His Way

It's well written, but there aren't many people around. I hope I can finish it.

The writing is very good. But some of the plot is a bit abrupt. For example: the part where the protagonist exorcises demons. I felt it was very sudden because there was a little lack of foreshadowing. Also, the protagonist was a little too reckless and just passed on without investigating. As for the guarantee for "Helen", what can the protagonist who is said to be unflattering guarantee? If something happened, there was nothing he could do. Secondly, I think we should describe the relationship between the protagonist and his sister, because we haven't absorbed the memory. We actually can't bring it in. And the adoption of "Helen", I think it was a failure. Because they only had the same appearance, they brought him back and there was no benefit. I think it makes some people think it's poisonous. Summary: No big problem. It's okay to write. (And when will the princess appear)

I've read more than thirty chapters and I can't help but feel unhappy. The writing is still okay, not white, and there's nothing wrong with the plot. The male protagonist gets in touch with and explores the mysterious world after receiving his mother's inheritance. Personally uncomfortable. Yes 1. The slang used by the characters in the novel has the flavor of domestic dialect. 2. I'm still confused about the male protagonist's ability to exorcise demons. Shui, you don't know how to do it. How can you use other skills besides divine grace? 3. When I went to my sister, I didn't visit her after being sent to the hospital (the hero wanted to live or die before, so since she is my sister, I will protect her), but later I patched it up and said I would go every day. It's better to write the plot of the actual visit to the audience, and the characters are separated. And after repeatedly stating that the hero's sister was a saint and would be in danger, the sister was still taken away in the hospital. The male protagonist did not take his sister home before, nor did he accompany her. After he went to visit her for the first time and decided to accompany her and go home to pack her luggage, her sister was taken away. After that, the male protagonist didn't go looking for her. Instead, he went back to give lessons. He said that he would wait at home and his sister wouldn't come back. So he might as well keep his promise and give lessons to others. . . . . . . . . . . .

Personally, I think Wenrel's true identity is the daughter of the Supreme Queen, Her Royal Highness. The reasons are as follows: 1. Her mother is dead and has the same attitude towards mystery as the High Queen. 2. Her gun is obviously not something ordinary people can use.

Has the author published a new book yet?🙂

The author needs to find a way to be more active.

Alas, the creativity is good and the writing is okay, but the literary youth is too sick and artificial, which makes it a bit tiring to read. It's a pity.