My Journey Through Civilization

I found the official part too awkward. This part is already quite far removed from the reader's knowledge, and it seems the author doesn't know much about it either. Plus, there are censorship factors involved. The correct approach would have been to omit it or describe it indirectly.

This is a rare gem of writing; don't let it fall short later on. This level already surpasses 98% of all authors on the site.

Create a dedicated thread for feedback; you can submit any opinions you have. The author himself is not highly educated and does not read many books. He started writing this book on a whim, and luckily got the contract and began updating it. Therefore, there are many problems in the book, and he hopes that readers will criticize and correct them. This thread welcomes suggestions and criticisms from all directions.

This memoir, spanning six chapters, has significantly diminished my appreciation for it, making me completely lose interest in subscribing.

In reality, it's best to avoid writing this type of book if possible, especially since realistic romance stories are notoriously difficult to write; we're here to read gaming stories, not romance novels. Therefore, authors must avoid making these kinds of mistakes.

Forget about reality, just focus on the game. The game itself is top-tier for its genre, but the reality is a complete disaster. The initial idea was to hide in the single dorm and avoid detection, but then he unexpectedly went to the test area. I never expected that.

The plot isn't developing at all! Give us some substantial content to get the story going! Even if you delete the last dozen or so chapters, it won't affect the reading experience; in fact, it will improve the overall quality of the novel.

The plot was so bland! What's so interesting about the aliens? The secret realm was completely skipped – it was utterly uninteresting. The carrion crabs were much more interesting, though.

There's far too much description of aliens, really too much, to the point that it feels like the whole book is about them. Aliens are fine to write about, but there's no need to dedicate so many chapters to them. I skipped most of them; weren't the crab stories more appealing and interesting?

For example, Chapter 44 was standardized in a way that's a bit ridiculous. Strangely enough, the tribe that Lion Fang belongs to can be considered the source, not to mention how many talents it has cultivated, it seems that the cultivation started when they were young, yet when the mentor's tribe was attacked, not a single person went to provide support.