Kokushibo’s One Piece Adventure

The most important thing for fans is to respect the original setting as much as possible, because what fans want to see most is the adventures of their favorite characters in the new world. Jiguoyuanyi is a test for the author. This kind of charismatic character is not controlled by the author. If the author forces the character to complete something for his own personal gain, something will happen, such as opening a harem (

In the eyes of passersby, Jiguo Yuanyi's character is the son of God, just like the sun god descending to earth. He is so hot that people can't get close to him. Passersby will only look up to him like a god. But in fact, Jiguo Enichi is a very gentle and kind-hearted person. How gentle can he be? It felt like he was reluctant to destroy even the wild flowers on the roadside. At the same time, God-like destiny is to want an ordinary life, and the strongest ones often want the most ordinary things.

As soon as Tsukuni Enichi ate the fruit, he felt like the sky was falling 🙄. Jikuni Enichi was already a perfect person, and the Devil Fruit would only add a weakness. Readers who read this book would prefer that Tsukuni Enichi have superb swordsmanship instead of this fluttering fruit. Instead of pursuing the ultimate in swordsmanship, he would develop Devil Fruits 🥵

The part where I was knocked unconscious and competed with Peach Rabbit was too poisonous to bear. I estimate that many people have abandoned this paragraph. If the author wrote this paragraph to screen readers, it was very successful This paragraph exposed several problems 1. The character is OOC You can understand this if you understand it a little deeper. There is so much disconnect with the characters in the original work Ji Guoyuanyi was actually over 80 years old at that time, and has experienced great sorrows, great joys, and the horror of life and death. Can you imagine the ambiguous interactions between men and women that an old man who is a generation older than people like Garp and has a more indifferent mood can have with people who are at least one granddaughter older than you? If you want to have an emotional line, the first thing to cross should not be Yuan Yi in old age, but Yuan Yi in youth The original work of Peach Rabbit does not have this kind of character. If you really want to write an emotional drama, you have to have a general understanding of the character's charm before writing, otherwise it will really ruin the perception 2. Cool setting Knock yourself out Most of the plot settings of the handicap match are poisonous rather than exciting. It does not show that the protagonist has a high emotional intelligence and is comfortable in fighting, but it is also a humiliation to the opponent (unless the opponent has some unspeakable secrets that he must win, even if the match is fake, he can accept it) How many people can see the relationship between Yuanyi and Taotu in this game? Disparity, handicap in public is equivalent to public humiliation and letting people talk about her female identity 3. Screening readers does not mean ignoring readers Before this paragraph, many readers have reported problems in book reviews In the acceptance speech, the author positioned himself to satisfy some readers The product is still You need to adapt to the market instead of waiting for the market to adapt to you. If you really want to go further on this road, it is inevitable to filter out useful experience and make changes. You can't really feel that you are already very good now. As long as you cultivate a group of hardcore readers, you can sit back and relax, right? With that said, I wish you the better as you write.

Now there are actually people writing about the navy. After being massacred every three years, the navy is a clown. Calculating the time it takes for the World Government to be established, at least a hundred kingdoms and islands will have to be destroyed in the beginning. Each time, the navy was escorted to blockade the island.

The front was okay, I mean before I met Peach Rabbit. The author whose mind is full of women and Yuanyi who doesn't care, I can only say that if you don't like it, you don't have to write it.

This is the cover drawn by Mr. Crocodile himself

The reason is ridiculous because of his talent, what kind of breathing method, He Dao should not compete with pirates. Not on the same level at all

The navy in the original book was completely ruined. The Celestial Dragons massacred a country in three years, and the navy was involved, like the Valley of the Gods.

If you don't write Peach and Rabbit, or if you don't write it like a disgusting romantic drama from 20 years ago, the rest of the content is pretty good, but I can't accept such an abrupt romance plot. Why do you first write Peach and Rabbit inexplicably, and then write that the protagonist knocks himself out when they compete. Even if you explain that there is no heroine, shouldn't it be written like this without a heroine? It's really a big deal for readers.