Cornish Demon Tribe War Chronicles

What does the rise and resurgence of the demons look like? Many demons have been working on it for a long time and still haven't figured it out. Maybe the previous Demon King had a better idea and learned from the advanced system of the human race, but later the Demon King failed to guard against the brave man and his body became fossilized.

After a brief taste, the standard is there. I can only say that I don't like the setting. In a fantasy world, it is normal to have an enemy country. It subverts the previous setting. The most important thing is that it is obviously the pseudo-human leader. I still prefer the setting of demons based on blood or strength.

Why do I still use the name from my previous life even though I have a name after time travel? It's really hard to find a Chinese name in a fantasy world

The biggest problem: Unhappiness. Detailed problems are: 1. The main plot is slow and inappropriately detailed. There are many descriptions of things before farming, but the description of farming is rough and sparse. The bulk of the plot is about fighting or branch plots where the protagonist is not present. 2. There was not enough preparation before the war, and the war suddenly came. 3. When fighting, the protagonist of Goblin is not present, and the protagonist of Demon is ob. The entire scene is highlighted, and the protagonist is not written as the protagonist. After two rounds of fighting, it is good. Other characters have shown their faces, which is great. Where is the protagonist? The most important thing is that the protagonist given to the readers is not exciting at all, and it is very dull and depressing to read. You must know that it has been released on the shelves at this time, and the paid chapter begins with this, which is very fatal for online articles. 4. You are still unhappy after the battle. Sharing the spoils after the battle is actually quite classic and easy to write a more enjoyable plot. It is also the oldest cool novel routine of suppressing first and then rising. However, this article is very perfunctory in this regard, as if it is rushing. The first battle, fighting Goblins, may be of some use to the macro situation, but it is a total loss for the protagonist. After this battle, the impression is very empty. What is the point? It's just a battle, and it's gone. In the second game against the demons, I made some progress. At least I had loot after the fight. However, I didn't write much in this part, but I immediately jumped to other scenes to write a branch line where the protagonist is not present and it doesn't matter. (Actually, when farming, inserting a background introduction of "It's the moon, xx is completely destroyed, Blackwood Kingdom xxx, elves xxx" is enough. The more you write here, the more points will be deducted), which gives readers a kind of constipation. It feels like the reader's emotions have reached this point. They are just waiting for the big win after the battle, but the author forces the reader to hold it in. He can't feel the pleasure anymore. He is holding back and writes background deductions that other readers really don't care about and are not interested in. No one wants to read it... After reading a few chapters, the protagonist has not won the big win and opened the champagne. This makes the patient lose patience. After all, it has reached the paid chapter. If it cannot attract readers, no one will read it. 5. I like to throw in the settings hard and don't know how to explain them with stories. This is the second most common thing for novices. 6. I like to write long sentences instead of short sentences. I like to write long sentences using various conjunctions (natural, therefore, originally, then, in short, better than, etc.). This is also a common problem for novice writers. Maybe the school will give high marks to such long and difficult sentences. , But when reading online articles, such long and difficult sentences are deducted points. Internet articles pursue short and fast sentences. The shorter and more straightforward the sentences, the better. Don't play with literary talent. When reading, this kind of sentence is like an old lady's footcloth. The more you see it, the more confused the reader will be. Alas, the subject matter was not bad at first, so I should pay more attention to it in my next book.

Tell the truth. I have read more than a dozen chapters. As a demon, if you want to become the master of the demons, you must be a race based on combat power (based on base combat power). No matter how much you learn from the human lords and reform the demons, you should suppress them with strength and then civilize the demons. It seems that the author is still writing from a human perspective, which is very confusing. Because, the male protagonist is a devil! ! ! ! Maybe there are controls in the back to distinguish the demon race from humans, but the writing in the front is really like walking in demon skin. Rather than starting with a demon who learns from humans (his own territory), it is better to reform the pure demon and take the advantages of human territory layout (the setting of human progress is not as good as the system of the previous era when the male protagonist entered, but it must be combined and changed). The right way is to focus less on humans and more on demons! ! !                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                "

After looking at Chapter 21, the plot didn't advance much, and there were a lot of unnecessary character dialogues (or it could be streamlined. It wasted a lot of paragraphs to tell the settings directly through the supporting characters in colloquial language, which looked very boring). Moreover, now I don't have an overall sense of the world view, and the career settings and so on are also unclear. I couldn't learn the magic in the book. When the protagonist learns magic, he suddenly enters the soul space and then exits, which makes me confused. The author can't write such a sense of detail and immersion. He can directly write what the protagonist senses, and don't jump around like this.

After a brief taste, I have a few doubts: First, this theme - demon lords, I remember writing about this as early as 2017. How to write this kind of theme with new ideas is a test for the author Second, why does the author always use "_" instead of "·" between people's names? Third, the author seems to want to build a harmonious society, but in a surreal world, the productivity that some powerful biological individuals can burst out may be thousands of times that of some weak social individuals. This makes socialism come true, and everyone is really divided into superiors and inferiors. Moreover, in a vibrant monarchical society, it would have been difficult to reconcile the contradictions of one species, and now there are dozens of them. In the end, either the protagonist is actually Cyberxtl and reconciled, or he becomes Shinra in the later stage. Where is the harmony?

The setting is OK, but it looks too laborious and noisy words are everywhere.

You can refer to the history of Indian resistance to Western colonists🙂

I have an idea, but the writing is too poor.

I always thought that in classic stories about gods and monsters, the ones with fixed shapes were just intelligent monster races, which were relatively primitive. The real devil race is one with ever-changing forms, invisible power, and very advanced magic technology.

Wow, it's released, long live ≧▽≦ long live, let's celebrate

Visited with the work "The Elder Scrolls: The Witch's Strategy Guide" and used the treasure to promote it. The author's writing is very good, it has been added to favorites and likes 👍.

I can read several chapters in a row without any plot and it's all nonsense. I can't listen to the book at all.

Maybe you can consider putting the content of the meeting in the relevant section. The theoretical part is too long to write in one go.

Why has the book been taken off the shelves? 😰😰😰

I just read it a little bit, and there's not much to say, but if the author changes the name of the human race, the demon race, or the holy race, the ghost race, there will be less criticism. The human race, the demon race itself has certain regulations, and new things will conflict with the old rules.

After reading the latest chapter, I don't quite understand the addition of the Saint (a little sudden and inexplicable?) And feel a little disconnected (maybe the author has already written the follow-up, so I think it's okay). When I read continuously, I have the feeling that the small waves suddenly turn into stormy waves.