The Night Journey of One Hundred Demons Begins with the Snow Girl

I read the chapter and probably saw some problems. The author's writing style is okay. First of all, this deserves recognition. The world view and background settings are pretty good, and the emotions of the characters are pretty smooth. But the problem is obvious. It is a bit literary. The protagonist obviously gives people a Japanese-style Asasi feel. This is very unpopular among Chinese online novels. In the current impetuous Internet society, this type of protagonist is very unlikable. It is understandable that the protagonist is honest and well-behaved in front of the boss, but with a female character who has not yet established a good first impression on the readers, the protagonist can be manipulated casually, which highlights the Japanese character of the protagonist. Readers will think this way, I am already tired enough when working and studying, I already often have to look at other people's faces, I already often have to take care of others, why am I forced to take care of other people's emotions while reading a novel? It would be fine if I had a crush on this person, but the problem is not yet? Not only the three golden chapters, but even more than ten chapters failed to establish the protagonist's initial character. The problem is huge, and there is even a serious stream of consciousness component. This style of writing can basically be understood as that the author only writes it for himself, because he knows what the plot behind it is, so he will feel that the plot he wrote is reasonable. The reader's sense is that they have just come out from under the boss and are being manipulated by a female character who is not very lovable in the readers' eyes, or even a female character set by ordinary people in the current setting. I know the driving reason is that with all the scholarship, the so-called protagonist takes care of the emotions of this female character. But judging from the previous photos, have you set up the relationship between this female character and the protagonist to be very good? If the relationship is just a classmate, not a good acquaintance, and the relationship is average, why should we take care of this woman's emotions? Since the reason you set for the promotion is still far-fetched, it has a clear feeling of Japanese manga style and literary youth, and the flavor is too strong Final comprehensive evaluation, this is a novel written for myself with a heavy emphasis on self-entertainment. A young and budding author who has not yet mastered the coolness of writing online articles in China and has not been polished by society. Advice to the author, why do you come here to write a novel? If you want to earn income, then read more about how the novels on the popular list are written? Do you want to know what is cool? What does it mean to master the rhythm of cool points? If you're here to write a novel just to show others your work, then whatever you want, have fun

I think the biggest problem with this book is that the protagonist gives people a sense of detachment, like a puppet on a string, with no vitality and no will and desire. This kind of cold style can attract some readers if the writing is good enough, but you, the author, are obviously not qualified.

This book gave me mixed feelings. It's like a plate of delicious food that looks good, but after taking a bite, your stomach tells you "You ate but it seems like you didn't." On the whole, there are no major problems in terms of characterization, plot setting, writing style, etc. But there is one thing. This book does not meet the needs of the vast majority of current online readers, and its style is different. Of course, I am not denying anything. I can only say that the audience of this book may be different from the current mainstream online articles. Perhaps it is a good choice to be refreshing at the moment.

I've read too many Japanese light novels and the author came here? Why is it that recently there are a lot of authors who came from other websites? The articles they write are really young and aggrieved. I feel that the novels I write are not for readers, but are the products of my own narcissism.

The writing is okay, but the protagonist is a piece of trash. He is backed by a big boss and acts like a beggar. Isn't this the protagonist who is just a monkey watching a show? The girl at the school also had a spell background astral body sewn on, right? Tianyuan, right? The three pendants on her body are all decorations. Her personality is also the kind of soft-hearted and cuckold Japanese protagonist. If you don't tell me, she doesn't look like a time traveler.

What the hell is this written? There is no logic between every sentence. It is written inexplicably, just like what is written by artificial intelligence.

First of all, I would like to apologize to the book friend whose comment disappeared inexplicably. After I replied, the entire comment disappeared. The first reply just disappeared, and there was a misunderstanding. To be honest, I was very uncomfortable, so it is conceivable that the book friend must also be very uncomfortable. I am really, really sorry! (Details are in the comment area downstairs) Then I would like to express my gratitude to the previous book friends. Maybe because I have been single-player for too long, some comments made me a little panicked, so I did not reply in time, but I read them carefully and tried to make some changes in the subsequent plots. In short, thank you all, whether it is suggestions or criticisms, I will accept them with an open mind (Thanks again~~~)

Why was my comment deleted if it did not involve any violation? Chapter 41 is just like the plot of Pinocchion. What's the use of covering the audience's mouth.