All Heavens: Starting from Shaolin Temple and Practicing Horizontally to Reach Immortality

The writing in Changle Gang was really good, but it immediately collapsed once I got to Xiaoao. I simply don't understand why the protagonist suddenly changed. He goes to such great lengths to help, but it doesn't benefit me at all. It is recommended that the author should not overly express his or her preferences for the original characters, but should give priority to the interests of the protagonist, otherwise the character creation will be very fragmented.

It's such a mess, isn't Baishui from the same era as Zhang Sanfeng? Why did it come from the Northern Song Dynasty?

It's pretty good if you look at the one written by Sword Out of Hengshan. It's not in this or that realm. The fighting scenes are also well written, and there are no inexplicable insights.

Is this Zhutianwen or Zongwu? ? ? The more I look at it, the more I feel something is wrong... By the way, Zongwu Tiepujie

Why do you want to fly a plane? Tianlong is already there, so you have to engage in mixed martial arts and force a Xiaoao to come in. Do you feel that what you wrote earlier is very logical and can be controlled? Baoda Song was already baffled by this, and suddenly he had a world view of mixed martial arts. I couldn't stand it anymore.

This time was during the Northern Song Dynasty, and Wang Chongyang was from the Southern Song Dynasty. In the same way as Doujiu Monk, the Nine Suns Scripture should not have been published yet.

I can't stand the underworld Shaolin Temple anymore.

There were too many side plots and supporting characters, five out of ten were about various supporting characters. I started writing about supporting characters in a single sheet from the Shaolin Temple, and even wrote them on the road. I couldn't bear it anymore. I read 50 pictures. Apart from getting a Zen staff and a dagger, the main character did nothing. The rest were all about various supporting characters. Even Yuan Waijianuyuan could write three or four scenes. I was so excited. . .

What a Shaolin Temple writes to you is like a gangster's den.

The front is okay, but after the Nine Suns Divine Art is completed, poisoning begins. Tianlong is the Song Dynasty, Xiaoao is the Ming Dynasty, and there is the Yuan Dynasty in the middle And why should we protect the Song Dynasty? Destiny is in Mongolia, go to the grasslands to preach and create a cultural invasion, and then accept Temujin as a disciple. There are too many to write. Why should we poison?

The writing is incomprehensible and has no purpose, just hammering here and there.

After reading Chapter 20, I feel like it was written by three people. Is it really three people or did you, the author, mentally split into three?

For studio writing, each person writes a paragraph, without any consistency.

There is no plot related to Tian Long Ba Bu at all. You're selling dog meat on a sheep's head, and the protagonist looks very awesome, has mastered the Nine Suns Magic Skills, and is awesome at all kinds of martial arts skills, but the result is not as good as Zhang Wuji, and your previous master, who is half a cent related to the question, only appeared once and died. I think he is not as good as the sweeping monk, how can he predict the future of Shattered Void? An official organization suddenly appeared. What's the use of joining it? The girl you rescued is also quite vicious. If you want to take that money and leave, at least he should stop you with your mouth first. But she just drew her sword directly. For those who don't know, she thought you two had a grudge. I threw away 30,000 taels of homework in exchange for one to join the Song Dynasty organization. I think that with the protagonist's current strength, he can become a high-level person without the 30,000 taels to join the Song Dynasty organization. Forget it, I won't talk about it. There are too many shortcomings.

Have I read too many cool articles? I felt so uncomfortable while reading this book😣... I didn't feel any better...

Can't people today tell the difference between martial arts and fantasy cultivating immortality?

You are still pretending to be cool when you travel through Tian Long Ba Bu. In the beginning, people beg you to learn martial arts, but you still don't learn it. Is there no other way to show off? Are you afraid of danger in the world of martial arts and never learn martial arts?

After reading the comments, I thought they were pretty good, that's all.

Come on, I feel like I can watch it, some of the ideas are really good.

The writing is really in the martial arts style, but the map switching is a bit weird (Jin Lao's classic is the first one)... It's a pity that the author got lost in the hands of the vixen as soon as he went to Liaozhai... From now on, he only loves erotica without coding? ? ?