I Will Forge a New Destiny

Can your great fortune match that of the King of Litang?

It's too dry, the author is too watery. The writing is too stiff and the plot is too separate. Xiaobai will definitely not be able to watch it. After reading the first dozen chapters, I felt confused. Author, you may have an outline and background and your brain automatically added it when you read it. But when I watched it, it felt like watching a video clip. Not long after one thing started, it suddenly jumped to the next thing. The settings are pretty good, and the writing style is good, but the usage is too poor and I lack experience.

The content is too divisive and uncomfortable to read.

It's too watery, or there are too many modifying words, and it looks a bit literary.

Refine it, cut the supporting roles in half appropriately, and don't let redundant descriptions make the whole thing bad. The protagonist is not a grape on the bunch, he should be the only fruit on the world tree.

After reading more than a dozen chapters, the author's writing is good, but in the Western context, the original name of the pig's foot is also Western. After the pig's foot traveled through time, it became the Eastern name, which seems a bit different! If you don't like the Western name of the original owner, just write the Eastern background! There are also pig's trotters that I always like to complain about! Embarrassed!

How can I put it this way? The plot and setting of this novel are quite interesting, but it always has a literary flavour, which makes people uncomfortable to read. There is a lot of nonsense, and there are many words that do not make sense in my opinion. Maybe the author thinks it is cool to write like this, and it is very troublesome to read. There are many things in the clouds and fog, which are uncomfortable to read. I can't stand it after seeing the relics of the old captain. I look forward to the author's next novel, provided that the writing style is changed.

The content is very good, but the writing style is not good, making it difficult to read. The preface is a little inconsistent with the follower.

Personally, I feel that the writing is very interesting and the text is very clever, but it is really not that easy to understand and read. The writing style can be said to be delicate at best, and a bit crafty at worst. Of course, it's not serious. I personally like it. I think the plot is good, but it's a bit bland, or the conflicts and main goals are too unclear, and it's not very attractive to watch. Seeing that the characters and the plot that impressed me most were the masters in the social pit (I even dreamed of squirting at night after watching it, it was so weird) The author's writing style does not look like a complete novice, but the plot setting does not feel like an experienced author. Take a bold guess, it feels like the debut novel of a newcomer who has written light novels on other websites or has the habit of writing essays High EQ: There is a clean beauty that has not been poisoned by commercial routines Low EQ: It is not fun to write like this and you will starve to death But no matter how you say it, the flaws cannot be concealed. Generally speaking, it is more than enough food and grass. It should never be so deserted. It can only be said that it is bad luck, which is a bit regretful.

The world is full of good luck and fortune, but it can only be grasped in the palm of a hand. The beauty Yanyan surrounds the palace, and the grass rustles to the north wind. The golden light cannot hide the twilight of the years, and the royal court of Dingding will stand for thousands of years. My family and country have been passed down to the world for thousands of years. Let's see the laughter of Zhongzhou again tonight.