Mind Energy Awakens: Joining a Chat Group from the Start

Advantages: It is like the if line of the original seeker, but also has elements of a journey to dimensionality, including science fiction and two-dimensional infinity. Non-toxic, the male protagonist is more cautious and prominent, not overshadowed by the theme of the chat group, and does not fall into clichés. The ability is fun and immediate, which is quite unique. The previous rhythms are somewhat similar to the original Seeker, and the original work is used as a reference, so the plot rhythm is okay. Disadvantages: The progress of ability strength and weakness is a bit messy because the chat group feels a little out of control and becomes complicated. This is a dangerous symbol. It will not be easy to write later. It still needs to be integrated. In addition: A slightly harsh point: the author's side-on plot descriptions are there and there are conflicts, but it is not very inspiring in itself. It may be related to the writing style habits, but in short, it only has the excitement brought by the interesting ability and lacks side reflections, which is still a bit less interesting for online novels. That's it, overall it's quite interesting, above.

To be honest, author, having one more group leader is superfluous. The main reason is that this group leader has no role at all. Firstly, the protagonist of the plot knows about the group members. Secondly, the technology in the interstellar era is advanced enough and can be replaced by recruiting group members from the high-tech world. Such a group leader is very important to the protagonist. It is of no use at all. On the contrary, it has the effect of suppressing the protagonist and makes people uncomfortable. The group leader alone has to make the protagonist lower his head and coax him in a good voice. To put it simply, the role of this group leader is dispensable, but her existence makes the protagonist brought in by the readers feel inferior. ps: The most important thing is that your group leader is original, but what you write is a fan novel. It is normal for people not to buy it. If you change the plot character to be the group leader, even if you don't buy it, you won't be disgusted. For example, if you let Aqua be the group leader, the protagonist will coax the reader a little and think that Aqua is really easy to handle. But if you change it to an original one, then the readers will think that your protagonist is so annoying.

There are too many pretentious research contents by the protagonist, and the chat group has almost no sense of existence. It is almost all a routine. The protagonist travels to the past to erode control, and then nothing else. . . This is an obscene novel. . .

The protagonist wondered what was going on, but after trying it out, it turned out to be exactly what happened. This is the protagonist's golden finger, right?

The protagonists are somewhat similar, cautious and suspicious in character, and powerful in telekinesis. It integrates mental suggestion, control, and auxiliary energy absorption. It has a large range and long-lasting influence. It can influence across borders. It is very awesome. The cleaning force has strong abilities. With the help of other worlds, it has already entered the first gradient (it should be) just a few days after awakening.

What do you call martial arts? You are obviously practicing Qi skills

Look at the comments section to see what kind of private organization has been established, don't be ridiculous. You don't have money for research institutions, can you? And for research institutions, you need force. Do you have a certificate? Don't you know the four major elements of cultivating immortality? Resources, intelligence and labor are indispensable. Can you beat the official? Where did it explode? You can see a satellite movement at a glance. You still have to inquire slowly. How long do you want to inquire?

Can you stop doing so much nonsense like Immortal Emperors and Reborns? There are so many chat groups and there are so many worlds that aren't enough for you? It would be good if the main world serves as a development base.

Before writing a lot of specious theories, can you sort out the logic of your words first...

Generally speaking, although the writing is not bad, it is not the type of research on the Ascension genre that I thought. The protagonist is also in the style of a fantasy protagonist. Although the author's writing is good, I feel that the combination of the style and style does not match.