The Age of Mythology: Beginning with the Building of the Sun

The focus of your writing is completely in the wrong direction. You set the readers' expectations in the direction of the Kingdom of God at the beginning, but in the end the focus is on reality, and the plot is not that good. Even if you want to focus on reality, you have to add more scenes to the Kingdom of God, because the highlight of your book is the Kingdom of God.

After reading a few chapters, I realized that those who come here to read are all for the purpose of building the sun, rather than watching the protagonist pretend to be a pig and eat a tiger in reality. They are already apprentices to gods, so they should less describe reality. My personal suggestion.

You are writing about fantasy, not the city. The focus should be on those small planes. The city is just a way to obtain knowledge, and you should clarify the priorities. Faith is also a very frustrating setting. Is faith necessary to build the Kingdom of God? Can't those world's substances and the origin of the world work? Faith can be used as a coordinate and a channel. It can be used to promote subordinates, absorb the origin of the world, and go to the small world when the protagonist is weak. In the later stage, it can be made into weapons to attack opponents with the impurities of faith in them. The protagonist's existence is maintained on faith. It is too rubbish. Without faith, he will die. There are also problems with the writing of the first small world. It was invaded casually. Is the protagonist very high-quality? The powerful physical strength, senses, thinking speed and other manifestations are not available, and he will still be hungry. If the protagonist's life is not linked to faith, then the early stage is to develop faith and plunder the origin of the world. The great divine kingdom perfects the rules until it becomes a big world. The divine kingdom is a major core of the protagonist. The normal development in the future is based on gameplay, which is also more conducive to the protagonist's advancement to the highest level. But this article seems to be a Western fantasy, and I feel like there is nothing to write about. I hope I can improve next time, bye👋🏻

How did this world come into being? All it takes is enough energy. Matter is just the remains of energy. The rest can evolve on its own.

Just cut it. After reading it, the priority of what I wrote is unclear. Instead of changing it, I might as well start it again.

How should I put it? There are many elements in the whole novel, but the author did not combine them well! You come here to read what readers who are attracted by your novel want to read. Myths, making the sun, gods, these are the themes of your book. Isn't it about watching the protagonist in the beginning of the dog-licking game pretend to be a pig and eat a tiger in reality after he has some abilities? The most important thing is that the protagonist is not a tiger, let alone pretending to be a pig because the protagonist does not have that strength. Secondly, about Zhao Sisi and the girl in the white coat, it is very baffling? ! Zhao Sisi is very fascinated. Since she is very important to the original owner because of what happened when she was a child, it doesn't matter if the protagonist continues to lick her. Even if it is for the original owner to at least prevent her from dying. Who told you to insist on licking the dog? In the beginning, she added the white moonlight attribute to her since she was a child. Secondly, the latter girl in the white coat is very inexplicable. Of course, it is possible for you to follow her. I will accept it, but online novel readers don't have the patience. The most important thing is that what you are writing is not in line with the name of your novel and does not meet the readers' expectations, so it seems very inexplicable and nondescript. Forget it, let's just say this. I don't say this to make excuses, but I like to read my novels to complain. It's purely my personal opinion.

Writing about reality is a big pit, and the underworld-style modern world is even more of a pit within a pit.

Indeed, this book seemed pretty good at first. The problem is quickly starting to write about realistic things. If you write about realistic things, just write about it, but the result will be so bloody. It makes people speechless again. It can only be said that it makes people less interested in watching it.

Don't sell dog meat on sheep's head, what kind of ancient novel?

It's too watery. I've seen a few pictures and they are all women. You are a god. You still write about women. No one with a little money will hang around women all day long. You are a god. Even the leaders of the country are not as good as you. You are not a loser.

Indeed, in reality, no normal person would hang around women all day long, unless he is mentally abnormal.

It can only be said that the elements of dog blood are relatively complete.

What the hell are you writing about? What the hell is written in the next forty or fifty chapters?

? ? Baffling. . . . If a good god is not used well, it will be the same as nothing. . Such good conditions are not as good as those in the Super Seminary. . Nothing on the surface level can be solved immediately. . . So fake. . . Severe loss of intelligence. . Gone

Pig's feet can build metaverses one after another in the big universe. Super God, Trisolaris, Dragon Ball, Ultraman, Marvel, DC, etc. Are used as testing grounds to restart the metaverse again and again, with the ultimate goal of restarting the big universe.

Not good at plot? ? ? Feeling a bit off topic? ? ? Too many realistic plots? ? Development of believers... Upgrading of the protagonist... Developing the kingdom of God... Where is the plot? ? ? ? ? ? ? A supernatural urban novel with the slogan of fantasy becoming a divine novel...? ? ? ? ? Persuading to quit…………

Farewell, too immature, not the god I imagined. Come on, author, every platinum master started from Xiaobai.

Something's wrong...? ? ? ? The plot is not good? ? Also... The Kingdom of God... Feels fake? ? ? Can't you dominate your own kingdom of God? ? ?