Huo Yuhao: Picked up a Peerless Book of Tang Sect at the Beginning

At first I thought this book was written by a new author, but after reading the comments in book circles, it seems that works from other platforms have been updated simultaneously here. If you are a complete newcomer, I will feel that the flaws are not concealed; but if you are a veteran, I can only say that the author has quite a lot of room for improvement. It is a traditional Long Aotian Queen palace novel, with its own main line and it is quite interesting so far. The relationship between the characters is quite well grasped. But for me, a picky reader, there are several problems: 1. Huo Gua's character setting problem. The setting is obviously that of the original Huo Gua, which spoils the plot, but his personality and behavioral habits are like a time traveler. 2. The character of the protagonist is not very likable. He is neither the kind of pure dragon Aotian who is arrogant and slaps everyone in the face, nor the kind who is deep-minded and far-sighted, like a fool who doesn't know the heights of the world. Take the negotiation between him and the emperor as an example. His attitude towards the emperor was condescending even though he had no one to rely on. 3. The logic of some plots is not very smooth. There are many places in the aftermath of killing Dai Huabin where the logic is not very smooth. 4. There are a lot of typos and wrong line breaks.

1. The typos are getting more and more serious, and they have reached the point where they affect reading, and some passages are unclear. 2. There are many settings for eating, and it is even more edible than the original. 3. Some of the cleaning or blackening are illogical, or do not fit the character's personality. 4. The backlog is serious, almost all of it is XX going to XX encountering XX and XX fighting XX winning XX being injured XX leaving XX, omitting the exciting parts that can be written and retaining most of the text for water filling.

Revenge is very exciting to write, it means revenge is obvious, jumping across the face of the opposite party. Don't imitate the animation and whitewash Dai Hao. The owner of a duke's palace doesn't know what is going on in the palace, and the gatekeepers all know.

Little Huo Niang

The author of this book also contains personal information, insisting that Ma Xiaotao went crazy because of the influence of the Buddha. Come on, the Buddha really didn't bother to influence this guy.

Now Huo Yuhao has also imitated Tang San and knelt down to become his teacher, right? He's still Shrek's teacher. It's so funny.

Seeing Huo Yuhao take Fan Yu as his disciple, he really retreated.

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Huo Yuhao is not like Huo Yuhao, but like a time traveler

Why do you still have to wear a white ring and directly change a skill into a simulation? Do you intend to be looked down upon by others? Do you really want to persuade others to quit? Do you have to learn from Zhang Wei's mistakes? He is a little genius of the Xingluo royal family in this life. What do you think of Xu Jiujiu who sincerely helped him? {"NickName":"Book Friends 20220221192458075","UserId":379928273}

Latecomers, please stop reading. I caught up with the latest chapter and I can still read the previous chapters. But the following dozens of chapters are full of typos, the sentences don't make sense, and the writing is even a bit logically confusing. I don't know if it's caused by too many typos. In short, it's very uncomfortable to read, and Long Xiaoyao has reached level 98. I'm curious, author, have you really read the original work? In short, don't look at it

It is worthy of being a daily guide. Xu Sanshi has changed into four rings, and his soul ring is yellow, purple, purple, and purple. Three rings of unknown meaning suddenly appeared in the freshman competition. There are three three rings for freshmen. Where did you get the three rings of void? It is worthy of being a daily guide.

The writing is so fucking bad and disgusting. When I looked at the back, I felt so sick that I almost vomited. I just made a clone and it felt like I was cheating on myself. The fucking martial soul possessed me and my sex changed. If you insist on the Snow Maiden martial soul, you are really disgusting. There is a reason for your poor grades. . . . . . . . .

Since it is a story about a prince's revenge, you should focus on how to plan revenge, and focus on the wonderful process of planning. How does Ma Xiaotao have anything to do with you? Is it necessary to keep washing? As long as you have watched the original drama, you understand it clearly, right? It is necessary. Does this have anything to do with the revenge you want to write? , You have already written the script, and you still need to explain a certain character. What you want to write is the part where the characters and the story can be planned. Isn't the center of your writing this book very clear? Revenge! For this purpose, Ma Xiaotao is just a paving stone. What do you need to explain? All sacrifices for revenge are worth it, because to avenge a powerful enemy, the first thing is to put yourself to death. You can die yourself. Why are you trying to clean up Ma Xiaotao? To put it simply, Wang Donger can be killed because you, the prince, are not here for revenge and not for love. Have you forgotten the introduction you wrote?

It is worthy of being a daily guide. The novels I read before were all between 70 and 100 chapters on the shelves, but you have more than 50 chapters on the shelves. I only accepted Wang Dong'er and Wang Qiu'er as female protagonists. As a result, the protagonist had affairs with so many people, and the introduction didn't explain it. Just like a goose, when you see a female, you feel like stepping on it.

This book is extremely poisonous. I'm trying to force Ma Xiaotao to run away.

After reading dozens of chapters, the poison is gone In the beginning, you were the one who dragged me so hard in front of Xu Jiawei. If I can't completely control you, what if you killed the White Tiger Duke? The bloodline is there, who knows if you can become the second White Tiger Duke Flirting with Zhu Lu, I admit that the Zhu family is extremely talented. In the original work, Dai Huabin fucked you, but she kept watching beside her, and she didn't feel resentful for it? Then why do you hate Zhou Xuan in the future? And those are all Dai Huabin's personal pendants, so I don't mind them, saying you are really hungry. And it's not a fight over the body, what Xiao Huo hates the most is three wives and four concubines The greasy and disgusting way he behaves when getting along with Wang Dong You have nothing to do but cheat on Gulong, is there something wrong? Harming others but not benefiting oneself Although Xiao Huo is full of hatred, he is gentle and kind in his heart. He is almost written as a crooked-mouthed dragon king. The villain has succeeded and his whole character has collapsed.

The heroines of the author must be Qiu'er and Dong'er

What, let Xiaoxiao and Caitou do cp? Sorry, I can't accept it.

Don't accept any heroines. Most of Huo's heroines are created by Tang San. It's hard for me to say that Huo really likes them.

There are a bunch of typos at the back, and the main character is often changed. Is this an AI novel?

It's purely a primary school student's writing style. I couldn't stand it after reading a few chapters. The most basic language logic is not fluent. I really think that I have a strong talent. Without Tianmeng Ice Emperor Electrolux, it is difficult to reach the third level. Even if you have an innate first-level soul power, even a god-level martial soul is useless. Even if you spend resources on it, it is still useless if you can pull up the innate soul power of the third or fourth level. What qualifications do you have to talk to others? When you are not sure about death, you might as well find a way to go to the Sun and Moon Empire. The spiritual eye martial spirit will definitely be more valued there than in the Douluo Three Kingdoms.

I don't understand how hard it is for Huo to defeat a sect disciple affiliated with the main body at level 50. Even if he only uses one martial soul, it's outrageous to spend half of his soul power to win. Your second soul skill looks very powerful, but in fact it's useless. You can't use it if you're a low level, and you can't use it if you're a high level. It's hard to fight like this, so what kind of god are you?

Just take revenge, just take revenge. The original SM was really fucked. If you don't take revenge, you are no longer a man. My mother died because of this.

There are a lot of typos, and it can be clearly seen that the author is perfunctory. I guess the rest are basically written by AI.

Do all the novels you open have multiple female protagonists?

At least the sentences make sense. You...

It was pretty good before entering Shrek. I set it up for Huo Yuhao, a fan like you, but after entering Shrek, it became a bit ordinary.

There are a lot of typos, and many things are not consistent with the original work. AI should be used later.