I Open a Horror House in the Elf World

The setting is that there is no big boss Natsu in Golden City, so it can be a city with any name. It is directly set to a world with Pokémon. What about Golden Nibi City?

The background is not clear. Is it a resurrection flow or another world flow? How come ordinary people don't know about elves?

The writing style is too childish and the story is too far-fetched.

The choice of words and sentences is okay, and the writing is not a big problem, but the world background is flawed. At the beginning, the dream monster is conquered, and the children can walk outside after running away from home, which proves that this village is not closed at all. How could he be so ignorant that he didn't even know the names of common elves in the area, such as the Little Fist Stone and the Big Rock Snake, and still use the words "Fist Stone" and "Rock Snake" to describe them? You can access the Internet on your mobile phone, and you don't even know about ghost Pokémon? An adult with normal intelligence still believes in a ghost and god that has never been seen or appeared? Human beings are very diverse, and reality is indeed often more absurd than fantasy, but reality does not need to be logical. When you write a novel, you need to be logical. Be realistic when writing about the modern society with elves, and be realistic when writing about the world of animation logic. If you use the background of modern society and apply the logic of animation, it would be weird if it doesn't seem to be separated.

The idea is good, but it still feels a bit disconnected. The world described may still be somewhat different from the elf world I think of. I feel like the description may be mainly biased towards humans? Ignoring the creation of Pokémon, it is obviously interesting to use various skills and characteristics to create a terrifying range, but the author did not describe it in detail. Instead, he kept going through the plot. If that is all, it is better to go to the Adventure House.

One moment, there can only be five gyms in a city, and the next, many horror gyms have been destroyed, which is inconsistent.

Are there any men in the back who play positive roles? After reading more than 20 chapters, the women are all positive and have many roles. If the men are not villains, they will have no roles.

Let me give you some suggestions. Write the background clearly and understand the audience's world view. Please give me some hints.

Love the ghost-themed elf literature😍