Three Kingdoms: I Became Sword Gate Pass

Jianmenguan, Jiange County, Guangyuan, Sichuan

A veteran who is about to retire looks like an 18-year-old high school student in every aspect.

Not a single one was scolded, wouldn't they all be deleted by the author?

It is recommended that the protagonist be changed to a veteran of the founding of the People's Republic of China, but his thoughts and actions are no different from those of a college student. Personality and behavior are extremely disconnected. If you don't know how to write about this kind of personality, don't write about it. Just write about your identity as a college student. Veterans of the founding of the People's Republic of China, or most Chinese people, if they really meet the Prime Minister, they won't care whether they are qualified or not, and they may even say something heartbreaking.

When Deng Ai destroyed the Shu Han, didn't he go to Jianmen Pass? Instead, he went to pig's feet to stay lonely?

I was short of books and flipped through the book list again. As a result, I came across Liu Xie's book again. Clicking in, I found that the author really had a bad time. The next book will be barely finished with "Anti-Qing". The rest of "I Can See Reader Comments", "Rural Tourism", "Brother", "Warden" and "Jianmen Pass" were all cut off, and the one I left for the station "Let You Manage the Nursing Home, Why Are All the Old People So Awesome" did not last a few days. The new books "America" ​​and "The Coach of the Northern Song Dynasty" opened by Xiao Hao also suffered the same fate. It can be said that although the author has written many books in the past two years, none of them have achieved results. Of course I understand the author's situation. After all, there is an old man at the top and a young man at the bottom, and both husband and wife are unemployed, so they have no qualifications to waste money. If you don't get a grade for a book in two months, you have to cut it, otherwise you won't be able to live a good life. But the problem is that unless you get lucky, it will be difficult for the author to achieve success again with this gameplay. If the author can see my book review, then my suggestion is to sort it out and reset the book "Liu Xie". Although Liu Xie's book has the best results since the author wrote a book, in my opinion, it is completely high and low, and the follow-up writing is very poor. In the middle and late stages, I couldn't stand it anymore. An entire chapter is devoted to analyzing history, with no dialogue or interaction between characters at all, and some plot developments are just brushed off. Many historical authors make this mistake. They are too self-satisfied and forget that novels are for the audience. Creating characters and promoting the plot is the most important thing. The result is less like a novel and more like reportage. Of course, in reportage, it is also very poorly readable. Worse than outline flow. There are many good synopsis novels. The author did not analyze the reasons well, and ultimately attributed the data difference to the inclusion of private goods. It has nothing to do with the inclusion of personal information. There are many authors who include personal information. As long as the writing is good-looking, there will be no shortage of readers. The reason for the deterioration of the data is that the writing no longer looks like a novel and looks bad. Let me give you an example, such as the scene where Mrs. Ding reconciled with Cao Cao and then married Uncle Liu Huang. It's so awesome, and the logic is actually perfect. I've never seen anything so awesome in all the years I've been watching Qidian. However, the author's writing is quite poor in terms of storytelling. Cao Cao's anger, the relationship between Uncle Liu and Mrs. Ding, the tit-for-tat confrontation between Cao Cao and Liu Bei in the court, and the protagonist's scheming were all left out. After rambling on a lot of historical knowledge, it was the turn of the conflicts between the characters, and it was actually covered in one stroke. At that time, I was completely dumbfounded. The writing cannot be described as poor. No high school student could write something so painful. Author, you must know that what you write is a novel. What about character dialogue, scene description, and plot development? Not at all. Glass Screws talks about various historical knowledge at length. Are readers paying money to see this? If the author hadn't been imaginative enough and the plot he concocted was outrageous and logically consistent, no one would have watched it based on his storytelling ability alone. Coupled with the inherent flaws in Dihua's novel, the follow-up is very difficult to handle logically. My suggestion is that the author re-revises the entire novel, removes the Disney design, removes the elements of developing modern technology, breaks up all the historical knowledge, and cleverly integrates it into the character dialogue and plot development. Just write until the three countries are unified. Fully flesh out the characters and plot, and revise it to about 2 to 3 million words. Then promote it through all channels and resubmit. It's much better than the author you are messing around with now.

MD, this protagonist's character insults the founding veterans, right?🤫

There is a saying called Zhuge Liang with the benefit of hindsight, which is meant to ridicule others, but when it comes to Zhuge Liang with the benefit of hindsight, then Zhuge Liang is absolutely awesome. I hope the author can write a real Zhuge Liang with hindsight...

There is a feeling of going back to 10 years ago. The author must have traveled back in time. The routine of 10 years ago.

It's unlikely anyone would actually read this thing.