Oops, the Demon Lord Was Raised Crookedly by Me.

After a cursory glance, I saw that everyone probably despised him, and he was just showing off.

It looks good so far, I can't wait to see the male protagonist being beaten to his knees by the Demon Lord and arrested for star wrath

Now that the book has been resurrected, all the settings that troubled the author before are still there, so let's give some suggestions to help the author. But suggestions are just suggestions after all, don't apply them mechanically.

I feel like a lot of the conflicts are inexplicable. Perhaps the author wanted to write an out-of-the-box male protagonist, a utilitarian and malicious sect. But when I read it personally, I always feel an inexplicable sense of alienation. The new disciples of the sect are the future of the sect. Judging from my experience at work, the company is relatively tolerant of newcomers. Even if they lack ability and need to be dismissed, it is easy to get together and disperse easily. The so-called gentleman breaks off friendship and never speaks evil words. Sect selection should have clear criteria. For example, after three years of practice, you should reach a certain standard, and those who fail to pass will go down the mountain. If a disciple finds that there is a problem with the practice method, the master will answer the questions normally. If the problem cannot be solved, he will continue to report it to the sect to get a suitable practice method, instead of simply and rudely scolding him. I don't understand the point of doing such deliberate evil. Can an organization that doesn't care about new blood really develop and grow? During the process of recruiting a disciple, the protagonist clashed with his fellow disciples. The villain acted out of wit and the protagonist pretended to be a slap in the face. Immediately afterwards, the villain's superior showed off how awesome the protagonist was and asked the villain to accept the punishment himself. But under normal circumstances, for something that does not involve interests, why bother to quarrel with an ignorant colleague? Even if you have an opinion, or the other party has violated the rules, there will naturally be corresponding departments to deal with it. You only need to record and record it, then submit it and handle it according to the rules. A long-standing organization cannot have clear rules. Then there is the conflict between the protagonist and the protagonist's master, which is also a show-off scene. During this period, the half-demon's other soul, the killer, kept showing off and slapping him in the face. It is estimated that the next one will be the same, with one or two slap-in-the-face scenes in each picture. I'm really tired and emotionally unstable.

Many of the conflicts written by the author are old clichés, such as "What are you looking at?" "What are you looking at?" "You insult me, I will never keep this son." It is a small conflict within the sect, and it directly escalates to a blood feud, and the male protagonist is secretly killed.

You can change the subsections, but don't make too many large sections or it will be tiring to read.

Chapter 3 and a half, let's not talk about the minor issues. The protagonist who transformed into a god is reborn to build a foundation and fight against a foundation-building opponent. The reason why he pretends not to use the sword is that he can't hold back with the sword. What's the difference between saying hello and Tyson not shaking hands for fear of crushing others?

Is there still more than one heroine in the harem?

I want to see the knife😫😫

I've just read the latest chapter. The latest plot of a businessman's brother and sister fighting among themselves for the position of young master is actually a bit problematic. No matter how you handle it later, it won't be very good. Of course, it would be best if the author can handle it well and come up with new ideas. Let me tell you my opinion. First of all, Shang Jingran had become a young master in her previous life, which shows that she won the sudden attack duel. Secondly, Shang Feng planned this duel carefully, so he would look for opportunities regardless of whether there was a plot involving the protagonist getting into the car. So the protagonist's intrusion into the plot actually has no impact. So, if the protagonist is the camera watching his sister kill his brother, then this scene will be neither suspenseful nor meaningful. If the elder sister cannot defeat the younger brother and asks the protagonist for help, how did she win in the previous life? If the younger brother cannot defeat the younger brother and uses the protagonist to blackmail her, that would be even worse. Of course, I also have an idea: the sister kills the brother, but the veil is knocked down and the appearance is seen by the protagonist, triggering the "mechanism". Shang Jingran thought of the carriage protagonist saying that he was "already married and had children" and wanted to kill the protagonist, and then he was too lazy to make it up. I hope the author will work hard and write a dazzling plot, and make good use of the recommendation.

The writing style is relatively young, but the construction of the overall framework is extremely complete, and the logic of the entire article is very smooth. It is a good book with great potential.

No matter how rubbish the novel is, as long as it is finished, it will be better than The Eunuch

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Inexplicable, Some parts of the writing don't sound like the Immortal Cultivation Sect. The female protagonist's words and deeds towards the male protagonist don't treat the master at all. The male protagonist knows that you are the Demon Lord and doesn't care about you. You, a disciple who has just been promoted from the outer sect to the inner sect, are so casual with the master? In some places, the writing is a little bit subdued. They are all from the same sect and there is no stake. It is just a matter of losing face and can be covered up by time, but the villain has to do everything possible, and even deliberately thinks about how to defeat the male protagonist. The pattern is too petty, or is it just a simple subversion, the halo of the villain? The same goes for the male protagonist. He is clearly set to be reborn as a god. He acts like an adult looking after a child, but he behaves in an extremely flamboyant way. Among the n solutions, he chose the most arrogant and most offensive and insulting method. He also pulled the female protagonist around and danced around, and asked her to be slapped by a disciple of a low-status half-demon outside the door. Do you, the male protagonist, still feel that you are very pretentious and embarrassing for doing this? 😅This is not like the way a mature and stable reborn senior handles things.

I've added a bookshelf and haven't read it yet, but I think it's a eunuch at first glance? Now life is really full of dreams and wonderful dreams.

After talking about dispersing kung fu for the Demon Lord, did the Demon Lord not show up until now (I jumped to see it, not sure)? Save Personally, the author should not open more than two plot lines at any time with this update speed. By the time you write it back, a few months have passed in real time. People who want to watch it have already run away, and people who don't want to watch it have long forgotten.

The description of the protagonist's self-improvement can be completely downplayed. He was a god in his previous life, or he was reborn. There is definitely no shortage of skills. You can pick out the treasures and take them. It is best to complete the improvement within one chapter each time, rather than the endless chatter like now. When talking about the plot, start with the chapter where the protagonist tells you to get the treasure, and then come back in the next chapter to continue the plot of the Demon Lord. People who come to read your book mainly want to see the interaction between the protagonist and the Demon Lord, not ordinary upgrade stories, which are everywhere.

How long will it take to settle?

The writing is too slow and verbose. The new author doesn't know what the readers like to read, so he just writes for his own pleasure.

The most impressive thing about this book is the Dragon Boat Festival