Cultivation of Immortality Starts from Martial Arts and Condenses Talismans

At first, I thought I wanted to write about the incense making line, but it ended up getting further and further away. In the end, the title and cover were changed hahaha But I don't have any objections. I think the current rhythm and story line are OK.

Man, it was really good when it was written, but the incense making was a gimmick, which was pretty good. You should have written it with more space. No matter what, it had to be 50,000 to 60,000 words. In the end, the cursed ghost and god were taken away, and this place was ruined. You wrote it in just over 10,000 words, which is a bit too hasty.

Dude, break it down into more segments. There are too many words piled together in pornographic articles, and few people read them.

I don't understand why the protagonist suddenly knows this deliberately hidden "godhead" information and "how to complete a sacrifice that is not described in the secret law"? ? ? ?

There is a completed book called Xiangzu, which begins with ordinary people making incense and creating the practice of incense.

Seeing that I now have a certain grasp of the general plot. Overall, I feel very good. So far, there have been no major problems with the settings, and the character creation is also okay. It's just that the protagonist's character could be portrayed more clearly. The image details of other dwarfs can also be more detailed to highlight Wang Xian's unique image as the first teacher the protagonist encounters. The overall feeling is very good, highly recommended.

Personally, I feel that the overall plot progresses too fast, especially the early stages of raising ghosts and gods, practicing martial arts in a small town, and slaying demons the day after tomorrow. The main character is that the protagonist appears to be fast and decisive. The disadvantage is that except for the protagonist, all the characters and backgrounds are relatively blurred. As a result, except for the vivid protagonist, the rest of the world in the book is very empty. And because the plot advances too fast, although the protagonist has a distinct personality, the sense of satisfaction generated after handling the incident is not enough (or does it pass quickly?). It is recommended to polish the plot later and describe more about the world background and other characters. It doesn't hurt to go slower.

There's a question, how can you practice so hard without eating or drinking, and your energy and blood won't appear out of thin air?

When I first read this book, I thought it was a studio novel, but later I found that there are many highlights. The supporting characters can often be described clearly in just a few words. The dialogue between the main and supporting characters, and the heroic spirit revealed inadvertently, show that the author has worked hard, which is very good. It should be reminded that there are some details that the author did not handle well. For example, the incense-making village has survived for so long, but the government still has not discovered its existence. How to describe the relationship between the incense-making village and the government later and how to fill this hole; another example is that the protagonist chose to cut out his heart when sacrificing himself. Hey, I guess some people have to be persuaded. I hope the author can achieve a perfect logical closure when writing these plots.

It's well written. After reading about twenty chapters, maybe the plot jumped too fast and I felt depressed.

To be honest, this has been my favorite book about cultivating immortals for a while, but it's a pity that its popularity has failed to increase, leading to the collapse of Zhongdao Good luck, author

Extreme flow. Well. I originally thought it was magic

This book was at least written with intention, and the names of the martial arts in it were all chosen with intention.

How many heroines? Single, many, or none?

Don't do too many fancy exercises and skills. I've seen an author learn two to three hundred skills. It's so confusing.

The protagonist is very positive 👍

Well written, keep it up ✊

Just read two chapters! Just subscribe first! The author writes really well, I like your writing style🙂

Not bad, better than most on the new book list

I can't sign the contract. I'm so jealous every time I see these contract documents that I pee blood. Come and look at me. Why can't I sign the contract? Uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu