Cultivating Immortality Through Card Crafting

While a progression to the fourth level of Qi Refining in thirty chapters seems reasonable, the fact that you've spent those thirty chapters synthesizing all sorts of cards is strange; it feels like a kid using an AK. Also, are you trying to write a card-based story or a cultivation novel with a card-based cheat system?

One moment the protagonist's family is driven to the brink of despair, the next moment it's said that having connections within the sect makes no difference. One minute they say the protagonist is an inner sect seed and needs protection, the next they have the protagonist constantly risking their life to cross borders and fight enemies one-on-one.

This is an interesting book. The data and logic behind the "golden finger" (a powerful, intangible feature) are quite good. Speaking of which, I have to complain about some books that have a great "golden finger" concept but lack logical consistency, resulting in a terrible reading experience.

The author's writing is too disorganized; it'll probably need to be edited out soon.

The protagonist hasn't grasped the essence of cultivation. The goal of cultivation is immortality, so everything should revolve around this objective. Spells are a means of protection, so they should be learned. However, the effects of spells are essentially limited to four attributes: attack, defense, speed, and endurance.

There was no conflict, so they created one, and it was so far-fetched.

There are six levels in Foundation Establishment? You're really something! No, you mean you have to climb up each level one by one? Is there a hierarchy of Foundation Establishment levels: early, mid, late, and final?

The initial pressure on the main character is a bit too harsh, which can easily discourage players.

It feels like something's seriously wrong; one moment it's pleasurable, the next it's agonizing, it's all so disjointed.

The main character has been kept under wraps for too long; I'm losing patience to continue watching.