Cyberpunk: from Dogtown to Legend

In terms of plot, I think it is a very good fanfic. The characters, character arcs, and more detailed characterizations are all very lovable and very readable. However, the writing style lacks coherence. It does not read in the order of "1, 1.5, 2, 3", But in the fragmented sense of "1, 2, 1.5, 3". The general logical order is okay, but the detailed description is really too fragmented. For example, here in Chapter 142, the first paragraph in the picture is Kazuya's psychological description, the second paragraph is his verbal description, and the third paragraph is psychological description again. However, it can be seen that the psychological descriptions in the first and third paragraphs have an obvious transition relationship. This transition is coherent and is also the psychological starting point for the sentence "What about my order?" So I think the order that is easier to read should be. Kazuya is puzzled, but/however/however Kazuya still feels that these two thugs will definitely cooperate with him. Then what words were said, and then the protagonist's answer, this kind of continuity looks very good. Looking down, "V is a little anxious" and "Lin Yue shook his head slightly" can be put together, "V is a little anxious, but Lin Yue just shook his head slightly". This can more clearly reflect the interaction between the two, and it would be natural to follow "Military Science and Technology have their tail pinched... Lin Yue has too many problems" in the next paragraph. And the "cyber madman staring at the two of them..." Is really abrupt. There is only a short description of this part, and then it disappears, and it also makes the reference to "he has too many problems" unclear. According to my understanding, it is Lin Yue who has too many problems, not the Cybermaniacs who have too many problems. There are too many fragmented writing styles in this book, and the author's control of natural paragraphs is also very poor. There are too many small natural paragraphs that are subdivided, almost a period is a natural paragraph, which often aggravates the fragmented and unsmooth feeling. Of course, it may be that I am too picky, but I still think that these are also part of the writing style. The characters in this book are very good, the character arcs are very natural, and the logic is relatively smooth, but it made me pay more attention to this kind of broken writing.

It's been a long time since the last book review. There aren't many chapters but it's still exciting. The most eye-catching thing is the character creation. V's character arc and charm are created so well, and of course there is still a high level of emotional support. The transition in the plot is a bit stiff, but of course the author is also burdened with real life, which is very understandable. Fortunately, with the support of a detailed outline, it did not deviate too much from the original level, and the story line unfolded steadily. Unfortunately, many of the well-developed characters in the new part are missing. This is true for Cat Girl, Emma, ​​and Rebecca. This part is simply a pas de deux between V and the protagonist. Of course, his good friend Suzuki is still online. In the battle for the first heroine, I am afraid that only Suzuki has the strength to fight against V (laughs). I have a question. I don't know whether it's because of my lack of reading ability or something else, but I didn't realize the main line of the story and the motivation of the protagonist. Although the protagonist has a redemptive heart and wants all partners to get a perfect ending, the overall impression is that the protagonist has been pushed by various circumstances. Although this is in line with the tone of the cyber world, I also hope that the protagonist can draw the rainbow light of punk. It is more about taking the initiative to fight, rather than fighting back under pressure. Finally, I would like to thank the author as usual for creating such an excellent fan work for the niche subject of cyberpunk. Despite his poor performance and working hard for the people, he still continues to create. 🌹🌹🌹

It's very cybernetic. I hope the author will update it steadily and not be too eunuch.

After reading so many game fanfics, I would call this one the strongest. The rigorous research on details and the full use of the original world view are unparalleled. Regarding the characters, it can be seen that the author has put great effort into the text of imitation games and spin-off dramas. It is a shortcut for fans to restore the character's personality, and the actual effect is also very good. Come on

The thought of seeing the update at night makes me squirm in darkness in bed😭

I read all the chapters in almost two days. The author's characterization is absolutely top-notch, and he retains some of the "depressive" flavor of cyberpunk. He does not overly cater to the protagonist in recreating the original (game) characters. I like it very much. My personal opinion is that to watch cyberpunk-style works is to watch various characters struggling in the "high-tech, low-life" spectacle society, constantly questioning themselves, torturing themselves, and exploring the relationship between technology, people, and society. Whether it is derived from Edward Hopper's "blackness" and "loneliness", or the rebellious and punk cultural structure derived from the "decadent" and "psychedelic" movement derived from the hippie movement, they are all part of the cyberpunk style. If it is just fun, just killing, just "burning the city to ashes", then it would be a bit of a waste for the cyberpunk theme and the work "2077". Therefore, I think this work of the author has indeed achieved this in the "fan fiction" and it is well balanced. Friends who like it must recommend it to read it.

I hope the author is stable and doesn't want to be a eunuch.

Sasha's body is directly destroyed and his soul is uploaded to serve as the protagonist's exclusive AI logistics. Lucy's body was directly decomposed and the skull's consciousness was uploaded as a servo skull. Rebecca erased her consciousness and transformed her whole body into a prosthetic body. She usually puts it in a suitcase and deploys it as a fighter servitor during battle.

Today I specially opened a new file and checked the date. Fans now have a misunderstanding, thinking that 2077 is a matter of 2077... Actually it is a matter of 2078. I'll list what I found. The first is the start of company V. Company V's own office computer has an attendance sheet. The earliest date scale on it is September 1, 2074, but the histogram shows that V joined the company in about March, and the last date of the scale is September 1, 2076. The subsequent histogram is about January 2077. Then after V was expelled, he hung out with Jack for half a year. After receiving a mission to rescue people in Japan Street with Jack, he returned home. There was a song ranking list on the computer at home. The latest news was June 12th, but there was a problem here. The stealing of goods from Kanbi Building was actually done a day or two after that. When I went to get the samurai sword from the roof of the Kanbi Building, I deciphered Saburo's diary and clearly marked that day as December 1, 2077... According to Saburo's diary, it was 2078 when V died and was taken to Lao Wei Na to recover for more than a month... So it was the first half of 2078 when V became active as the King of Hell.

Without the bad plot at the beginning, the score of this book could at least be doubled. In the first few dozen chapters, everyone ran away 🙂

I have read a lot of content in this book. I would like to share with you my thoughts and my humble opinions after reading it. Everyone can discuss it rationally. Without further ado, let's give a summary: The shortcomings and advantages are relatively obvious, so it cannot be called a masterpiece that can be widely praised, but it is indeed a good cyberpunk novel that is definitely worth reading. ① This book is very detailed in its research on the world view of 2077. It can be seen that the author has put a lot of effort into collecting information on games and board games, which is worthy of praise ② This book is not just a simple read. It can be concluded that the author really wanted to write a "cyberpunk" flavor, and made a careful balance between saving tragedy and highlighting punk ③The author's subsequent characterization of the characters is very full, which is actually a very rare and scarce advantage in fan fiction. However, in my opinion, this book has several shortcomings. I hope that future readers can try to ignore it after reading it and see if the excitement of the following article can attract you. I hope the author can write more attractive content based on this. ①The author's writing style at the beginning lacks consideration, or is inexperienced. Whether you should hold back your favorite characters in the face of life or death can be said to be an ancient poison (laughs). I believe that this part of the plot will definitely have a very bad impact on the performance of the work. I also read the author's explanation of this part of the plot, but I personally think that even if this plot trend continues, it can still be compensated for by writing techniques. If the protagonist does something negative, based on my reading experience, don't let the protagonist defend himself in the article, and the author shouldn't use popular science settings in the comments. In fact, it is the best choice for you to scold along with the readers (laughs), even if you arrange a plot where the characters in the article evaluate the protagonist's behavior (such as Hanz) and scold him SB. ②The main plot line is too compact. Every time I think I can finally get into the branch line, I can find that it is the fuse of the main line. This writing technique makes me feel a little uncomfortable. I just felt like both the protagonist and the reader needed space to breathe. I don't mean that you have to leave a long period of time for the protagonist to deal with small incidents or commissions to relax (of course the plot allows, that's not bad). Let's write more detailed descriptions of getting along with certain characters. It can be seen that the author is actually very good at writing these. My evaluation is "Watch and write more." I understand that the author wants to show the protagonist's powerlessness during this period of constant struggle and being repeatedly teased by fate, but sometimes what I feel is a chaotic feeling that the protagonist is too busy to finish things. ③The author's writing order made my brain shut down for a while. Especially when the protagonist is secretly pushed by Yorinobu and rebels against Arasaka, the timeline is sometimes here and sometimes there, which really gave me a headache. You really like to play reverse order, but if it happens so frequently in the future, can you add a time and place, such as 7:30 PM on May 16, 2076, in the company square. Spare my brain (crying). In short, I wish this book will become smoother and better as it gets written.

Fortunately, the author writes about cyberpunk, otherwise he would be really popular.

Removing the role of Emma doesn't seem to have any impact

I picked it up again and read it again. I still feel that the main plot is too tight and overwhelming, and the follow-up is not very refreshing. However, the branch plots, emotions and daily life are well written. If the author can balance the main plot and branch plots well, and strengthen the excitement, then it will be much more comfortable to read.

Royal Sister v

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Do you have the style of a company dog?

After listening to a lot of stories about losing money in the past two days, I feel that the world of 2077 is still relatively mild, and it can be regarded as a beautiful fantasy of the ultimate form of capital () The author's writing is still too bright ()

I almost vomited after reading exciting articles every day. Finally I came across this kind of article where the protagonist can encounter setbacks. How can everything be smooth sailing in the cyber world? Fighting back in adversity and struggling to survive are what attracts me more.

I've read half of it, and overall it's very in line with my taste. Although the first half may be a bit too depressing, it's still very interesting overall. Good luck, author.

The characters in 2077 are really ugly. It's impossible to watch them without using mods. Those sex dolls are all monsters and ghosts. The aesthetics of Arasaka and Gunko are really bad. In reality, the beauties of the 19th century cannot be said to be ugly to people of the 21st century. Logically speaking, even if 2077 is in the near future, the aesthetics will not change that much.

Finish writing well, write more, don't be a eunuch

When did the protagonist and V get together? If we only get back together in the finale or if there are hundreds of chapters, then I'll get out of here. It's like a sad drama. There's really no need to write the emotional line between the protagonist and V like this. It's very annoying.

The writing is good, but the plot is too tight, and I feel that you are getting further and further away from your original intention. First, Lin Yue, who wants to save his life in Dog Town, becomes a person who protects his teammates and friends, and finally becomes a person who saves the world inexplicably, and the characters are getting weirder and weirder, putting the cart before the horse. With all due respect, my friend, Cyberpunk 2077 is a world where you can be alone or stand alone, but you still want to make enemies of all companies and revolutionize the world? Are you too busy to come here alone? Don't get more and more outrageous later. I really can't figure out how to round things up later. Rebecca is also suffering from cyberpsychosis. Why don't you write more about your daily life, care more about your partners, and stop thinking about grandiose things all day long? Revolutionary revolution, holding it back will kill you to death. It doesn't mean that your thoughts are wrong, it can only be said that the world is just like that. If you can save it, it won't become like that, and it won't create a bunch of bullshit and monsters. It shows that the revolutionary ideas themselves cannot lead them, which leads to the low quality and moral quality of the entire Night City. I just want to complain about it, but it really feels weirder and weirder after watching it. How you write is your freedom.

Looking back at it again, I found that it was still the same problem I mentioned in the past: AI assimilation. Originally the protagonist did not face the dilemma of v, but he had to arrange a dilemma of being assimilated by AI? Forcibly creating unreasonable difficulties? He was immediately targeted by a lark as soon as he connected to the cybernetic body? Isn't it a bit forced? I later figured out that the author had his own outline, but when describing the specific plot, something went against the outline, so he ignored the irrationality of the plot and forced a hard landing back to the outline. That's the problem. It's right to consider the outline, but there is obviously a problem with the rationality of the connected plot: the biggest conflict with the lark is the neural matrix, and the neural matrix is ​​needed because the protagonist is facing AI assimilation, and the part where the protagonist is facing AI assimilation, in my opinion, the plot is obviously blunt, and it is forcibly arranged to put the protagonist in such a dilemma. Would it be better if the protagonist faced a last resort dilemma and had to take the initiative to contact the black wall and wandering AI, instead of being inexplicably controlled by the plot? I don't know. Having said so much, I actually think this book is quite good. But there are many problems with plot connection. To be honest, forced plot killing or deus ex machina are too obvious, and there are a lot of such plots. If you could really polish it up and not force a hard landing of the plot just for the sake of the outline, would it be even better? This can only be a guess.

Wuhu, I've never seen the start of Dog Town, old man, it will be updated steadily 😁

I suggest new book friends not to be too impatient. The protagonist's growth is very smooth, and the emotional drama behind it is also very good. It doesn't seem to falter at all. Please be patient and read. It's a rare good book.

The time traveler struggled for a long time before defeating Saburo Arasaka, and Lucy also gave away her daughter. It's not as good as the original version of V with a flaming body. Abuser

The first half is quite good, but the later I read it, the more uncomfortable it became. I felt that the author wanted to mix too many things together, and the reading experience was not very good.

Why do you like reverse order so much? It looks so confusing. Many places feel inexplicable 🙂