Help Each Other with Countless Others

After a while, the multi-line narrative begins, and the plot is not very coherent.

As a reader, you only need to read novels, but young literary authors need to consider many things.

，，，""：，？ ? He needs to add sugar, milk, stinky tofu and soy milk to his egg fried rice, and finally add two spoons of rice wine for seasoning. After it is out of the pot, put a layer of butter, a layer of lard, and a layer of brown sugar in the bowl The taste does seem rich, and it also reflects the chef's high-end innovation, but is this egg fried rice? ? ? How many people can eat it? ? ?

I feel like the content of Naruto has just started to get popular, so I switched to a new picture in Xiaoao. It feels uncomfortable to watch, and there is a feeling of being stuck. To be honest, if the writing style was not bad in all aspects, I would just give up. There are also those inexplicable memories in Naruto. You are writing a book, not a storyboard. If you want to write memories, you should write them in a more smooth, harmonious and unobtrusive style, instead of just recalling them with a dividing line. The key is that you have many memories.

This is the first time I saw someone saying that the Yondaime Raikage was a reckless man, 🙄🙄🙄. Technological ninjutsu started with him. How could it be possible without vision and courage?

In the author's second setting, Pepper Kagura's inner eye has the ability to observe random fragments of the future, in order to make up for the Naruto Nine-Tails Rebellion and die calmly. The secondary goal seems to be to reasonably dismantle the CP of the 4th generation couple But this ability is too buggy. The scene observed by Xiaojiao Zhenggu, who is still in elementary school, felt that there was no problem at first. But it was only in the later chapters that he discovered that the picture he observed had serious problems. 1. At that time, the protagonist of the Harry Potter world was watching videos and communicating with another self in the Goldfinger space. This ability could directly predict and hear the dialogue where some keywords were mosaic. 2. The premise of this picture is that ① the protagonist unlocks the golden finger, ② awakens the wooden escape and establishes a bond with Uzumaki Kushina three years later, and a series of small details related to the golden finger. ③The most buggy part is that the protagonist of the Harry Potter world modified Voldemort's black magic notebook and gave it to the Naruto protagonist who has poor learning ability. The Naruto protagonist devoured virtual knowledge through the wood escape bloodline and developed corresponding skills. Based on the chakra on the tray, he overheard the conversation between the third Hokage and Namikaze Minato in the Hokage Tower. The scene where the protagonist of the Naruto world stands in front of his parents' tombstones and communicates with Harry Potter's self will appear. To sum up, this ability has shown three obvious bugs. ①The established future of the time traveler and Goldfinger in this world. ② Before the Goldfinger space was opened, we had already observed in advance the performance of Goldfinger in this world and the exchanges between the two protagonists of the Harry Potter world in the Goldfinger space. ③The Harry Potter world that should not interact has been observed before Goldfinger was turned on. And he observed in advance what the protagonist of Harry Potter had not done three years ago - modifying Voldemort's notebook one by one. And presented the results.

Go ahead, Chapter 80 is a big deal. A chance to make a wish at the super-shadow level is used to change the breath of the soul. I bet Uchiha Madara won't kill him. I'm laughing.

The author doesn't watch the anime carefully. Villagers in the Naruto world are often attacked, robbed, and even massacred by bandits, bandits, ronin, and rebel ninjas. Otherwise, do you think there are so many low-level missions, who should the genin turn to for the bloody missions?

Classics last forever

Ignoring other flaws, the author's plot is too fragmented. It contains flashbacks and interludes. It takes up a lot of space. It's very tiring to read the fragments. The author loves to show off his writing ability and completely ignores the reading experience of the readers.

It is indeed a novel with 1.72 Million words and only 32 monthly tickets.

Wen Qing, who was not ill and mourned himself, died of poison after reading Chapter 29

This is the first time I have read a novel with this kind of reminiscence, and you can obviously just follow the direct writing, but you have to write the back part first, then reminisce, and then write the front part. I can't stand it anymore.

The author doesn't think it's great to write this kind of nonsense, right? Do you think the various literary techniques used in this writing are awesome? But in fact, if you don't use it well, giving you a full score of 60 would be enough if you give it 30.

I deserve to be thrown into the street, the literary youth smell is too strong, I can't stand it, bye bye.

Serious literary youth. Literary youth is smaller than Xiaobaiwen. If Xiaobaiwen is as few as white water, Literary Youth is shit.

I won't say anything else. The Marvel volume is very bad. Not to mention, the author simply eliminated the heavenly divine system, right? You're not talking about the Eight Immortals or anything, right? Sun Wukong, Shang-Chi, Ten Thousand Heroes, and the latest Cyclone. If you write about any of these, I won't say they are terrible. If you just write about a modern society with a different name, then what do you mean by writing about Da Gan? If you don't know how to write about China, you don't have to write about it. Can't you start directly from the United States? ? .

The main character in this book is not completely shared but has a different personality in each story, which is equivalent to reshaping a character for each story. Then he switched worlds randomly, and the story was a bit disconnected.

The nearly two hundred chapters of Naruto feel too long, which is okay if you are a Naruto fan, but you are a 99-level fan. And you also like to mix politics. Naruto is not just a little bit mixed with politics, but almost all of it, which is very boring. After the small amount of freshness wears off, the content becomes tasteless and tasteless, and it is a pity to discard it.

The writing is messy. I can't bear the small memories in the first part, but the memories in the following chapters. You are so impressed by the true story of the Naruto animation team that I can't bear it.

If you want to write high-end articles, just write for physical magazines. There is no need to write online articles to harm people.

It's annoying to keep reminiscing about the plot before it was released, especially when listening to the book. As a result, many people couldn't stand it even after reading a few chapters. And how do you make every copy so boring? There is always a feeling that the protagonist's strength is neither up to nor down. There is also the pirate's wishing fruit ability. It feels like the protagonist of each world has made a big wish. Except for Naruto, the other protagonists in the world are not very strong, but the plot is going to the high end. Moreover, the protagonist's strength has not been improved since then, resulting in no sense of satisfaction

I thought it was just uncomfortable for me to watch, so I felt relieved when everyone was scolding me. There was a lot of nonsense mixed with a small amount of plot advancement, and there were some personal opinions inexplicably. How about the post bar brother Yi Nainai, looking at the catalog and guessing the plot, and the author posted the outline for the brothers to have fun 🙂

What are you writing about? I'm here to read Shuangwen. You gave me a plate of sticky rice to play with. You can't earn my money from upgrading by writing like this.

I got a headache after reading a few chapters. Why are they all memories and personal items? Did I come in here to see this? Zihe, please write clearly, why do you want to put poison?

For the sake of literary youth, the writing is very messy, and it is very painful and difficult to read.

What the hell are you writing? Naruto is pretentious, right? After more than 30 chapters, several of the pictures started not to mention the protagonist at all. I felt like I was stifling my defense 🙄

What the hell are you writing? Goldfinger has such a rubbish setting.

Some parts feel that the preface does not match the postscript, and it looks awkward.

I haven't read it yet, but when I saw the table of contents, there were only a few chapters in each chapter, I immediately lost interest.