I Was Simulated by Beautiful Girls

1. The beginning is obviously good, but the classmate writes as if he has no IQ background. 2. The key point of our favorite tsundere is that she is coquettish, speaks rudely, and only pricks other people's little hedgehogs. How can people like the tsundere if she only relies on the protagonist to do her best to please? 3. Solve problems by self-destruction, and your classmates just believe it without even thinking about it? And then rumors started flying? We have been classmates for so long, don't you still know who you are? What's more, it's not easy for classmates to show off face-to-face with each other. They just look down on each other. Why would you still laugh at someone who doesn't come to school? Rather than saying they are classmates, they are more like a ragtag group of netizens, right? 4. It is obvious that as long as the rumors are dealt with well, they will be self-destructed. Why do we have to use self-destruction to solve the problem? Are you also a great teacher? What's more, the heroine made rude remarks first, so there's something wrong with making people like her, right? 5. The protagonist's self-destruction is written like a hero's sacrifice, and the teacher is asked not to tell others and just communicate well. If you have to use it as a way to feel better... Are there any books with the same theme? This book... Forget it, the author, I'm sorry, I didn't mean to say anything to you, I was just too angry after reading it.

As mentioned above, the male protagonist is just a disgusting person, but the female protagonist is simply a licker. She owes him nothing, just like a little fairy, 😅

When rumors appeared, the descriptions there were not very good. They were too exaggerated and dramatic and not true enough. Especially in the back when the whole class was quiet and someone covered their nose, it was very film and television style. But the first few chapters are all about daily life, but here it seems very abrupt and a bit awkward, including the male protagonist's solution later, which always feels like a romance novel from the last decade. I feel that there is no need to write an exaggerated conflict. It is better to write this conflict in a more everyday way. For example: in the next few days, the heroine gradually felt that something was wrong with the attitude of her classmates towards her; Then the heroine's mentality started to go wrong; she was so cold and cold that she felt like she was falling into an ice cave on a hot day; she was so stunned that she couldn't melt in even though she tried so hard and she looked like a clown; she just felt noisy when she saw her classmates laughing and joking during class time; she was given such an arrangement, and finally her mentality exploded and she broke up with the male protagonist.

😐After reading 20%, I would like to point out some problems that I think. Is the heroine's character born a little unexpectedly? If I want to write about a heroine who suffers psychological trauma due to physical trauma, I think we can't just write about her physical trauma, but we should write about how the physical trauma tortures her soul, thus distorting her character (my opinion). No reader will like an arrogant and unreasonable young lady, but they are willing to pity a "tsundere" patient. Is the plot arrangement a bit strange and tight? The heroine returned to school without her textbooks and didn't know the structure of the toilet; but in the end, the hero actually knew the structure of the faculty toilet. It's really full of contradictions. I think this can definitely not be explained by "Uncle and Auntie have prepared it for you"; and there is no transition at all between the toilet and the violence... There is also the heroine's reaction to the hero after the rumors came out, which is really difficult to describe. Others are so accommodating to you, but you actually arbitrarily believe that it is the person who accommodating you who spreads the rumors... 🙂 I think a good writer should also be a good reader, and some flaws should be discovered when writing. Best wishes.

The women in the author's book are all as good as Sunba.

The male protagonist is a licking dog, his classmates are stupid dogs, and the female protagonist is a crazy dog.

To be honest, the subject matter of Brothers is really good, but the effect of the author's writing is really frustrating. The first heroine is such a disgusting heroine, and the protagonist is so humble. Or to put it another way, it's called a puppet. Chun Chun is just a puppet who has no ego to set up the plot. It made me very depressed in the middle of the night. I couldn't stand it anyway. When I read this introduction, I thought it was a cool article.

One hundred thousand words describe the online life of a heroine, and the real life is not described for a day. The progress is extremely slow, and even the progress of the heroine's wish is far away. The progress is delayed, and the heroine is not likeable, arrogant and arrogant, and it is not reflected at all. 2. Everyone can understand the bad character caused by the psychological gap between a healthy person and a disabled person, but this kind of badness is not the same kind of badness as the popular villain. 3. The online version, you can't tell it's an online version at all. What is the online version? There are multiple heroines working together to conquer the NPC character Xia Yan, but there is only one Lin in it, and he is not lovable. The current simulator seems to be that the simulation of female A and the simulation of female B are not online, but are parallel worlds. They do not affect the NPC Xia Yan in the real world at all. You play your simulator and I play mine, and it is not obvious that they are simulated together. If you simulate yours and I simulate mine, then this cannot be called an online version at all. 4. As the first character to come out, it is good to have some characteristics to remember. Even your level of badness can be regarded as a bad characteristic, which makes people want to run away at first sight. If you want to design the characteristics of the first character so clearly, you will inevitably have to accept the situation where you are disgusted and run away while reading. This situation usually occurs in the later stage, which is called purification. You can obviously write a beginning that is broken but gentle. The protagonist can also be taught slowly and patiently, instead of harassing the male protagonist on QQ in the middle of the night after 100,000 words. She feels unhappy, and so do we. Indeed, watching the male protagonist on QQ at night can also show a little bit of liking. In short, there are so many things that Luo Liba Suo has to talk about, and I really can't stand it anymore. As the reader above said, the subject matter is very good, very good, and the writing is not bad, but the heroine is too disgusting, and the dog licking issue is discussed in the comment area. I haven't seen a licked reward for so long. How does this reward help in reality, such as stage victory, helping to guide the ranking, and then a reward for cooking. Then when the virtual simulator time is up, go to reality and then go to Lin's house to give it to her. I just happened to use something to cook and eat. The rewards in the simulator lasted for a while, or even 100,000 words. I didn't use it in reality, and I didn't see any cool points. The whole story was really cool. A. There were rumors, and there was a lot of foreshadowing beforehand. B. What Wang Junjie, can I give you that stuff to make it feel better? C. Getting first place in the exam and having sex with each other in class, can this thing make you feel better? I really can't stand it anymore, and I won't change it. Most male simulators have to have restrictions, such as simulation time and so on. You, a female simulator, can only simulate 100,000 words? Ah?

First of all, the heroine is not lovable. She is in a bad mental state due to her disabled legs. She shows indifference, treats others roughly (the root cause of the rumor) and is self-righteous (inexplicably thinking that the hero likes her). She is not afraid of the consequences because it is a simulation, but the reader's feelings will not be better because it is not reality. When I was young, the students were dismissive of the teacher's refutation of rumors Then, because the male protagonist completed the system tasks and selflessly helped the female protagonist, there was no logical problem, but the reader felt that the male protagonist was like a licking dog Finally, there were too many simulation parts and too little reality. The fun part of this book should be more distributed in reality, but there was almost no fun in the early stage, but there were many problems. This may be paving the way for the fun later, but even though I was already enduring it, I still couldn't bear it, and I died of poison.

Readers only need to be upset and scold, but it is different for an author who is moved by himself. He has to think about writing like this every day in order to torment the readers and move himself at the same time.

I feel that Xiao Su is so miserable. The male protagonist keeps accommodating Lin. To put it bluntly, it is just for the sake of systematic tasks. With the kind of character the male protagonist shows now, if there is no systematic task, he would have left Lin alone. Lin's character is really unpleasant. It is normal for many book friends to criticize him. However, this is a simulation. I still look forward to seeing Lin's performance in reality. The writing is still very good.

She is very serious about replying to everyone's comments! ! ! Someone posted a long comment, and she said: "I'm sorry😭😭😭" Someone said that the update was slow, and she said, "It's already burned out😿" Someone gave a positive review, and she said, "Thank you😘😘😘"

"I was simulated by beautiful girls" Brother, you have written 100,000 words, and you only simulated a girl. You don't even mention the real world. Now it's all about simulators. Your progress is somewhat delayed. In this case, you either speed up the story as a whole, or you update 10,000 words or something a day to keep readers entertained. Otherwise, you won't have the quality, and you won't be able to keep up with the quantity.

None of these classmates look human, the protagonist is also a pure licker, and the heroine also has something wrong with her

The hostess is disabled and not mentally healthy. She just doesn't show favor to others, as if they owe her money. The male protagonist is just a doormat, so he pushes up hard, feeling like he wants to write about a cool guy and also want to bring some licking.

In fact, the subject matter is very good, and it is very eye-catching. The most important thing in writing a novel is this idea. The plot processing and character creation can be learned slowly. Come on, the future is promising, just practice more and write more.

Is Xiao Su also a simulator player?🙂

Most of the problems are either big problems or too few and the progress is too slow.

The subject matter is good, but the heroine is too sexy, and the classmates are brainless, so I can't understand it at all.

There is no punishment for the heroine choosing the wrong option. What's the point of options?

Not bad. I can accept the female protagonist issue mentioned in the comment section. The subject matter is very good, don't waste it. Author

​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​ ​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​According to the normal rhythm of the story, there should be a sweet plot after the male protagonist helps the female protagonist to go to the toilet, which makes the relationship between the male and female protagonists a bit expected for readers. Now this rumor jumps directly to the plot twist and begins to abuse, and readers have no expectations for the male and female protagonists to be together. As for the problem with the heroine mentioned in the comment section, I feel that the character is too straight. A normally lovable heroine should be both arrogant and coquettish. The coquettish one must outweigh the arrogant one. She seems to dislike the male protagonist on the surface but expects the male protagonist to care about her and secretly help him. This duality makes the female protagonist in the book feel proud. Another thing I want to complain about is this simulator. You can go on with any plot you choose, and then the male protagonist is the tool to help you correct your mistakes and make the plot go according to your ideas. When it is written like this, it feels like the heroine is just a vase, and there is almost no difference between the simulator and the reality. The reader is directly allowed to put the heroine of the simulator onto the real heroine. This simulation seems very useless, and you will not make mistakes anyway.

I think this kind of subject matter needs to be written in this way to be interesting. It just needs to be licked to be twisted. And lick it hard. Lick to the sky🙂 What I want to see after the simulation is over. Chapter 60 of the plot feels like it is still far from the end of the simulation, and it still needs a pedicure. You don't want a book to simulate one.

Ah, did the author cut it? It's a pity. However, this kind of subject matter is indeed quite controversial. Unless the writing is very good, very few people will read it. But is the heroine a good woman according to the author's expectation? In fact, according to the description at the beginning, it might be more interesting to write the heroine as a bad woman. What the author wants to write about is tsundere. If you are such a good woman, there will be big problems in the early stage. If you don't show the advantages of the heroine, you will shake off a lot of shortcomings, and the heroine will be too low in the daily plot and character. Tsundere was probably popular in the years before and after the author was born. For example, in Shakugan's Shana, the heroine appears in the form of a god descending to earth, so she is qualified to be a tsundere, and her advantages can completely transform the tsundere's shortcomings into characteristics. In the Elden Ring released in the past two years, Lani, as a god, uses a doll's tsundere to let players help her, which is also a transformation of her advantages. In the love game written by Crow, Aono is also a very proud and impressive character. So Tsundere has always had her shortcomings, and her cuteness is derived from her excellent point contrast.

What can I say? The writing is okay and the outline is good. The main reason is that the plot is a bit slow, so there are not many people.

I like the writing very much and hope to continue writing.