Camelot: from Succession to Arthur's Throne

Wandering, a hasty and ordinary wandering😠 If you only read the story of the Yu-Gi-Oh! Volume, two top powerhouses fight, accidentally enter the battlefield, and save the world by accident. He was knighted, inherited the Holy Grail, the wise man became enlightened, and then fought against evil and saved the world for the lady. The story becomes fuller and climaxes one after another in a short period of time, which can be said to be a profound and infinite flow. But why do I still feel a bit bland despite the seemingly compact plot?

In the first world, he was pitiful, weak and helpless, beaten to death by a group of passers-by with no names. At least it still occupies the moral high ground, and its crimes other than war are excusable. In the second world, people are forced to eat shit. They try to trick people and reduce their intelligence, but they are beaten until they run away. The moral high ground is gone. People become bad guys but not strong. They run away from the beginning to the end. He was also hacked to death by a traitor who stood on the moral high ground, his death was useless and unreasonable.

In the second chapter, the world style of Jackie Chan's Adventures changed drastically. Was it written by one person? Recognizing their uncle and adoptive father, Shengzhu and Valon seemed to have had their brains thrown away, and they stood out as idiots. It is recommended not to read it

The logic of acting and standing at the same time is a very poisonous point. This style greatly overshadows the strengths of the writing and plot. Like cake mixed with shit.

Book review: The title has great potential, but the introduction has very little potential. Author, whether you write P social articles or FGO articles, your grades should still be acceptable, but what you write is about the heavens. The writing is not even good. Readers don't want to get involved in all kinds of bullying.

The world background selected for rebuilding the kingdom is preferably chaotic and some wars or crises have occurred.

After reading ten chapters, it gave me a rush to read the text! I felt drowsy after reading it, but you can't say it's a bad writing!

Inexplicably, the world and story line behind it are very weird, and it feels like it has nothing to do with King Arthur. Judging from the introduction, the protagonist should lead the knights to various worlds to collect power and restore Camelot. Even if the knights don't leave with the protagonist in the first world, the protagonist should strengthen himself in the first world and show his strength to lead the knights to develop after returning. Traveling back and forth many times to establish a base in the main world, absorbing power from the outside world, and finally recovering Camelot, the more detailed description is the United Kingdom of Pan-dimensional Camelot. The stuff behind it doesn't match the introduction at all.

The Adventures of Jackie Chan is so cleverly written 😅

Don't write jokes as settings. It feels so fake to write like this. It's okay to make jokes, but don't write them as settings.

See chapter thirty-eight. There are two things that are outrageous right now. Relying on plug-ins to travel through time, but suppressing the protagonist, forcibly forgetting and blocking the memory of Jackie Chan's adventures. Secondly, when returning from death, Merlin saw through everything, including the protagonist's experience, the existence of the Holy Lord, and many other things. In this case, I am very curious, which one is more powerful, cheats or Merlin. I took on the role of the protagonist, but Merlin looked at me completely? Very comfortable? Also, Merlin is raised too high. Seeing through the protagonist's time-travel experience, the protagonist can become various dragons in Yu-Gi-Oh, even including the Winged Dragon and the Sky Dragon. It is really outrageous. There are two things that are outrageous about this. One is that Merlin is stronger than the three phantom gods and can control the entire Yu-Gi-Oh world at will. The second is that it invades the ability of system plug-ins, allowing you to become anything you want, and it can also throw you into other worlds. The protagonist's cheating was not created by Merlin, right? But judging from your description, it doesn't look like it. Anyway, I feel outrageous.

In fact, it's better to just start with Arthur. There is no Lancelot in the serious Arthurian epic. Let's go by that.

This book was written in a haze, and the pace was very slow. After writing the first chapter for more than ten chapters, the protagonist was only canonized as a knight, which slightly attracted the favor of others, but it felt like nothing had been accomplished. I still have no memory of the plot of Jackie Chan's Adventures. . . The most important thing is that I originally thought that the protagonist traveled through time and entered the game, but what the author meant was that the protagonist is still playing the game, but the game is real. Many of these settings are suddenly thrown out, which feels very abrupt. Then the question becomes, it is just a game, how can the protagonist's memory be closed?

This is a mess, the last suggestion is, don't write smart plots like amnesia.

The previous writing was okay, but I don't know if it was a typesetting problem or something, but it was a bit difficult to read. Later, I traveled through the world alone to collect power, and then I started writing randomly. The miscellaneous things you added to the Uncle Long world are really messy. You might as well write two separate worlds, one for Uncle Long and one for Irish mythology. When combined, it will look very messy. Don't add other things and just collect them to improve your own theory. Then what I imagined was that you would lead you to conquer and rule various worlds, compete with, cooperate with, and become a god in various local worlds, instead of like this now.

The whole thing is too messy and the writing looks like shit. The protagonist changed three names when he changed to another world. The first volume was well written, but towards the end, Merlin suddenly jumped out, which was completely out of specification. It was like a deus ex machina.

Ask the author, what is the significance of these recent chapters? Where is my protagonist? There are three or four missing, right? I just want to ask you, if you delete these photos, will there be any impact?

Stop the extravagance and please write honestly. We are here to see the protagonist rebuild the kingdom, not the supporting characters?

I want to write about everything, but I can't write anything well.

What the hell is the first copy of The Adventures of Jackie Chan about? In the end, when death returns, a Merlin who can see through everything appears to make a plug-in for the protagonist? Then what is the use of the system or golden finger? In addition to the constant repetition of many settings, the main plot also has various twists and turns, and the identity of the protagonist is also unclear. Whether he is playing a game, traveling into the game world, or traveling to the same world as the game but with system cheats.

The beginning of the second volume has almost no connection with the main plot of the first volume. I don't know, I thought I was reading a novel instead. This is the first time I have seen such an outrageous way of writing. Even if it is a slap in the face, it is normal. Don't tell me anything about the later x volume entering the main line. Writing taboos: What will happen to me later? If the front is messed up, who will read the back? I don't even understand the logical order of writing.

Rather than rewriting, what is more important is how to write in the future. Is it possible that you have to write a volume and retake a volume? Think about the future plot first, then slowly add ingredients, seasoning, and plate. You know you want to commercialize, but what needs do you think the content you write meets the needs of the market? If it is not satisfied, then how to add some plot and polish some plot in an appropriate amount. The most important thing is what type of Rebuilding the Kingdom is your book? Farming? Didn't see it. Blast style? It doesn't look like either. It's more like a sightseeing tour group. It seems to have done something, seems to have seen something, and has a subtle feeling of being away from the ground. The first few dozen chapters were average or even not very good, and I have also encountered the ones that ended up being excellent. He relied on his outstanding "showing himself before others" skills and some political struggles to attract people and create his own characteristics. So, if you encounter the same situation, what characteristics do you want to show? What type of readers are you trying to capture? It's impossible to satisfy everyone, you have to make a choice

The content feels so confusing, it feels like traveling through time just for the sake of traveling through time.

Watch me fall asleep, haha😀

Author, you'd better start a new book, make a good outline, and slowly go from weak to strong in the power system. It's best to write a world with a western fantasy background. The beginning of your book is so bad, almost all the people are gone.

After reading a few chapters of the second volume, I didn't want to read anymore and it was boring. I felt that it would be outrageous to just change the protagonist.

Looking back, I found that the fairy book is really the best combination of your personal performance and the theme Whether it is fate, the rules of the world, and morality, it is a reasonable setting and something you like to abide by The only shortcoming is that the narrative is not localized enough, which leads to a higher threshold and becomes a niche.

This plot is like eating from a big pot. You never know what you will end up eating.

This is a book without an outline. It is better to prepare an outline before writing the book, otherwise the results may not look good.

There are several worlds I have traveled through that I am not interested in just by looking at their names.