Passenger in Konoha

First, the title of the book is a bit too literary and not very suitable for Naruto fan fiction. I remember an author friend told me that it is difficult to change the name of a novel after signing a contract, but it is actually possible to just leave it like this. The literary style can make it different from the Naruto fans on the market to attract readers. Second, the introduction suggestions need to be changed, although they will not take effect until a week later. The questions are as follows: ① Sometimes "I" and sometimes "she", readers don't know which person it is when looking at the introduction. ②Longer! Be more detailed! The protagonist is a soul traveler? Is it what he's wearing? Who has become? Is there a golden finger? Selling points and exciting points must be highlighted, such as writing style, compliance with the original work, strict logic, etc. ③ Directly indicate that the article is a female protagonist and point out the orientation of the protagonist (screen out whether the reader is a male or female protagonist). Are you single? Lily? Or get married? In the former, don't have too many ambiguous plots; in the middle, the relationship is established in the early stage, and it will be confirmed soon after it is released; in the later part, the relationship will be maintained at the beginning of the chapter, and the relationship will be established in the later stage or the finale. (Readers of female protagonists will be more torn by the single marriage, so don't eat both sides) Thirdly, I have neither watched Naruto nor its fanfics, so I don't have any suggestions for you in terms of content. But since you are determined to follow this style, stick to it. Fourth, go to the market! Hurry up and find an operations officer, use your writer rights, open a small account yourself or find a friend, and start managing the book review area. If someone jumps in the face and says, "Female-led articles? Give up" or "Female posts are scolded for posting male posts?", It is recommended to delete the post directly and permanently ban it.

It's rare for a new artist to have such expressive power in his new work.

Are the protagonist and Hinata a couple? (I agree🐶)

The language is distinctive, the storytelling is somewhat sophisticated, and it can be seen that the literary skills are profound.

No one has commented, so write your own review (sigh) This is my first time writing an online article. I also read some posts and videos before writing. Only after I wrote it did I realize that the opening chapter is very important, otherwise I won't be able to retain people. I didn't have any ambitious goals for this novel. Just what time. First, write it completely, and feel the rhythm of the online article throughout the whole process, and what kind of outline is suitable for you. The second is to practice writing. The third is to develop the habit of daily writing. Fourth, there will be 500 collections when completed. Come on (*￣m￣).

There are suspicions of abuse of the master, Hinata is currently missing with a broken arm, and the protagonist's performance in the subsequent series seems to be incompetent and furious. Ever since the protagonist left the village to perform a mission, his combat prowess has become crazy. It seems that no matter who the enemy is, he will be beaten until he vomits blood first, and then explodes. When he chased Obito, Sasuke beat him up and vomited blood. Then he threw a charm and continued to chase. Soon the rikishi wanted to beat Sasuke to death and ran out of energy. After being pestered by Sasuke for a while, he failed to catch up, and then it was estimated that Sasuke would also be rescued. It can be explained that Liu Dao was the one who got in the way, but the tone of the protagonist's incompetence and rage was set. Later, Black Zetsu started a ninja war, resurrected Kaguya, Hinata and Tenten died in the battle, and the protagonist was disheartened and left the void. It ended directly, so that he really became a passerby in Konoha.

There are no other big problems, but this system feels very confusing 🥵 First of all, the fully digital system always gives people the feeling of a brain in a vat; Secondly, the character abilities given by the system are relatively niche (if I am ignorant, I apologize), which has led to many people being confused about the protagonist's abilities. The lack of ability to match the radio makes the play very embarrassing Also, will the system give more and more characters? If it doesn't increase, the protagonist's abilities will be very limited and the upper limit will be limited (if these abilities are not strengthened). If there are more and more, will it lead to the collapse of combat power or the emergence of some bugs in the middle and late stages due to forgetting all the previous abilities? The most outrageous thing is that at chapter 60, the world view is unfolded and the plot is on track, and you suddenly cut the system again. , Making myself nondescript (I don't know if the decision to cut the system was influenced by the comments, but I hope the author will not change the outline easily. If you don't grasp it well, changing the outline will often lead to the collapse of the plot) If the author sees it, I hope he can consider these issues.

Well written, keep it up! ! !

Why did you suddenly uninstall the system? What is the purpose of the system preparation in the previous 60 chapters?

It's so painful to see that he is already so strong that he has to suppress his strength even after breaking the void. Just change the world!

Come on, come on, finish it no matter what, and I think it's getting better and better 😡😡😡😡

The writing is quite good. The writing style is good and the protagonist has an IQ. It is one of the few Naruto stories that can be read. The score and the number of comments are not worthy of this article.

Girls don't know how to write about fighting. Anyway, I felt uncomfortable after reading it. A clone when attacked? Substitute? How is it possible that even one against seven can't do it? Orochimaru's skin-shedding stand-in is the most awesome. If he is hit too hard, he will be injured or even die. Clone and double when a genin is attacked? I don't know how many times I have died without preparation. Most girls have no fighting spirit.

The first chapter was okay, but when it came to the graduation exam, I couldn't understand it. A special exam even used detonating symbols. I can't understand what the author wanted to express. Where can a genin get so much chakra to cast ninjutsu? The clone technique is not as useful as the shadow clone, and the vague writing makes it difficult for me to understand.

The pursuit of reading is now the most important data before it is put on the shelves. I beg you all to follow it up. It's okay to keep a book. Just scroll to the last page and stay there for ten seconds. Thank you everyone.

I always feel that there is a lack of sense of immersion. There is no explanation of the basic information of the character card and how to unlock it. It is also unclear what the role of experience and coins is, making it difficult to intuitively understand the growth of the protagonist. But the author's writing style is really good, it's not like writing a book for the first time.

I would like to ask if the protagonist will be with Hinata? Or is there another female protagonist or male protagonist

It's toxic, a bit slow to warm up, and the current state of the story makes it seem like the protagonist's combat power in the later stages is not up to par (Pink Shit: Purple Dog, Kizaru, I've finally caught up with you). The writing is pretty good, and you can read it if you don't mind the slow burn.

I feel sick, do you have any fighting wisdom? The world is too fragile and the void will shatter with just a little force. Is there any other solution? Just give it your all and not use your brain? One: You can instantly detonate your true energy and use the generation and destruction of singularities to attack, sending the enemy soaring; Two: You can spread your true energy around to form a field to reinforce the world's barriers, thereby increasing your upper limit of output. Three: Observation rules, create a small space in a Klein bottle, and directly throw the enemy into it during combat. If you really practice the exercises until your mind is full of muscles, what should you do after you have perfected the exercises? Should you go and practice other exercises?

It's so well written, I'm addicted to reading it, and I'm waiting for more every day

The system is gone. . ? Will the King Return behind the system?

What's going on? Even the donkeys in the production team don't dare to rest like this.

Why do I feel like there have been more female protagonists in Qidian recently? Is it my imagination?