First Player in the Soul Hall

If it were a pure online game, it would feel very awkward. Most of the female protagonists are NPCs, which makes the whole relationship line look like a paper character falling in love, which is a bit unacceptable.

With a full-text subscription and nearly 3,000 minutes of reading, I think I am still qualified to evaluate this book. First of all, give me a positioning. The full score is 100 points, I am willing to give 85+. Personal reading requirements for a book are that the plot should be smooth, the conflicts should be natural, the characters should be vivid and memorable, and occasionally some highlights, contrasts, and divine twists should be interspersed. Overall, the writing of this book is smooth, the plot is relatively compact, and it doesn't feel too watery. The character creation is also quite distinctive. When you see the follow-up, there will be a feeling. If it were him, it would make sense to say this. This is a reflection of the relatively successful construction of character images. Characters are not just words, but a living image that can be extended. The author's in-depth processing of the world of fighting, plot extension, and reshaping of some unreasonable plots in the original work are also the reasons why I keep reading this book. Works are the product of information output by the author. A good author can make the work logically self-consistent and immerse people in the world of the work built by the author. Tiankong has done this very well. In the new world built by the author, the villains of the original work are not just pure villains. This subversive design greatly increases the interest of the work and really attracts me. I hope more people can read this book. If you are a reader who likes to upgrade online gaming novels, you might as well give it a try. It may not be as accurate as every word by a great writer, but there is absolutely no problem in feeling the joy of the plot and reading to the end smoothly 😁 Finally, I hope Tiantian can polish the next new book and strive to bring new excitement to everyone.

Chapters 767-733 1vs16 Challenge has seven consecutive water chapters Out of the 7 chapters, at least 6 chapters are about the experiences of the supporting characters during the fight, the powerful fighting skills used, the dialogue between the characters during the fight, the cheering of the onlookers, and the fight between the barrages.              ，，， After one chapter, I had two or three fights with my opponent. The rest was all about how talented the opponent was, how powerful the opponent's fighting skills were, and the amazement of the onlookers and the barrage. The ending of making dumplings is inexplicable at the end. Compared with other chapters, the number of chapters in this chapter has dropped significantly, and there is a possibility of control and evaluation.

Filter out other players' behaviors and trash talk, and waste time while having fun without thinking.

The writing is pretty good, keep it up 🙂

The logic is rigorous, and it's very comfortable for old bookworms to read. Good, cheers for the author.

Finally a serious online game novel, I miss you

All subscriptions are given, and monthly tickets are given. If you don't cut it, you will definitely finish it.

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Oh my god, you kid, I thought you stopped writing, holy shit! ! ! ! Thinking back to those days, I was addicted to the online game Sword Fairy, and then I followed in your footsteps and finished The Gods Are Coming (that should be the name) I had been waiting for your new book, but suddenly there was no news from you! ! ! I always thought that you had withdrawn from the circle and stopped writing online articles, but today I suddenly searched it on a whim. I didn't expect to find out that you have opened a new book! ! ! I will directly reward 2000! ! ! Save the novel directly! Add to bookshelf! To compensate for my failure to reward back then. I hope you won't be ungrateful and open more new books for me in the future. I'll give you monthly tickets and rewards! ! ! ! My favorite author is you. I can't help it. Personally, I really liked The Sword Immortal back then. I hope I won't forget the past three months in the future. Looking forward to your next new book, and I wish this book will get better and better results.

I finished reading it in one go. My personal subjective opinion: In the current era of online game literature desert, this book is almost a semi-immortal for those who love to read online game literature. For others, if there is a book shortage, this book is definitely a food. There are no major poisonous points in the whole process, and the combat power does not collapse like other online game writers who are invincible every second. If you are in a book shortage, just jump in!

Let's just say (put a mouthful of vegetables into your mouth), what exactly is the matter (chew, chew), rewrite the old book? (Picks up the coke) It's not impossible (sizzles), at least (picks up the edamame) I have a book to read (gaba gaba), at least the books are not disappearing (takes another bite of vegetables), young people should write more (stuff it in your mouth and chew it), otherwise how can you support your family (swallow).

I just saw the issue of selling attribute-increasing elixirs. This is a hard product. There are hundreds of millions of players around the world and the price will never drop. Please refer to the mobile game DNF Bone Ring which has maintained a price of 200 yuan until now. The enhancement materials for PC games have never dropped for more than ten years. People who play games seriously will buy them. There are too many tycoons who play games with hundreds of millions of people, unless they are put on the shelves every day. There are millions of them, otherwise they will be eliminated by others. The value-added props will never fall, not to mention the merchants speculating. Although there are level restrictions, it has only been two months since the server was launched. The first large army was just a fighter, and new people are constantly joining. The protagonist only made a few hundred in two months. It is a drop in the bucket. I hope to write less of this in the future.

So the poor should not write about the consumption level of the rich 😭 I saw that in an online game of this size, the first elixir that permanently added attributes was auctioned for only 3.20,000, Which is a bit difficult. . . An emperor must use a golden hoe. No matter how hard it is in the Internet age, it's okay to check the transaction prices of real game props. Top props in Fantasy Westward Journey can sell for hundreds of thousands 😭😭😭

The writing is smooth, and the current plot concept is based on the original text. The world view and game development are relatively reasonable. When I saw Dou Po + time travel + games, I originally planned to be a Shennong. After reading it, I found that it is really good. It can be considered a good choice at present, and I gave it 85 points.

Don't you have any idea how much space you gave to this heroine? Would other heroines not be as good as her if they had such a long career? Not to mention that Xun'er's creation time is far less than her popularity and she is still sluggish. Just bury your head in your own world and be an ostrich. The decline in follow-up and subscription is real.

Before the female character named Su came out, the perception was okay, but since she came out, every time there is a scene with her, everyone wants to dance. It's really not good if it's not original. Can't it be good to write a fanfic 🥵

The writing is very good. It is a true pure online game novel. I feel comfortable reading the author's writing style. There are no poisonous points like other immersive online game novels in the past. The emotional scenes are well-measured and the protagonist's own factors are taken into consideration. I hope to see the protagonist and Xun'er become lovers as soon as possible in the article. The daily life of these two is also very interesting. Thank you to the author. I really like the subject matter of this holographic online game. The strength of the protagonist is also being planned. It is not considered too excessive by the game company, which is also an advantage The interaction between players is also based on games and is very pragmatic Even the villain players do not exceed their duties and are very accurate It is a pity that this novel came out too late. Now the viewing rate of online games... Many other readers only read the title of the book, resulting in bleak results Come on, author, I hope I can continue to write the most satisfying book.

I haven't read the last 20 chapters. I feel like I'm dying. I'm a little tired of aesthetics. I know what the content is just by looking at the table of contents. It's almost turning into a routine. I think the most exciting part of this book is the interaction with senior Xun'er. After breaking through the Dou Zun, not only the interaction is gone, but it has also become a routine. I've always been looking for spiritual crystals to gain qualifications, and then leveling up monsters, raising strange thunder and fire, and then classic villains. The second generation and the thugs jumped out to find a sense of presence, and then went to the Soul Shop Fenglei Pavilion for a tour, and then wrote about the relationship with the heroine (this is very good). I kept repeating it, and I was almost tired of aesthetics. I hope the author will add more relationships with the senior sister. It is a bit boring to keep pushing the side plots and supporting characters. If you read it, it is mainly about the interaction and relationship between the protagonist and the NPC. I haven't read more than 20 chapters in the past, and I have voted for each month.

When I was first attracted to it, it already had more than one million words. I saw that Yang Shan had just become the Young Pavilion Master, and Feng Qing'er had just started to raise her after refining her essence and blood. I have to say that the author's writing style is quite good, and the plot arrangement is relatively reasonable and reasonable. This writing style is really refreshing, so I will vote for the book from time to time during the book raising stage. Come on, author, keep walking on the road you have come out on. After reading it in one sitting, I, an old bookworm, have a little impulse to write a book, but I know very well that I am not capable. I hope you can continue to bring us good and better works!

Let's talk about a few situations in the middle and later stages of this book. The early stage was not bad. The protagonist led the way, led a few people to develop his own company, and used resources to grab resource points, instantly kill the second player's combat power, etc. To set off the protagonist's power. In the middle and later stages, I went to Black Corner Territory and Zhongzhou to get the resources of the next version. At this time, problems began to appear. First, the supporting characters of the players were inconspicuous and had almost no sense of presence, whether they were enemies (Tianhao League) or members of their own company, Yi Qingyang, etc. And because the version was ahead of the game, the NPCs encountered were basically much taller than the protagonist, making it impossible for the protagonist to feel comfortable playing, which was even more fatal without the support of players. Let's talk about the emotional scenes. In the early stage, the favorability of Ya Fei, Yun Yun, Medusa and others was used to show off in front of other players. After the game was disconnected from the large group of players in the later stage, the pretentious plot became much less. Even the scenes of these beauties were greatly reduced in the latter part. They were all about how the protagonist got Su Yitang. It can only be said that the emotional value provided to readers by several important female supporting NPCs in the original work was missing. A few small suggestions (just my personal opinion, the author can just write according to his own ideas) 1. Let the player's high-end combat power follow the protagonist to sneak into Zhongzhou and meet up, and use events to bring out the difference between the protagonist and them. There are currently a few who have arrived in Zhongzhou, but they all describe how they get resources to rationalize that their levels rise too fast. To be honest, to rationalize the gap in combat power, it is better to let an NPC beat them up and give the protagonist a move in seconds. After all, what readers want is to have fun fighting, not to listen to the author's concocted description of the combat power of the supporting characters. I have a 5.60 Favorable opinion. Pretending to be good in front of the players, and seducing important female characters, and being a saint in front of people are both indispensable. After all, people don't pretend to be like Jin Yiye Xing 3. Reality Line suggests that if there is no important plot or character arc promotion, it is better not to write, it is too slow. Finally, I will reiterate it from my own point of view to see the plot gaps. Any different ideas are subject to you, just treat me as a fart.

It was well written, but there were two things that almost made me quit. 1. Where Xiao Mei grabbed the treasure, Xiao Clan Xiao Ding suddenly appeared. Although it is a plot design, it feels very abrupt. The protagonist is busy and relies on his identity in the Soul Palace to earn some experience by killing other players. Others always get opportunities out of nowhere, which I feel is a bit overwhelming to the protagonist. 2. The Little Medical Fairy and Yun Yun are fighting over the source of the purple crystal. The Little Medical Fairy's words and actions are very annoying. I haven't read the original work for about ten years, and I vaguely remember Xiao Mei, Xiao Ding and his like have mediocre talents, and the little medical fairy has no cultivation, but he is kind and sincere to others. In this book, at first glance, Xiao Mei's Fighting King and Little Medical Immortal Fighting King are very abrupt, giving people the feeling that a villain will go wild when he succeeds. 3. This is just a doubt: Ban Sheng Zi Jin Yuan is designed for the spirit-fighting stage. It can be taken once by one person and can be used as a substitute for heart meat. This has no effect on the protagonist and can only be sold for money. But the protagonist has already made enough money. I forgot whether it was 300 or 8 million for a local skill, and he also made a lot of money from pills. I was doubtful at first whether this was a pure virtual game or a so-called "extraordinary game". However, the background description is a virtual game produced by the company, which can also be manually controlled, so this is a pure game article. I don't have to worry about rebirth. I think game articles should mainly write about how to upgrade in the game, get opportunities, participate in the plot, and other gameplay in the game, instead of always thinking about making money, auctions, etc. It's very complicated 🙂. To put it simply: the protagonist competes for opportunities, developing himself is the main goal, and gaining favor and selling money are secondary gains. When playing games, try your best to grab things that will help you improve; like auctioning any skills and pills to make money, it should be done incidentally (it was good to grab three thousand thunderbolts in the Black Corner Domain earlier. The main purpose was to grab skills to strengthen yourself, and by the way, you dropped the purple earth-level skills, and then put them up for auction) Finally, the above are all personal opinions. You can read this book. The two above are not logical problems, but I personally don't like them. The character dialogue is awkward, but it's innocuous.

To be honest, the writing is quite good, but pure virtuality suffers a lot. The original novel is fictitious, and the result is that the purely virtual online game setting is fictitious on top of fictitiousness. Others are writing novels to make them realistic and enjoy them, but you are doing the opposite, and it is not completely satisfying at the same time.

The book "The Sword Immortal Arrives" also had this feeling. I suggest you write more about game content.

Be less realistic. If you don't know how to write, you can avoid your own weaknesses. It's just too toxic to simply touch on the realistic part.

The awkward emotional line with Su Yitang, I want to see the content of the NPC strategy

I shot it at the protagonist🦌, it's a sin

In traditional online game novels, all the poisonous points of previous online game novels have been well avoided, and the logic is very reasonable. I personally feel that Liangcao+ has no problem at all. It's a pity that online games are in decline, and the results are not worthy of the author's level. I would like to express my sincere support and hope that the results of this article can improve.

Brother, please give me one more episode. I'm dying. Brother, please. Brother, I feel like there are ants crawling on my body. I feel like my whole body is shaking. I can't breathe. Please, brother, just give me one more episode. Just one more episode. I won't touch it anymore. , Please brother, really, just one episode, I swear I will never touch this thing again, I really can't bear it anymore, brother, I'm tossing and turning now and can't sleep, brother, I beg you, just one more episode

The author, if you accept Feng Qing'er, I will vote a few more monthly votes (4 votes have been cast). I really like the author's portrayal of Feng Qing'er