become a being who can kill Sarutobi Hiruzen. Sarutobi Hiruzen is not a piece of cake. It's a big boss. After three battles, it will be the top level. The protagonist has the strength to conquer the ninja world. Even if he is cautious, considering some existences hidden in the dark, such as Cihang and the Six Paths Sage. That doesn't allow Obito to jump around. I'm sure that Ban is dead, so I can't hold back. ? Nothing has changed? What is the point of your meeting? Is it disgusting for readers to say that a known enemy is better than an unknown enemy? It is a poisonous point because the author is not sure about the Akatsuki organization. I can still complain about it. We have been close to each other for three months. How can you do it? The important thing is that these three months of getting along were just written down. I'm really speechless. How many things did you write in one sentence? There are almost no characters, only Yahiko is optimistic and cheerful, Nagato has no opinion, and Konan... I have no impression. What a good subplot turned into a foreshadowing, and it felt like stepping on shit. Besides, after becoming a Mizukage, that's it. Jingtuji, there are no changes. There are only empty protagonists who are exhausted from dealing with many things, but they can't make up for a day. Some low-level ninjutsu skills are opened, and the supporting characters are missing. Oh, Mizukage is so good at it, right? There are so many geniuses, and you are awesome. If you don't want to push straight, then you can steal the genius, ah, no, go to the Dragon Vein World [fn=17 ] Hey, hey, it's back again. The world of Dragon Vein is a mess. It's a huge mess. It directly blocks my desire to read more. Many Naruto fans write about Dragon Vein, but not many of them are good. It's really like moths flying into the flames and destroying themselves. Skip it, skip it, it's just that the main line is off. There is Mizukage in your title, and everyone recognizes Mizukage in the introduction. People still want to see your boy Mizukage, the hero emerges as a boy, how can you inspire it? You want to make Kirigakure the number one, but when you become a watermark, you take off your job and run out to have fun. It may not be what you mean, but it is how it is shown. After all, the author did not say the specific work, only said that he was tired, but he was irresponsible when he said it. Writing a novel is not a climax in your head. How do you change this aspect? Babyface shouldn't be used like this, just let him take the lead. Anyway, you have written about him in the early stage and established a positive character. If he takes the lead, the protagonist can have time to tinker with his own things in the back, and he will not be accused of being irresponsible when he goes out to have fun. This is good. If you become the fourth generation Mizukage at a young age, then you are firmly in that position. If you want to write babyface like this, then the protagonist is indeed You can only become a Mizukage. To be honest, Bai Yanqing is not qualified. The Seven Ninja Swordsmen are all thugs. The new generation has not grown up. It is already over. Being a Mizukage is actually a good point. You are in a high position at a young age, so you should write about this high position. The fun part of the Mizukage is not written out, but it is dragged down into poisonous points. To be honest, the characters of the enemy characters also have their own problems. Give some examples. For example, it is said that Namikaze Minato can be supported everywhere, but in the subsequent three battles, he will not be able to come. Oh, to be honest, the protagonist's performance in this battle is too supermodel. When it comes to this, I can't escape this supermodel. He was killed by the monkey demon. He was instantly killed by a shadow. It's a super shadow, so you still have to beat me. Forget it, don't talk about this, just complain, complain, and I won't analyze it. I have written about the Third Hokage's inaction, and I have seen conspiracy theories, but I have never seen anyone who is a waste. The Third Hokage in this book is obviously that kind of waste. A baby-faced person can sacrifice his life to become a jinchuriki when the village is in danger. Do you think that a jinchuriki is a good job? You know the attitude of every ninja village towards the jinchuriki. In the early stage, they worked hard to abolish the blood mist system. Such a character should be written as a traitor. It's messy. Isn't it because of the influence of genjutsu? Isn't this character just to pave the way for the protagonist to take over? Can't you wait until the fifth generation? Well, it's bad. There are no characters to complain about. This does not mean that the characters written are perfect, but that there are too few characters. Although they have appeared, there is no point in saying it. Ah, there are some that can be praised. Those Ninja swordsmen are not good at writing. Yes, Kisame is okay. That's it, of course, I have a question, are Zabuza and Haku still a couple? 😁 I thought of this question when Zabuza appeared, but until I stopped reading, I didn't see Haku appear, but after all, I only read less than half of the content, which is not the whole story. It can be seen that the author is still very careful in what he wrote before. The article may be very thoughtful, but some shortcomings lead to no final result. I can't read it despite being disgusted. The author still needs to have a clear understanding of himself and discuss a lot of content with the readers. What do readers know about writing? It is impossible for 3,000 people to read your book. If you listen to the majority, it is equivalent to abandoning 1,000 people. Only if you think well is it really good.

Hehe, the main thing is to prove that I am not writing blindly. When writing most of the plots, I always look up information (so I write very slowly 🤐). After all, it is my first time to write a book, so I am very afraid of making any mistakes or omissions. I myself often read Naruto fan novels before. Although the setting of Kishimoto's original work is full of bugs, sometimes I still feel uncomfortable when I see the obvious time and age errors in the fan novels. So I try to be more serious when I write. PS: Stacked armor. After all, the author is still a human being, and after reading too many Naruto fanfics, it is very likely that his memory will be confused in some places, and he will regard the second set as the original version. So there must be some mistakes and omissions, and everyone is welcome to help point them out. If it has little impact on the plot, I will try to modify it immediately. If there is something that cannot be changed 😏, it is the unevenness of the parallel world. PS: Come and praise me. 😃

The first half is well written. The combination of Pokémon ability extraction and ninjutsu is full of expectations. The interaction with Ninja, his companions, and the teacher is also quite interesting. Especially the part about becoming a Mizukage is very attractive. There has been a qualitative change in combat power, and the emotional aspect is basically written. Maintaining the dignity of the previous generation Mizukage and protecting his companions, in short, this part is well written. But the plot after becoming Mizukage can be said to have taken a turn for the worse. I think the specific problems are mainly reflected in a few parts. First of all, from the description of the protagonist's character, I personally believe that people's thoughts should change with experience. The protagonist has experienced cruel wars, assumed the responsibility of water shadows, and had a series of experiences. However, the author will always give the protagonist some very boring psychological descriptions, and the interaction with his companions still seems very... Childish and funny, if you are a teenager growing up, these are understandable and even occasionally make people laugh, but now that he is the protagonist of Mizukage, the writing style is more serious than the funny and humorous style. In the beginning, he was still talking about serious things, but suddenly he was interspersed with similar words and deeds, giving people a strong sense of separation and discomfort. Secondly, I think the most serious problem lies in the plot. All in all, they have the ability to unify the ninja world and conquer everyone early on, but they have to play like a child and wait for the villain to attack and then take the opportunity to unify. The reason is just to change the name. This leads to the protagonist being offline for a long time in the subsequent plot. There is nothing wrong with this way of writing. However, the subsequent plot and the unification of Kirigakure actually have little to do with the development of the new generation. That is to say, the previous content is not the key to the subsequent plot. It is equivalent to just writing a lot of branch lines, resulting in a large amount of content that is not interesting to read just by looking at the title. Of course, I think the biggest problem lies in the author's concept. I saw the author speak before, and it probably meant that novels with less than one million words or insufficient words are not qualified. However, I feel that if the plot is heavily filled with water, it will be boring and the number of words will increase. It is meaningless to the novel itself. Maybe after becoming Mizukage, a plot deduction that suits the protagonist's strength may be more exciting.

Alas, when reading other people's novels, I read 4,000 words every day and read them in less than two minutes. I always think that these dog authors can't do more? Who can see this? What? Am I short of starting coins? Or have you watched fewer ads? Now it's my turn to write a novel. I've been scratching my head for several hours every day to squeeze out 4,000 words. I can't squeeze out any more 😥

Blood Mist is not Konoha. The atmosphere of the village is a bit too peaceful.

To be honest, there are so many fans in Dead Fire Sea now that they can use bricks to build a house, but the author can write some new ideas, which is really good

To be honest, the protagonist became invincible too quickly. I thought he would develop for a while, but I didn't expect that he went to a parallel world and became invincible immediately. It's too early to become invincible. The protagonist is already strong enough before going to the parallel world. Except for Uchiha Madara and Liudou Otsutsuki, the protagonist has no one to fear. Going to the dragon vein to solve the chakra problem will actually make the combat effectiveness more in line with the current stage. But the protagonist directly absorbed Madara Uchiha, who was fully equipped with the Reincarnation Eye. This combat power can already penetrate Naruto. How will the protagonist participate in the subsequent plot? It feels very difficult, too invincible. The few remaining soldiers Obito gathered are not enough for the protagonist to escape. As expected, the protagonist is now forced to hide behind the scenes.

Now I feel that the style has changed, and now it feels a bit behind the scenes, which is not bad. After all, I have the strength, but I just feel that the protagonist's style of doing things is not so decent. Originally, one of the fun points of the fandom was to make up for some of the regrets of the original work, but now the protagonist's perspective seems to be only biased towards Kirigakure. When Kenji is doing things, such as the Nine-Tails Rebellion, he is in a state of observation and silent promotion, which feels uncomfortable. Although it is better for adults to be self-interested, whether it is Naruto or Pokémon, it feels like adult romance. It is a bit too political now, and they are a bit unscrupulous in order to achieve their goals.

"Arzeus has not yet arrived. If I fall again, the Pokémon will be alone, and Kirigakure Village will be destroyed at the hands of Mizukage and others." "I still have mythical beasts to catch, dreams to complete, and mistakes to correct." "How could I fall." "How could I fall!" "Kirikage needs me, Lanzi needs me, and the Pokémon family needs me." Needs me … Needs me. Jianchuan Orange! "So, I can't fall!" "I want to stand up, I want to..." "Fight again!" 🐶

No, I finally know what's wrong. After defeating a famous person in Konoha, Konoha will give you reputation, but you won't get anything from Ninjutsu if you fight so hard. The feeling of pleasure is as little as not at all. The more you look at the protagonist, the more he looks like a part-time worker.

These few chapters are too watery and have turned into a struggle, even though the previous writing was quite good. It's boring to watch Naruto fans engage in these fights. I feel like I've ordered these chapters in vain. I might as well draw another Pokémon.

The protagonist is now doing pure acrobatics, one operation, 0 damage

Dear Comrade Author: Are you feeling well these days? The weather in Siberia has been bad and cold recently, with several rounds of snowstorms, and the scenery is wonderful. Please be sure to update about 200,000 words every day so that I can read more wonderful things. Otherwise, the potatoes that have not yet been harvested in Siberia will become your daily work content and basic meals. There are also beautiful Siberian scenery waiting for you to enjoy. I hope to see you soon, my dear comrade author. Josef Vissarionovich Stalin

If you don't deal with basics like physical fitness and chakra volume, you have to give a bunch of miscellaneous and unrefined skills. Even if you give them, you also need all the side effects, which seems to be a bit overwhelming.

I don't know why the novels I read recently all have to have the protagonist be pushed by things, and they have to be dramatic and force him to do something. Anyway, what I read was very frustrating. The two Naruto books I read recently on Qidian were like this. Things were dense and s13.

I just read Chapter 165 and I feel that the plot has been very bad since the author went to work. The level has plummeted. The protagonist is not strong enough to participate in any big things he wants to do. But he has to force it up for the sake of the plot. It is very fragmented. Generally speaking, I can only change the direction and write about the daily interactions between Gua Gua or the heroine. The result is also Not at all. I don't know if it's because I was criticized in the past and I didn't dare to write it or something else. Guagua is obviously a feature of this book. However, it basically stopped appearing in the middle period. Later, others said that a parallel world was created. It was really difficult. I have read so many Naruto fan fiction stories and none of them can be read. There is no need for this trap.

The plots in these chapters are not well written and lively. It's really boring to have to stuff official fan settings like Boruto into the official history.

It's really unfair to follow the protagonist with these skills.

I can understand the restrictions you wrote, but you have to use your B knife? The key is that you are not very good at using a knife. You are either cool, cool, or awesome. You are not interested in it. If you continue to write, you will lose your base! The imagination of Pokémon skills and Ninjutsu. Still didn't expect to be able to write out some grade outline and are not ready yet? If it doesn't work, slow down the update and sort it out. Still out of ideas? I'll give you one. The shadow clone drives over, and the overexploded steam absorbs heat instantly, causing water mist to fly all over the sky. Another hand, Absolute Zero. Instantly turns an area of ​​water mist into solid ice. Or cooperate with the ninjas in the Water Shadow Village, and the subordinates will turn on the fog, and you can go over and turn on Absolute Zero. When the people on the opposite side react, they will be gone. It is an absolute range-killing weapon and a nuclear deterrent! Shuiying Village has been writing about it and there is still no one who is absolutely strong to control the situation, so it might as well develop a nuclear deterrent. It's easy to serve it to the table for dinner later. Have you written about the impact the protagonist has on Shuiying Village now? The good and the bad. It can be said that no! Then if you keep writing it, you might as well go out and become a ninja! Speaking of this, I thought about the question I asked earlier about Mizukage not being able to freely choose any ninjutsu. What's the point of staying in this village?

Pokémon Skill Recommendations (Ninjutsu Transformation) 1. Water Immersion: Change the opponent's chakra to water attributes, interfering with the opponent's use of non-water ninjutsu. A skill that can turn the tables when necessary. 2. Water Wave Knife: Water attribute sword light and sword energy. There are so many mist ninjas who play with swords, and they don't have any cooperation with ninjutsu. It's okay to share it with Zabuza and the others. 3. Growth: A little baby turns into a big boy within a period of time. Use the scene to see the author's performance 🤭. 4. Eye of the Heart/Lock: Respond to high-speed attacks (Thunderbolt Hanhan or Xiao Huangmao) 5. Take over: Transfer positions with teammates. (Rescue someone at a critical moment or use a substitution to perform a big move) 6. Earth fluctuations: Perception skills.

Author Sang, don't worry, write at your own pace. Control the coherence of the article. If the progress is too fast, a sense of fragmentation will appear.

I love watching it, but why isn't it popular? I can't find any pirated copies, so I can only order them all😋😋😋😋

Update quickly

Come on! I like the author's rhythm very much. It's been a long time since I met a Naruto fan that I like so much.

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Is it possible that the next book will be about the Pokémon world?

How can I put it, since Yanbai, the lottery scenes have become less and it feels a bit boring.

This is an excellent article for a novice author. I hope the author's next one will be better.

The extra chapter continues, and I think Kyuubi can have Vulpix and Kyuubi by his side