Cultivation: My Efforts Will Be Successful

How can I put it this way? It's pretty good-looking, but it's a bit poisonous, too ambiguous, and has too many emotional lines.

You need to be strict and able to hide, but you don't want a female protagonist.

1. The novel setting in the early stage and the cautious character of the protagonist are quite interesting, but when the plot appears later, it starts to feel a bit rushed and feels a bit superficial. 2. The emotional lines are also quite complicated. The author originally wanted to write a story about horses, but he still has no experience in this area. As a result, new female characters have new emotional lines, and the old ones gradually disappear. If you like pure love or stallion, I don't recommend reading the emotional lines. 3. A question about charging. After charging, the few chapters are okay, but as you go to the end, it becomes more stable and I have less and less desire to read it (I finished it bit by bit). You can watch it as a combined version of Mortal Cultivation of Immortality and Big Brother 🤭🤭🤭

I just want to know what are you doing? No matter how much you keep getting into trouble, someone will kill you!

It feels like the rhythm lately is not quite right. After entering the sect, it was too bloody. How to say it? Yes, the protagonist is targeted too frequently. Everyone, just be patient, half or more than half of the people have ill intentions towards the protagonist. Well, this is actually not bad, but there are too many unlucky things, so the author should pay attention to the frequency. Then there's the sect. The sect's training of ordinary disciples is nothing like a sect. The culture of newborn blood is a little too uncultured. Then there's the protagonist's character, but the type of book is like that, so there's nothing we can do about it.

I can't help but complain, every time the heroines appear outside, they "stand barefoot", what's wrong? Can't afford shoes?

Overall, it's okay, but it places too much emphasis on "peace is the most important thing." How can I put it this way? I quite like having the villain set things up for the protagonist. I felt a little "angry" while watching it. But it's not always smooth when you deal with the villain, and the protagonist still has to suffer when the villain dies. In the end, this "anger" has nowhere to vent. You can't write the protagonist as being "heavy as a mountain" when being bullied, and then write the villain as "as light as a feather" when dealing with it.

The front is okay, and the protagonist seems relatively stable. But when I came to Zongmen later, I often felt that I was doing it for the sake of 🐶, and the characters were not so likable.

I always feel that the writing style drops a lot after forty or fifty chapters.

While this book talks about not considering getting married and having children until the end of spiritual practice, it also wants to write about the two women who are entangled in each other. It's too tiring to read. They are mother-in-law and mother-in-law. If they continue to be separated, they will be messed up.

From the perspective of Xiaobai: This is a good article From the perspective of a master's masterpiece: You can go and see the author, this weird world, I use my body to control all things This book, 1. Your fighting scenes are too childish. You are impulsive and irritable at every turn. You kill your opponent with a flash of red eyes. The opponent will always be a fool. After your partner is simply killed by the pig horns, you will always be a brat without thinking about running away. You dare to kill my classmate. It is too retarded. Every enemy is always retarded. I think this is really brought out by the author's poor writing, which is a big poisonous point. 2. The language and gestures used to describe female characters are not sophisticated enough, and it smells like anime. However, if the author is a young man, most of his experience with women is from watching TV, anime, and novels such as Immortality. It's not the author's fault. There are not many authors who can write women well, so you can't ask for too much. Miya Shimizu really smells like the eldest lady in Immortality. . . The style of writing is too ancient, this is considered a minor drawback, 3. It is obvious that Goldfinger is described as a late bloomer at the beginning, and the protagonist also has the idea of ​​not being anxious and putting safety first. It is a very reasonable idea, but in the end, he becomes a congenital before the age of 18? What are you worried about, author? You golden finger, so what if you only cultivated immortality at the age of 50? Instead of describing too much time and fearing that too much prefaced content about cultivating immortality will scare away readers, just say that in 10 years, so-and-so pig horns will be successful in health-preserving skills. That's it. After that, it will be hurried, Chinese-style young geniuses, wishing to blow up the earth at the age of 3, and emerge from the solar system at the age of 5. It's not that you can't write, but why did you take your time in describing it in the first 10 chapters? Inconsistent behavior. The writing style has also changed. As the novel becomes more powerful, it describes more and more the various waves of pig horns, and it loses the vigor of being cautious at the beginning. Hey, it's another novel that tries to sell the meat of a sheep's head.

I really want to give this to all authors. Take less advantage and accumulate more virtue, so that the upper limit of the book will be higher.

Now that I've seen the foundation building part, I won't say whether it's tough or not, the content is okay, but the author is really a bad namer. . There are a bunch of online game skill names in the article about cultivating immortals, it's too ridiculous

You can listen to some people's words, but you can't listen to everything. Many people are used to reading cool articles, just killing and killing. Those who can follow it will definitely accept this style to some extent. Of course that doesn't mean that I don't listen to readers at all. You are the first to write a book, and it is the time to create your own style of writing. You must have some confidence in yourself, and the characters you create will change much more than others. If you listen to them all, and be influenced by them too much, you may not be able to finish the book, and will directly become an old eunuch. Stick to your own ideas, and don't put too much pressure on yourself. With more than 8,000 words in the chapter, your hair will probably fall out in a day, so pay attention to your health.

The setting of the book is quite good and the balance is good, but the logic of the story does not feel complete enough. For example, the soul-dispersing seeds will not be reported to the sect. The sect doesn't even care about this? I feel like I have no organization with casual cultivators and I have to shoulder the responsibility myself. Anyway, quite a few

Let's talk about the problems (sorted from mild to severe) 1. Typos will greatly affect the reading experience. Could you please check it yourself after finishing the layout or ask the editor to correct it? 2. Wording, hey, this is a common problem among Internet article writers, but I still feel a little uncomfortable. 3. There are too many places where you are forcibly subdued. You are the smartest person and know everything like a god. Everyone else is a fool. In a sect fight, you have to admit defeat. Why are you so noisy and angry? Are you really cultivating immortality? ! 4. The writing is not smooth. For example, it talks about the failure of the Lin family's plot, the struggle between Zhao Jingwu and the clan leader, and does not explain what the Lin family paid for Lao Duan's second-level cave, just saying that the aorta was injured! Does that mean it's better to lose your wife and lose your troops? Or is it more reasonable to say that the sect leader's face is gloomy because the Lin family has lost face? 5. What exactly is Gou? The meaning of Goudao in this book is turtle. Therefore, although the old man who learned light skills and became a flash grenade has stopped updating, he is still at the pinnacle of the style of brushing proficiency and Gou Dao.

It's well written and the protagonist has a very good character! ! If you want to go further, you have to write about a different world. That's it for refining qi. You can start writing about the spiritual world (which interacts with reality) from building the foundation, so that readers can always keep a sense of mystery and freshness. For people you have known in the past, you can hang up when the time comes. There is no need to go on together. There are different Taoist friends at different stages, and they also have different scenery. The world is so big, this protagonist needs to see the wonders of the world

It was well written in the early part, but I joined the harem in the middle part, so I stopped reading it.

What is the purpose of cultivation? What is the goal? What are you going to do after you have achieved great success in cultivation? Revenge, adventure, protecting the country, family and friends? It seems that everything is done as you please. If there is no goal or purpose, you will just keep doing it. Practice just to please yourself, just to save your life, as long as you live. As for the meaning of living? No matter what you do, just do whatever you want and be on your own. ~2024.04.25 12:46.

This book is indeed good. It is much better than those that are limited to free. Personally, I think that not many people have read it. Maybe it is because of the name.

Uh-huh, how much do you charge for comments?

It's not often that someone can become a god in one book, let alone a newcomer (probably not much newer) who writes a book with a free heart. No one writes it with profit in mind at the beginning. Most of them want to write a book after watching it. After all, I am more optimistic about Chen Yi. I hope that this mortal flow (yes) will grow into a big boss with the help of Golden Finger, and gradually stop looking up to others. Finally, I offered five thousand points to express my feelings.

When Shuhuang saw this book, he felt that it was better than most books on cultivating immortals, but why was the score so poor? The author needs to reflect and reflect. The tickets are given to you, please give me the highlights.

It's very good, worth reading, you have to be patient, I read all 99 chapters of the update in a few days, and I'll give you 5,000 starting coins to express my feelings, come on, come on! ~2024.01.06 21:57

How should I put it, the male protagonist's character is a bit pretentious. There are more clever tricks. Not to mention in real life, let alone the old monster door in the fantasy world. Those are worlds where dimensionality reduction strikes, where people's wisdom is at least ten times that of modern people.

I set up a forum in the chapter before and offered a reward of 100 for 10,000 words. Put it here to count. If you post 10 comments (from different people), you will receive a reward of 50 RMB. Let a little add up to a lot (/ω＼)

Go forward step by step, read slowly day by day, the writing is very good, it requires a little patience, slowly watch the development of the protagonist, it will get better and better, come on! ! ! ~2024.01.19 09:06, Friday, the ninth day of the twelfth lunar month, there are still three weeks before the Spring Festival, well, I will fish for a while before going to work every day

Write well

The writing is very smooth. For the sake of being number one on the book list, please update it soon! ! !

Come on