The Secret Library of the Eternals

After reading Chapter 68 so far, I am actually quite satisfied. The introduction has clearly stated that most of the people met in the library will not have the chance to meet the protagonist after he comes out, because it is a thousand years ago, and in this world, even the life span of elves is only two to three hundred years. They all knew about this, so they tried their best to leave something for the protagonist, even an entire organization. So you don't have to worry about the protagonist's own enjoyment at all. So this is not the kind of classic Dragon King plot where the protagonist is the boss, and it comes out to let the new people discover that the bosses all over the world are their younger brothers, but it is a way to do something from the perspective of their friends back then, maybe? The only problem is that the main plot is not clear at all at the moment. What the protagonist is here to do may not be known until the current incident is over. But overall if you ask me if it looks good, I still think it looks good. It seems that the author is a newbie in novels and I hope he can maintain this level.

Since the book is called the secret library of the immortals. Then shouldn't the protagonist stay in the secret library? In a mysterious and noble way. From my perspective, the protagonist's status at the beginning was relatively high, but after leaving the library, his status became low. It was a very sudden change. I also felt that this book might not last long.

The writing is actually okay. But newcomers write group portraits, suspense, and stream of consciousness. They write one by one. 😥 I often write suspense from the perspective of supporting characters who cannot appear in the main character for several consecutive chapters. I prefer to be the protagonist. In fact, the protagonist is Goldfinger and the description is okay, but the description of the heroine is okay. But the perspective of the supporting characters is relatively poor. The only thing I felt when I read the elf supporting characters and the few chapters from the Archon's perspective was that the author whetted my appetite and created a suspenseful atmosphere. It is unintentional to say more. I estimate that the author will soon be a eunuch because of his poor grades.

Did you work as a librarian for so many years before reincarnation just to get involved with people who borrow books? Why does it feel different from what the introduction says?

The writing is good, the concept is good, but the structure of the novel is a mess. Write two chapters from one perspective in the east and two chapters from one perspective in the west. Last year, Squid was criticized for using this method to write about fate, let alone a new author.

It is recommended to review the literary reception theory in literary theory. A simple, crisp and bright style may not necessarily be outstanding, but it must be universal. The narrative style of this novel cannot be said to be bad, but in terms of reading experience, the most important thing to pay attention to in all works is: the information carrying capacity of the human brain is limited, and excessive redundant information greatly increases the difficulty of readers' digestion and reduces their interest in reading. For entertainment works, it is obvious that there is no need for "hardness" and "astringent taste" to derive the charm of the work. Instead, it is necessary to increase the unit information density as much as possible, that is, the amount of turning and conflicting plots, stories, and events. "Five steps, one turn, ten steps, one pavilion." Learn the bones of Western fantasy writing instead of the smelly and long-lasting appearance after translation. Reading habits vary from country to country. Even if you are eager to express certain concepts of "classic literature" through popular works, you should also take a look at how "Shanghai-style novels" chose between elegance and vulgarity in the last century. Whether it is the Beijing school, the Shanghai school, or even the Mandarin Duck and Butterfly school, there are rarely large sections of meaningless detailed descriptions, repeated inefficient character creation, or delayed plot development. Modern and contemporary Chinese literature is still based on the existing ancient Chinese language and developed by inheriting the concise characteristics of ancient Chinese. Regardless of storybooks, dramas, and romance novels, their core essence is actually the same as that of contemporary online novels, that is, telling a story well, arousing the audience's emotions, and nothing else. In your works, I see that you want a lot of things, too much, and too much is complicated. The city, library, gray mist, energy cannon, assassin, magician, and queen are painstakingly created with pen and ink. Through their interactions and entanglements, you want to pull the readers' hearts like a spider web and make them worried. Use the details throughout the story to establish real characters, create a living fictional world, and a crazy story that will keep everyone awake at night. Is it right? Every author dreams like this. But what's the problem? Nowadays, there are so many novels on the Internet, not to mention piles of classic literary works lying on the pile of old papers. This raises a question - why do readers read your novels instead of others? Why do you have to endure your frivolous and detailed descriptions like a nagging mother and wait for the plot to develop little by little? Don't be kidding, there is no shortage of two or three talented guys in this world. What you really need to answer, and answer with your pen, is: Why choose me instead of others? What interesting and unique things can my novels provide to discerning readers that can be enjoyed conveniently and quickly? This is what I want to say. Instead of asking a group of well-fed brown bears to crack open their nuts, stimulate their insatiable taste buds with novel delicacies.

To be honest, I, a bookworm of more than ten years, can't stand it anymore. It's not that the writing is bad, it's not that the plot is bad. How should I put it?

Very interesting writing, interesting ideas

I've seen Chapter 19, it's all about the Riddler, gone

First of all, let's talk about the conclusion. This book is not good to read, so you need to be careful. Everyone is a Riddler, and there is a heavy element of suspense. Although there is an element of extraordinary power, the main part is suspense. As you write, it becomes a group portrait. The introduction says how awesome the protagonist is, but the result is basically irrelevant to the main text. The title of the book has basically nothing to do with the actual content. Because it is too Riddler, there is too little information, and there is nothing else to comment on, this brief review ends here (this is the one I have reviewed the least)

The current progress is the latest chapter, chapter sixty-six. The writing style is very good and the details are strong. It is worth reading. The problem is that before the protagonist's image is clearly described enough, a lot of supporting character details that have little to do with the protagonist are written. The protagonist's positioning is vague and the supporting characters are expanded too much, which makes the plot perspective and reading experience irritating. The feeling of plot progress (only refers to the perception, the actual plot is multiple lines of progress) is like the protagonist who has just been led out of the novice village with unclear tutorials but has directly fought the main boss without even starting the transition period. The time spent on opening various branch lines to watch the unchangeable Riddler plot CG is much longer than the time for the protagonist to improve his own abilities and explore, so the process is particularly boring and irritating. It's not that the other supporting characters weren't well portrayed, it's just that there were too many, too complex, and too Riddler-esque. In most cases, the first anchor point for readers' impressions of characters is the protagonist. It can be said that if the protagonist is well written and brilliantly written, it will even allow readers to tolerate many other flaws. On the contrary, many well-designed works have already fallen into obsolescence when they fail to portray the protagonist well. Therefore, if you want readers to leave a strong impression on the work, it is very important to create a protagonist with a clear image. Even behind-the-scenes scenes, where it is normal for the protagonist to disappear for more than ten chapters, must use various side descriptions to give the protagonist a stylish image. So far, I don't have a deep impression on the protagonist who should have the strongest impact. The other characters are secondary to the protagonist and I can't even spare much energy to pay attention to them. The impression is also mediocre, which is very uncomfortable. The plot is obviously very tense, but I feel that the character interaction is boring. Things that cannot be resolved in twenty or thirty consecutive chapters are said to be the main boss. I feel really uncomfortable now that I am stuck at an important node and there is no next chapter. The protagonist is obviously doing things throughout the whole process, but because there are too many descriptions of the supporting roles, I feel that the protagonist is not very involved. Only when the two sides meet can other things be done. After finally meeting the exploration core, I feel that there is more shaping and then the chapter is broken. Wow, what a painful reading experience (this is a personal experience, I usually control the protagonist, and I have difficulty reading stream-of-consciousness riddles). The portrayal of the protagonist does not make people feel like the protagonist, and it is really hard to say about the other supporting characters. Although the title of the book looks like a behind-the-scenes flow or a brain-filling flow (if it were this type, I wouldn't mind if the protagonist appeared less, the genre characteristics are like this), the actual content is more similar to the world exploration type. The introduction is limited to the first chapter, and then the main text is where the protagonist ends directly and things happen one after another.

It was also very strange for Lamia to meet the male protagonist. When I first asked in embarrassment if there was a scribe with 20 Silver Dragon Coins, I thought her identity was that of a down-and-out aristocratic scholar. But after looking at the follow-up, no, you are still one of the few big shots in the city? The mithril auction also stated that Lamia had a certain amount of savings. Once the plot was connected, something was wrong.

Although I'm a little sorry, the author probably wrote it with intention, but I still have to express my own opinion. The details of the characters are not shown enough, and the purpose of the characters is unclear. There is no long-term purpose. At least there must be a thematic purpose of the volume. The double lack results in the appearance of 500-degree myopia without glasses. This kind of work can be included in the first volume of Lord of Mysteries. The content of the opening volume of Squid is really good.

An author once said that reading creative writing is like hunting. The reader pursues the prey all the way, and the author arranges for footprints or hair to appear from time to time to guide and attract the reader The first chapter of this picture told me that there is a big prey, and then I read the sixth chapter and didn't see even a hair. I even doubt that the first chapter has anything to do with the subsequent plot.

It's so messy. It's not that the writing is messy, it just feels like there are a lot of foreshadowings buried. I don't know if I can wait until the time to fill in the holes, and there is a big gap in my mind. When I read the first few pictures, I thought the protagonist was a powerful high-level creature, and then he became an ordinary person in the blink of an eye. In addition, the writing in more than 60 pictures was very out of the ordinary, and it was really unclear when I looked at it.

Thank you all readers for your valuable opinions (•̤̀ᵕ•̤́๑)ᵒᵏᵎᵎᵎᵎ. I have read it very carefully~ This book is the author's first contracted work, and various factors may not be fully considered (╥ω╥`). Moreover, during the writing process, I also felt it very realistically. The difficulty of telling a "big story" is really a test of writing skills (the author has only written some short works of about 10,000 words before) In short, I am very grateful to all readers, and welcome more comments from readers (⑉°з°)-♡ (I also hope that you will be a little more merciful when criticizing(,,•́ . •̀,,), It would be better if you could encourage me by the way~)

Come on, author, your writing is pretty good.

The whole thing looks very messy and Riddler-like, and I don't know if it's intentional...

It's well written I've seen a lot of people say that the perspective is confusing. I read Chapter 78 in one go and it didn't feel confusing. I guess it will be confusing when I follow up. Also, the character of the main character in the main text is not as high as in the introduction, which may make some people who come here for this uncomfortable. However, it seems that the author will later achieve the effect in the introduction by asking big bosses from all walks of life to come to pledge their allegiance. In addition, since the title is Eternal, then the founder of the Order of Blood is probably sleeping like Natalia, but there is a villain in the Order who desires power?