Cultivation of Immortality: Start as a Xuanpao Disciple

It's so uncomfortable to play single-player 🙂. After writing today, I won't write it this year. Let's talk about it next year! 😄

After reading it, let me talk about my own feelings. The overall plot is too bland, and there is no desire to click on the next chapter. It is best to get over the recent family fight plots. Many chapters were written about their fights, but the length or number of words about the protagonists has become less. Moreover, I think the plots of these families are boring, but since the reason for writing them is to repay the kindness of the Shen family for taking him to become a monk, then I will end this plot with the fewest chapters. If I remember correctly, the realm should be Kaiqiao, Qi Qi, Jindan, Yuanying, Dharma and Yuanshen. In the beginning of the new book, I think the plot should be written compactly. Too bland plots may turn off many people in the early stage. The most impressive thing about the previous plots is that the Master Jindan who is about to be enthroned gets a chance, because it mentions the talent of the protagonist, as well as plots related to becoming stronger, such as the rich couple Dharma Land, which should be written more in the early stage of the new book. Also, I feel that the world view is not complete. What is the name of this world of immortality, or what is the name of the area of ​​Shangxuan sect where the protagonist is located, what is the nearby Yuehan Palace, what family, and where these forces are located. You can also mention the situation of other large sects in this large area, which elder or genius has done something or achieved a breakthrough, and the protagonist Jiang Ningben The structure of the sect of the Shangxuan Sect is not written down. I only know the inner and outer sects, the deacons, elders, sect leaders, and departments within the sect. In fact, if you don't write all of them, you should write at least a little bit first. Especially in the early stages of a new book, you need to slowly expand the worldview. First write about the Shangxuan Sect or the sect at the same level as Shangxuan and nearby small forces, and then develop the plot of other large areas. There must be something exciting in the early stage to retain people. Now these family plots are definitely not included. The big plot should be written before writing about the situation of these small forces. It is necessary to write down the exciting points of the protagonist's growth and breakthrough, just like the protagonist's first attack on the Nine Pearls and comparison with others in the sect, it is exciting. Write more about the plot of the genius of the sect and how the protagonist catches up with them, and why he has grudges or friendships with certain geniuses. If possible, write about which sects the Xuan sect is hostile to or has a good relationship with, and how these can affect the protagonist. So again, the plot is too bland and boring. Let's have some fighting or exploring opportunities, and use narration or other people's words to expand the world view. Don't take up so many chapters of boring plots in the early stage. The above are some of my opinions and suggestions. I hope the author can work hard and present us with wonderful stories of cultivating immortality.

Guys, you will die if you keep it any longer, please read it! Please read it! Please read it! 😭😭😭

The world view is okay, the training system is also okay, the character dialogue and story conflicts are a bit weak. Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

It's a bit like a big fight, encourage me 🌹

The writing style is sophisticated, the narrative is smooth, the structure is grand, and the timing of the arrangement is good. However, the plot is a bit slow, and the emotional drama is not described thoroughly enough. I look forward to a big explosion. If you can persist, this book will have the appearance of a masterpiece. I, Ying Hao, come to the Wild Age with the Gate of All Realms, travel through the heavens, gather endless luck, open the first destiny dynasty in the ages, use the way of the ultimate emperor to make all realms surrender, and become the eternal supreme emperor of heaven. ……………… PS: I am currently writing about The Wilderness, and I may write about Swallowing Starry Sky, Perfect World, Under One Person, Douluo Dalu, Zhe Tian, ​​Wu Dong Qian Kun, Snow Eagle Lord, Feijian Dao, Cangyuan Tu, Eternal Life, Yuan Tianzun, Beyond Time...

It felt like there was a bit too much nonsense and the plot developed slowly.

Weird, I feel like I have no sense of immersion.

Newbie, new book, please support 🙏

I haven't read it yet, but after briefly looking at the table of contents and volume titles, I decided to keep it in my collection first. To be honest, I need to save more of this kind of novel to read it in one sitting.

Dear friends, please read on. The test of the waters has come. This is an important criterion for subsequent recommendations. Please 🥺, please don't keep books! The new author is so impressed 😭!

It feels like the people in the Su family have no brains, and the villain is a bit too superficial.

As for the writing, I may have skipped reading. I read almost everything before, but I didn't see how long the lifespan is between the levels of cultivating immortals to know how to upgrade. I didn't realize that cultivating immortals is as difficult as eating and drinking.

Stop writing and find a factory to drive screws.